Cathedral

reinforced concrete curves over stone ~ props up fresh air inside a dome

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Christopher Flaherty

Date: 7/27/2021 12:38:00 PM

Fresh , Hot , Air

David Kavanagh
Date: 7/27/2021 12:42:00 PM

How about thin air, your on the right track.

Kai Michael Neumann

Date: 7/24/2021 4:53:00 AM

Nice one.

David Kavanagh
Date: 7/24/2021 6:05:00 AM

Thank you for stopping by my poems today, cheers David

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 7/22/2021 3:58:00 PM

I see a deeper meaning was involved. you are a clever one!!

David Kavanagh
Date: 7/22/2021 4:07:00 PM

Thank you Andrea, Maybe that was always the idea, but I only realised when pondering over the first draft, cheers David

Sotto Poet

Date: 7/21/2021 3:50:00 PM

Very well penned. With each spin, new air flows, but are they simply for cooling the air? Thought-provoking Monoku.

David Kavanagh
Date: 7/22/2021 1:36:00 AM

Thank you for stopping by Lasaad I was merely contemplating the sheer weight of materials that went into building cathedral domes, thousands of tons in some cases, but was it just to give the impression of a weightless airy bubble to the observer? which in turn led me to another meaning, which I will leave up to the reader, cheers David