Jan Allison Poet Choka

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Caterpillar Choka

inching down a leaf
you nibble voraciously …
time for your afternoon nap

hanging from a twig
wrapped in a pure silk blanket
metamorphosis occurs

butterfly hatches
wings unfold in warm sunshine
dazzling debutante rises

5,7,7,5,7,7,5,7,7 checked with how many syllables

Compose a Choka Contest Sponsored by Janis Thompson
07~18

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Jean Murray August 5, 2016 at 2:07 PM You're so good at transforming numbers into beautiful poems Jan. Well done!

Dr. Upma A. Sharma August 5, 2016 at 8:41 AM Congrats Jan for a deserved top place with this lovely choka !!

Teddy Kimathi July 27, 2016 at 5:53 AM Congrats Jan, for your well, deserved first placement in the contest!! ;-) Jan Allison July 27, 2016 at 6:05 AM Thanks Teddy I am still smiling that Janis liked my first attempt at the form so much:-) hugs Jan xx

Karam Misra July 27, 2016 at 1:27 AM I can imago the transformation to a beautiful butterfly as your poem unfolds the drama of the metamorphosis so pupa-bly! Congratulations on your fantastic and well deserved first place, Jan. The fantastic applies to the poem, too. ~karam~ Karam Misra July 27, 2016 at 7:07 AM Slighted? LOL - let's blame the whipping boy - Autocorrect! ~karam~ Jan Allison July 27, 2016 at 6:04 AM Thanks so much Karam it was my first attempt at the form so was slighted to place so well:-) hugs Jan xx

Michael Dom July 25, 2016 at 11:27 AM congratulations on your winning observation of caterpillars. Jan Allison July 25, 2016 at 6:13 PM Thanks so much Michael:-) hugs Jan xx

John Lawless July 25, 2016 at 10:54 AM Well Jan, it seems the caterpillar's shared their secrets with you and you made them proud with this top spot beauty. Jan Allison July 25, 2016 at 10:58 AM Thanks John I was delighted to place so well with my first attempt at this form:-) hugs Jan xx

Sandra Haight July 24, 2016 at 5:29 PM Jan, congratulations on your solo First Place win in the 'Choka' contest! Love your theme and how you addressed it. Hugs, Sandra Jan Allison July 24, 2016 at 5:40 PM Thanks Sandra I was absolutely delighted that Janis liked my poem so much:-) hugs Jan xx

Alexis Y. July 24, 2016 at 2:54 PM Hi Jan, Congratulations on your top win. It was well deserved: -) Alexis Jan Allison July 24, 2016 at 2:55 PM Thanks so much Alexis:-) hugs Jan xx

Laura Leiser July 24, 2016 at 1:37 PM Back to congratulate you on your top win, Jan! :) Jan Allison July 24, 2016 at 2:05 PM Thanks Laura I am delighted to place so well:-) hugs Jan xx

Paul Callus July 24, 2016 at 10:17 AM Back with congratulations, Jan!! Well done...I felt that the end line would clinch a high spot. hugs // paul Jan Allison July 24, 2016 at 12:36 PM Thanks Paul I was unsure of that line until I saw Connie's comment:-) hugs jan xx

Kim Rodrigues July 24, 2016 at 8:22 AM Congratulations Jan! Jan Allison July 24, 2016 at 8:23 AM Thanks Kim I'm absolutely delighted to place so well with my first attempt:-) hugs jan xx

Charlie Smith July 24, 2016 at 1:22 AM A most deserved win Dear Jan, congratulations... Jan Allison July 24, 2016 at 8:00 AM Thanks Charlie I am delighted as it is my first attempt at this form:-) hugs Jan xx

Phillip Garcia July 23, 2016 at 7:14 PM Dammit Jan. You're the one who encouraged be yo write for the choka contest and then you did me dirty by snatching away my first 1st place finish. Keep it up and you'll be having an unfriendly ode written about you =p Jan Allison July 23, 2016 at 7:27 PM Sorry Phillip - it was my first attempt at this form so I was shocked to see my name at the top - I guess there may be a run on Jan shaped voodoo dolls lol - lol:-) hugs Jan xx

