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Castle On the Hill

Entering the castle and an evil fog enveloped me
As on the bastions of the fortress I roamed.
Fear gripped me as I fell faint on my knee.
Men lay dead on the hillside as horses' mouths foamed.

The bloody battle was won it seemed,
Bounty purloined but at what a price.
Yet in my ears I could still hear how soldiers screamed,
No riches could make them happy nor life suffice.

The fog dissipated and a vortex took me down
Inside the castle's dark and hideous caves,
Chained to the wall was the skeleton of a clown,
While on the rack I heard the groans of condemned knaves.

Tears in my eyes, I was momentarily blinded
I lost my way in the putrid alleys of the castle
I fell and for a while was truly winded,
As a pair of hands picked me up without further hassle.

The kitchen was warm and full of savoury smells
A robust man offered me scones and a cup of hot tea.
From far off I heard the peals of joyous bells
"Be careful of ghosts," he laughed with obvious glee.
Copyright © | Year Posted 2021

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Roper Avatar
May 29, 2021 at 7:46 AM
Enjoy the eerie story, well written.
Y. Avatar
May 28, 2021 at 11:32 PM
WoW! Victory, You penned such a captivating story. Was it a dream? Or was the character in your well-written write really in castle on a hill? Nevertheless, you told a good story with good content, rhymes, and imagery. Excellent job. Have a great evening and weekend:-) Alexis
Jayasankar Avatar
May 28, 2021 at 10:35 PM
What a beautiful imaginative story you have penned Victor... Loved it... God bless.. ~ Ani
Edmonds  Avatar
May 28, 2021 at 3:34 PM
Victor, It must have been scary inside those castle walls, still scones and hot tea must have made the visit worth it after all… Belle
Ball Avatar
May 28, 2021 at 9:57 AM
WoW Victor. Either you had quite a dream or you visited an old castle and histories ghosts descended upon you. Either way this is a fine write and would even be fit for a Halloween tale. God Bless, JB
Poet Avatar
May 28, 2021 at 7:57 AM
Victor, your stories have never failed me, and Your interesting tale piqued my interest. You have a firm grasp of how to utilize Imagery to tell a story. Have a great day
Rose  Avatar
May 28, 2021 at 5:36 AM
Your sweet imagination has no boundaries today Victor, glad you had the sweet smell of the kitchen to contend to. I love scones and tea. wish I could have been there too, tea for two or three lol
Cunningham Avatar
May 28, 2021 at 5:30 AM
Enjoyed your spooky tale Victor, there's definitely another side to our existence. Tom
Daniel Avatar
May 28, 2021 at 5:15 AM
Wow! I was with you there inside the castle and my pulse is still racing, wonderful poetry, Victor, you have an unrivalled imagination:)
Pandit Avatar
May 28, 2021 at 4:58 AM
The ending made me smile. A story spun from your gifted pen, Victor, never disappoints.
Seeker Avatar
May 28, 2021 at 4:20 AM
What will it be ... real world or dream world? Well penned, Victor!
Rodrigues Avatar
May 28, 2021 at 4:11 AM
Quite the ghost story!
Ricci Avatar
May 28, 2021 at 4:04 AM
Yes Victor you know how to tell a story with imagery. You do provide imagery here within your entry. Thank you for sharing the castle on the hill. Have a wonderful day and enjoy poetry soup.
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