Changes

changes summer days shiver shadows ride the rising mists ~ orange red moon rise long days grow shorter wisps of afternoon linger ~ remnants of summer lazy fall mellows sleepy sunbeams stretch their legs ~ pumpkins glow amber red apples ripen golden pears grow large and sweet ~ boughs of fruit salad twilight comes early scarlet seeps into green leaves ~ autumn breath chills nights

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Susan Ashley

Date: 10/14/2023 11:32:00 AM

My Dearest Rhyme Time Friend, your poetic pen excels in this sumptuous string seasonal haiku! The graceful transition from late summer to autumn comes alive in splendid alliteration and sensory imagery that tantalizes the skin, tastebuds, eyes, but most of all, my imagination. I loved “sleepy sunbeams stretch their legs” -wow! Your poetic pen shines brighter than the sunbeams’ glow on golden pears, my sweet poetry sis! Your artistry continues to amaze me. Belated congratulations too! Warmest wishes sent on “shadows riding mists”.. ~Susan

Jeanette Brewin

Date: 10/14/2023 11:30:00 AM

A lovely description. Congratulations on your win.

Vijay Pandit

Date: 10/13/2023 11:50:00 AM

Splendid hues of season changing and wonderful fall imagery, Sam. Much enjoyed. BIG congrats for your poem being near the TOP of 100.

John Watt

Date: 10/13/2023 10:43:00 AM

What a great haiku series, Sam, a walkoff game winner! I love all your imagery in this segue of waning summer into waxing fall, a reader can see how much you love the season. So many delightful lines but "scarlet seeps into green leaves" and "sleepy sunbeams stretch their legs" are faves for me. Congrats for being ranked #2 on BNP list, definitely a Fav for me! Our teams may be watching the Fall Classic from home but at least Big Bad Blue is too! Autumn blessings to you, dear friend ~ John

John Hamilton

Date: 10/12/2023 6:54:00 PM

A wonderful write Sam no wonder it's high in the top 100, very worthy write.

Smita Kulkarni

Date: 10/12/2023 11:40:00 AM

Very beautifully penned. Loved reading it!

Susan Lawrence

Date: 10/6/2023 4:24:00 PM

Lovely and mesmerizing in its allure and beauty dear Sam ! I love each stanza which individually deliver mood and emotion and delight . Congratulations on your win ! Hugs and blessings, Susan :)

Brian Sambourne

Date: 9/29/2023 9:42:00 PM

Your Haiku's, Sam, string together shifting scenes of summer's slip into autumn. So nicely penned. Congratulations! Brian

Bill Baker

Date: 9/21/2023 4:14:00 PM

Loved reading your Haiku's today, Sam. You revealed the changing seasons well, my friend. Have a great week. Bill

Sam Kauffman
Date: 9/29/2023 10:34:00 AM

Thank you so much, Bill! Fall seems to have a little bit of leftover summer while slowly spreading her colorful spell over trees and harvests! Had fun observing the changes! Hope you are well. Have a wonderful weekend, my friend from Texas! Sending you blessings of autumn joy!!

Stephan McBride

Date: 9/21/2023 3:56:00 PM

What a masterpiece of a poem , you definitely bring the changes into a Serene and peaceful scenery

Sam Kauffman
Date: 9/29/2023 10:31:00 AM

Hi Stephan! Thank you so much for your gracious feedback - a gift and a blessing. As the seasons change we have so many reasons to celebrate and remember. I love the quote from Genesis that God created the seasons AND the festivals! Beauty and joy entwined. Sending blessings of autumn joy and my gratitude for your lovely feedback!

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 9/21/2023 10:57:00 AM

nicely done . Great image amber pumpkins and love this line: boughs of fruit salad

Sam Kauffman
Date: 9/21/2023 12:22:00 PM

Hi Andrea! Many thanks for your message. Fall is intrinsically so unique that, for me, it inspires and touches me in a way no other season can! Warm blessings of amber joy to you!

Hiya Sharma

Date: 9/21/2023 2:14:00 AM

Your descriptions and use of colours has absolutely made me spellbound! You're truly an exquisite poet who knows the art of carving emotions & depth in vivid imageries.. Your wordplay is so enchanting here and i especially love this part "twilight comes early scarlet seeps into green leaves ~ autumn breath chills nights" A gorgeously crafted chain of haikus.. "Orange red moon" Wowww!! Excellently eloquent and expressive, loved reading this!

Sotto Poet

Date: 9/20/2023 4:49:00 PM

Sam, I must commend your exceptional creativity in constructing this poem. It is truly a masterpiece, evoking the essence of autumn in such a splendid manner. The haiku you have crafted is nothing short of breathtaking, capturing the beauty of this season with every syllable. I am particularly captivated by the image of summer days, once warm and vibrant, now transformed into a chilling sensation.

Jan Allison

Date: 9/19/2023 11:48:00 AM

what gorgeous autumnal haiku i especially love the thought of summer days shivering:-) hugs Jan xx

Sam Kauffman
Date: 9/21/2023 9:41:00 AM

Thank you so much Jan. Autumn came suddenly this year with daytime and nighttime temperatures dropping even before the end of summer. I could see summer looking for a sweater! Blessings and hugs!

Paige Hind

Date: 9/18/2023 1:49:00 PM

Beautiful haikus, Sam! Love the last line about autumn breath chilling the night....

Sam Kauffman
Date: 9/21/2023 10:20:00 AM

Hi Paige! I am so happy that you enjoyed this haiku string! For me, the transition from summer to autumn has always been a time of amazement and wonder with chilly mornings, mellow afternoons and new frost on the pumpkins! Sending you warm blessings of autumn joy!