Janis Medders Tobechi July 23, 2016 at 7:06 PM Congratulations, Jan. The creature was so alive and dainty. It was a beautiful choka. The line about the debutante got it..... Jan Allison July 23, 2016 at 7:24 PM Thanks Janis I was absolutely delighted to place so well. I was a little unsure about the debutante line, but when Connie commented below I knew it was going to be ok:-) have got a massive smile thank you so much:-) hugs jan xx

John Lawless July 23, 2016 at 4:06 PM the ultimate "coming out" party. Nicely written Jan I see it alighting on the winners list. Jan Allison July 23, 2016 at 4:11 PM Thanks John it's my first attempt at the form, I hope Janis likes it:-) hugs Jan xx

Paul Callus July 21, 2016 at 4:55 PM From a crawler to a flier...capably transformed. Well presented choka, Jan. gl in the contest. hugs // paul Jan Allison July 21, 2016 at 5:05 PM Thanks so much Paul:-) hugs Jan xx

Supraja Kannan July 21, 2016 at 12:15 PM Beautifully written Jan... I am raising butterflies indoor and learning a lot from these beautiful creatures... Good luck in the contest... Jan Allison July 21, 2016 at 12:18 PM oh how wonderful Supraja:-) hugs Jan xx

Andrea Dietrich July 21, 2016 at 9:51 AM Jan, if you like my alternate ending better than first one,I hoped you would show THAT limerick and not the other ending. I left it to you to decide.(I just did it so darn quickly) If you have no favorite ending, you can keep how you showed it. you are sure getting a lot of limericks on that one!! Jan Allison July 21, 2016 at 10:50 AM Will amend it to the 2nd ending - I wasn't sure if you wanted them both seen:-) hugs Jan xx

Andrea Dietrich July 21, 2016 at 9:50 AM very cute ending on your poem, Jan!! Jan Allison July 21, 2016 at 10:49 AM Thanks Andrea:-) hugs Jan xx

Casarah Nance July 20, 2016 at 8:27 PM that is the music of nature, a great choka Jan, I think you got it just right ;) Jan Allison July 21, 2016 at 2:15 AM Thanks Cas its my first attempt at the form:-) hugs Jan x

Laura Leiser July 20, 2016 at 3:08 PM Beautiful visuals in your lovely string of chokas, Jan. Good luck in the contest:) Jan Allison July 20, 2016 at 3:27 PM Thanks Laura:-) hugs jan xx

Viv Wigley July 19, 2016 at 11:24 PM Terrific, Jan, I can almost see you counting the syllables for 'metamorphosis' on your fingers. Lovely piece, will do well. Viv x Jan Allison July 20, 2016 at 7:42 AM Thanks Mr Viv - a syllable counter is also such a useful tool lol:-) hugs Jan xx

Demetrios Trifiatis July 19, 2016 at 11:03 AM Parade of poetic metamorphosis from chrysalis to butterfly dear, Jan! 7-7-7! Jan Allison July 20, 2016 at 7:41 AM Thanks Demetrios I hope Janis likes it as its my first attempt at this form:-) hugs Jan xx

Tim Smith July 19, 2016 at 6:11 AM Wonderful write for the contest Jan. Best of luck. Jan Allison July 19, 2016 at 6:23 AM Thanks Tim:-)this is my first attempt at this form I hope Janis likes it:-) hugs Jan xx

Joanna Daniel July 19, 2016 at 5:06 AM The transformation from caterpillar to a butterfly is just a small example of God's amazing wonders:) Your choka beautifully describes this:) Jan Allison July 19, 2016 at 6:22 AM Thanks Jo I have never written this form before I hope it's correct:-) hugs Jan xx

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