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Cayucos By the Bay, California

Springtime has her way-- as well, she has her will. What more is there left to say on this sea-salt, sultry day. 'Tis hot, the wind is still. Springtime has her way on hilltops by the bay-- Cayucos 'neath a flowering hill. What more is there left to say of lupines bright and gay-- of hilltop fields they fill. Springtime has her way as seashells wash and stay within the sand. Yet still, what more is there left to say on this idyllic day of sights and sounds, as idyll springtime has her way. What more is there left to say. Entered into Brian Strand's June 22 All Yours Contest Won 1st Place

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Bray Holt

Date: 5/6/2024 12:26:00 AM

Thank you for this great poem, Carol. It is very seldom I come cross words that bring pleasant emotion and serene mental images that linger in my mind through the noise of the day.

Carol Louise Moon
Date: 5/6/2024 7:21:00 PM

Dear Bray, I am glad you enjoyed it. My family visited Cayucos many times as a child, so there are fond memories there. God bless. Carol Louise

Evelyn Judy Buehler

Date: 8/30/2021 3:49:00 PM

Magnificent words and imagery, Carol. Best of wishes, Evelyn

Carol Louise Moon
Date: 8/31/2021 5:49:00 AM

Thank you so much, Evelyn.

Harry Horsman

Date: 7/11/2021 8:54:00 PM

Springtime has her way. When one can produce poetry as good as this....

Jennifer Fenn

Date: 7/8/2021 5:43:00 PM

Congrats on 1st place! I can see why you got it. This poem is gorgeous! God bless!

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 7/7/2021 12:14:00 PM

this seems like a more modern version of villanelle. but wow, i sure do like this. It's a real beauty and congrats on your win,

Susan Ashley

Date: 7/3/2021 9:57:00 AM

Dear Carol, my heart's imagination is enraptured. The sumptuous imagery of this brilliant piece brings me to the white shores of "Cayucos 'neath a flowering hill" where "seashells wash and stay within the sand" - a salty-aired, beautiful place to be! I relish your golden pen, sweet poetess, you never cease to amaze with your poetic gift. Warmest wishes, my lovely friend.. ~Susan

Carol Louise Moon
Date: 7/4/2021 7:34:00 AM

So good to hear from you, Susan. I'm so glad you like this poem. I spent many childhood days at both Cayucos and Morro Bay. My sister spent her adult years kayaking there (which is what Cayucos means). Carol Louise

Joanna Daniel

Date: 6/29/2021 1:17:00 AM

Very lovely write, Carol, congratulations:)

Carol Louise Moon
Date: 7/4/2021 7:27:00 AM

Thank you, Jo, for appreciating my poem. Carol Louise

Kim Rodrigues

Date: 6/26/2021 5:40:00 AM

I see why you placed first! This is a lovely villanelle and a fave for me!

Carol Louise Moon
Date: 6/26/2021 7:41:00 AM

Thank you, Kim. I'm honored that it is a fave for you! Carol Louise

Sam Kauffman

Date: 6/23/2021 12:30:00 PM

Love your opening, Carol Louise. It swept me into the surging waves, flowers and shells of the Bay. Then, with its repetition keep me floating on the tides. Congratulations on your win with this absolutely delightful, well crafted poem! Blessings!

Carol Louise Moon
Date: 6/23/2021 8:14:00 PM

Thank you so much, Sam!!

Harry Horsman

Date: 6/22/2021 10:16:00 PM

Springtime sure does have her way, so perpetual comes through winter's frozen nuance. Love this Carol wonderful poetry it is.

Carol Louise Moon
Date: 6/23/2021 8:13:00 PM

Thank you so much, Harry.

Christuraj Alex

Date: 6/22/2021 10:14:00 AM

Wonderful imagery. Congratulations!

Carol Louise Moon
Date: 6/23/2021 8:13:00 PM

Thank you, Christuraj. Carol Louise