Sara Etgen-Baker

Date: 9/18/2023 1:03:00 PM

I love the string of Haiku's you put together, Sam. Each one tells me a bit about the summer's dying embers and the onset of fall. Well done, Sir

Tom Woody
Date: 9/18/2023 2:48:00 PM

Ha! I made the same mistake. Sam is a she

Charles Messina

Date: 9/16/2023 6:30:00 AM

Beautiful haiku's, Sam. Congratulations on your win! Hope all is well...Hugs Charlie

Sam Kauffman
Date: 9/21/2023 9:57:00 AM

Thank you so much, Charlie! Always wonderful to hear from you! All is well. Seems my "to do" list has the ability to propagate! Sometimes fall tiptoes in but this year it came with a thud! It was a delightful adventure to think about the coming of fall. Blessings and hugs to you my friend!!

Ink Empress

Date: 9/16/2023 2:23:00 AM

How rhythmic is this poem, the way you’ve painted imagery and how it flows is so stunning. I love “ summer days shiver” how deep is that and poetic, conveys so much and drew me right in. “Sleepy sunbeams stretch their legs” so clever and creative! I love that. “ scarlet seeps into green leaves” love that the way youv written in such a descriptive manner is impressive. “ autumn breath chills nights” brilliant! Very well crafted and delivered. I always love your artistic ways of expressing.

Ink Empress
Date: 9/21/2023 1:21:00 PM

I am not sure if you’ve ever heard of haiku sonnets? We do them on insta, its one of my fave forms i like doing. Haiku chain is beautiful too. You are amazing and yes im learning alot too here im always up for learning . Stay blessed beautiful

Sam Kauffman
Date: 9/21/2023 9:49:00 AM

Hi Inky! I am so humbled by your beautiful feedback! Thank you! I have learned so much here on the soup and had the privilege of reading beautiful writings like yours that continue to inspire me! Tom C. taught me to write haiku strings and I have thoroughly enjoyed exploring this poetic form with its emphasis on imagery and personification. Haiku has such a distinct lyrical cadence. It sings its own kind of music! Words are our BFFs! Thank you again for your perceptive analysis! Blessings of autumn joy to you!

I Am Anaya

Date: 9/15/2023 7:01:00 PM

Congratulations on your top win, Sam! I'm looking forward to all the things you've described so beautifully.

Sam Kauffman
Date: 9/21/2023 9:38:00 AM

Good morning Anaya! I always love your visits and your feedback. Now that I have let go of summer I, too, look forward to the crisp mornings, the mellow afternoons and living in the colors of the season. So grateful for your congratulations. Thank you! Blessings!

Speaks Volumes

Date: 9/15/2023 2:38:00 PM

Stunning Sam, Congrats

Sam Kauffman
Date: 9/18/2023 11:42:00 AM

Thank you so much, SV!!! Autumn truly is a storm of color swirling around us in a joyful dance! Sending you blessings of autumn joy!

Sotto Poet

Date: 9/15/2023 2:30:00 PM

Sam, I am truly delighted to offer my sincere congratulations for your well-earned win in my contest. Your poetry is truly awe-inspiring and captured very well the seasons changing

Sam Kauffman
Date: 9/21/2023 10:16:00 AM

Greetings, Lasaad! Thank you so much for your placement and for sponsoring this contest. Your contests always have an inherent challenge for me to reach into new expressions and articulate an experience with a fresh approach. What a gift, my friend. Sending you warm blessings of autumn joy.

Sara Etgen-Baker

Date: 9/15/2023 2:06:00 PM

ah, the changing of the seasons--you've captured it beautifully with your imagery within your Haikus. I especially like "sleepy sunbeams stretch their legs..." Wonderful!

Sam Kauffman
Date: 9/21/2023 10:12:00 AM

Hi Sara! I was hoping the subtle, and this year not so subtle, transition from summer to fall would come through in this haiku string! Thank you for your affirming feedback! Even though I have a hard time letting go of summer I do revel in the stunning beauty of fall! So grateful for your message! Blessings warm autumn joy to you!

Stephan McBride

Date: 9/15/2023 1:02:00 PM

Wow, your writings are wonderful in your gift of descriptive ways to tell and bring one into captivity of the scenery

Sam Kauffman
Date: 9/21/2023 10:06:00 AM

Hi Stephan! What a blessing your feedback is! Thank you! For me haiku is about imagery and drawing people into the lyric scenery of the haiku. You made my day with your feedback! Thank you for that blessing. Sending you warm autumn blessings of joy!

Silent One

Date: 9/15/2023 12:19:00 PM

You describe this so well.. With so much imagery in each of the haiku you have created here.. seasonal delights portrayed through your most poetic imagination.. sleepy sunbeams stretch their legs... love that one..

Sam Kauffman
Date: 9/21/2023 10:03:00 AM

Hi SO! Please forgive my delay in responding to your lovely message! Your messages are always so uplifting! For me one of the hallmarks of haiku is imagery. So much fun to delve into its rich depths! I, too, that that line. Sending you blessings of autumn joy!

Tom Woody

Date: 9/15/2023 12:12:00 PM

You describe the seasonal transition flawlessly with your haikus Sam. "Scarlet seeps into green leaves ..." Nice line. Now if only they would stay on the dang limbs!

Sam Kauffman
Date: 9/18/2023 11:34:00 AM

Thank you so much Tom! I was hoping that the slow transition from summer to fall would come through in the haiku string! Thank you so much for affirming my efforts! I so appreciate your visit and your perceptive feedback! Blessings of autumn beauty to you!