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Caterpillar Choka

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inching down a leaf you nibble voraciously … time for your afternoon nap hanging from a twig wrapped in a pure silk blanket metamorphosis occurs butterfly hatches wings unfold in warm sunshine dazzling debutante rises 5,7,7,5,7,7,5,7,7 checked with how many syllables Compose a Choka Contest Sponsored by Janis Thompson 07~18

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Jean Murray

Date: 8/5/2016 2:07:00 PM

You're so good at transforming numbers into beautiful poems Jan. Well done!

Dr. Upma A. Sharma

Date: 8/5/2016 8:41:00 AM

Congrats Jan for a deserved top place with this lovely choka !!

Teddy Kimathi

Date: 7/27/2016 5:53:00 AM

Congrats Jan, for your well, deserved first placement in the contest!! ;-)

Jan Allison
Date: 7/27/2016 6:05:00 AM

Thanks Teddy I am still smiling that Janis liked my first attempt at the form so much:-) hugs Jan xx

Karam Misra

Date: 7/27/2016 1:27:00 AM

I can imago the transformation to a beautiful butterfly as your poem unfolds the drama of the metamorphosis so pupa-bly! Congratulations on your fantastic and well deserved first place, Jan. The fantastic applies to the poem, too. ~karam~

Karam Misra
Date: 7/27/2016 7:07:00 AM

Slighted? LOL - let's blame the whipping boy - Autocorrect! ~karam~

Jan Allison
Date: 7/27/2016 6:04:00 AM

Thanks so much Karam it was my first attempt at the form so was slighted to place so well:-) hugs Jan xx

Michael Dom

Date: 7/25/2016 11:27:00 AM

congratulations on your winning observation of caterpillars.

Jan Allison
Date: 7/25/2016 6:13:00 PM

Thanks so much Michael:-) hugs Jan xx

John Lawless

Date: 7/25/2016 10:54:00 AM

Well Jan, it seems the caterpillar's shared their secrets with you and you made them proud with this top spot beauty.

Jan Allison
Date: 7/25/2016 10:58:00 AM

Thanks John I was delighted to place so well with my first attempt at this form:-) hugs Jan xx

Sandra Haight

Date: 7/24/2016 5:29:00 PM

Jan, congratulations on your solo First Place win in the 'Choka' contest! Love your theme and how you addressed it. Hugs, Sandra

Jan Allison
Date: 7/24/2016 5:40:00 PM

Thanks Sandra I was absolutely delighted that Janis liked my poem so much:-) hugs Jan xx

Alexis Y.

Date: 7/24/2016 2:54:00 PM

Hi Jan, Congratulations on your top win. It was well deserved: -) Alexis

Jan Allison
Date: 7/24/2016 2:55:00 PM

Thanks so much Alexis:-) hugs Jan xx

Laura Leiser

Date: 7/24/2016 1:37:00 PM

Back to congratulate you on your top win, Jan! :)

Jan Allison
Date: 7/24/2016 2:05:00 PM

Thanks Laura I am delighted to place so well:-) hugs Jan xx

Paul Callus

Date: 7/24/2016 10:17:00 AM

Back with congratulations, Jan!! Well done...I felt that the end line would clinch a high spot. hugs // paul

Jan Allison
Date: 7/24/2016 12:36:00 PM

Thanks Paul I was unsure of that line until I saw Connie's comment:-) hugs jan xx

Kim Rodrigues

Date: 7/24/2016 8:22:00 AM

Congratulations Jan!

Jan Allison
Date: 7/24/2016 8:23:00 AM

Thanks Kim I'm absolutely delighted to place so well with my first attempt:-) hugs jan xx

Charlie Smith

Date: 7/24/2016 1:22:00 AM

A most deserved win Dear Jan, congratulations...

Jan Allison
Date: 7/24/2016 8:00:00 AM

Thanks Charlie I am delighted as it is my first attempt at this form:-) hugs Jan xx

Phillip Garcia

Date: 7/23/2016 7:14:00 PM

Dammit Jan. You're the one who encouraged be yo write for the choka contest and then you did me dirty by snatching away my first 1st place finish. Keep it up and you'll be having an unfriendly ode written about you =p

Jan Allison
Date: 7/23/2016 7:27:00 PM

Sorry Phillip - it was my first attempt at this form so I was shocked to see my name at the top - I guess there may be a run on Jan shaped voodoo dolls lol - lol:-) hugs Jan xx

Janis Thompson

Date: 7/23/2016 7:06:00 PM

Congratulations, Jan. The creature was so alive and dainty. It was a beautiful choka. The line about the debutante got it.....

Jan Allison
Date: 7/23/2016 7:24:00 PM

Thanks Janis I was absolutely delighted to place so well. I was a little unsure about the debutante line, but when Connie commented below I knew it was going to be ok:-) have got a massive smile thank you so much:-) hugs jan xx

John Lawless

Date: 7/23/2016 4:06:00 PM

the ultimate "coming out" party. Nicely written Jan I see it alighting on the winners list.

Jan Allison
Date: 7/23/2016 4:11:00 PM

Thanks John it's my first attempt at the form, I hope Janis likes it:-) hugs Jan xx

Paul Callus

Date: 7/21/2016 4:55:00 PM

From a crawler to a flier...capably transformed. Well presented choka, Jan. gl in the contest. hugs // paul

Jan Allison
Date: 7/21/2016 5:05:00 PM

Thanks so much Paul:-) hugs Jan xx

Supraja Kannan

Date: 7/21/2016 12:15:00 PM

Beautifully written Jan... I am raising butterflies indoor and learning a lot from these beautiful creatures... Good luck in the contest...

Jan Allison
Date: 7/21/2016 12:18:00 PM

oh how wonderful Supraja:-) hugs Jan xx

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 7/21/2016 9:51:00 AM

Jan, if you like my alternate ending better than first one,I hoped you would show THAT limerick and not the other ending. I left it to you to decide.(I just did it so darn quickly) If you have no favorite ending, you can keep how you showed it. you are sure getting a lot of limericks on that one!!

Jan Allison
Date: 7/21/2016 10:50:00 AM

Will amend it to the 2nd ending - I wasn't sure if you wanted them both seen:-) hugs Jan xx

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 7/21/2016 9:50:00 AM

very cute ending on your poem, Jan!!

Jan Allison
Date: 7/21/2016 10:49:00 AM

Thanks Andrea:-) hugs Jan xx

Casarah Nance

Date: 7/20/2016 8:27:00 PM

that is the music of nature, a great choka Jan, I think you got it just right ;)

Jan Allison
Date: 7/21/2016 2:15:00 AM

Thanks Cas its my first attempt at the form:-) hugs Jan x

Laura Leiser

Date: 7/20/2016 3:08:00 PM

Beautiful visuals in your lovely string of chokas, Jan. Good luck in the contest:)

Jan Allison
Date: 7/20/2016 3:27:00 PM

Thanks Laura:-) hugs jan xx

Viv Wigley

Date: 7/19/2016 11:24:00 PM

Terrific, Jan, I can almost see you counting the syllables for 'metamorphosis' on your fingers. Lovely piece, will do well. Viv x

Jan Allison
Date: 7/20/2016 7:42:00 AM

Thanks Mr Viv - a syllable counter is also such a useful tool lol:-) hugs Jan xx

Demetrios Trifiatis

Date: 7/19/2016 11:03:00 AM

Parade of poetic metamorphosis from chrysalis to butterfly dear, Jan! 7-7-7!

Jan Allison
Date: 7/20/2016 7:41:00 AM

Thanks Demetrios I hope Janis likes it as its my first attempt at this form:-) hugs Jan xx

Tim Smith

Date: 7/19/2016 6:11:00 AM

Wonderful write for the contest Jan. Best of luck.

Jan Allison
Date: 7/19/2016 6:23:00 AM

Thanks Tim:-)this is my first attempt at this form I hope Janis likes it:-) hugs Jan xx

Joanna Daniel

Date: 7/19/2016 5:06:00 AM

The transformation from caterpillar to a butterfly is just a small example of God's amazing wonders:) Your choka beautifully describes this:)

Jan Allison
Date: 7/19/2016 6:22:00 AM

Thanks Jo I have never written this form before I hope it's correct:-) hugs Jan xx