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Entering the castle and an evil fog enveloped me As on the bastions of the fortress I roamed. Fear gripped me as I fell faint on my knee. Men lay dead on the hillside as horses' mouths foamed. The bloody battle was won it seemed, Bounty purloined but at what a price. Yet in my ears I could still hear how soldiers screamed, No riches could make them happy nor life suffice. The fog dissipated and a vortex took me down Inside the castle's dark and hideous caves, Chained to the wall was the skeleton of a clown, While on the rack I heard the groans of condemned knaves. Tears in my eyes, I was momentarily blinded I lost my way in the putrid alleys of the castle I fell and for a while was truly winded, As a pair of hands picked me up without further hassle. The kitchen was warm and full of savoury smells A robust man offered me scones and a cup of hot tea. From far off I heard the peals of joyous bells "Be careful of ghosts," he laughed with obvious glee.

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Date: 5/29/2021 7:46:00 AM
Enjoy the eerie story, well written.
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Date: 5/28/2021 11:32:00 PM
WoW! Victory, You penned such a captivating story. Was it a dream? Or was the character in your well-written write really in castle on a hill? Nevertheless, you told a good story with good content, rhymes, and imagery. Excellent job. Have a great evening and weekend:-) Alexis
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Date: 5/28/2021 10:35:00 PM
What a beautiful imaginative story you have penned Victor... Loved it... God bless.. ~ Ani
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Date: 5/28/2021 3:34:00 PM
Victor, It must have been scary inside those castle walls, still scones and hot tea must have made the visit worth it after all… Belle
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Date: 5/28/2021 9:57:00 AM
WoW Victor. Either you had quite a dream or you visited an old castle and histories ghosts descended upon you. Either way this is a fine write and would even be fit for a Halloween tale. God Bless, JB
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Date: 5/28/2021 7:57:00 AM
Victor, your stories have never failed me, and Your interesting tale piqued my interest. You have a firm grasp of how to utilize Imagery to tell a story. Have a great day
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Date: 5/28/2021 5:36:00 AM
Your sweet imagination has no boundaries today Victor, glad you had the sweet smell of the kitchen to contend to. I love scones and tea. wish I could have been there too, tea for two or three lol
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Date: 5/28/2021 5:30:00 AM
Enjoyed your spooky tale Victor, there's definitely another side to our existence. Tom
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Date: 5/28/2021 5:15:00 AM
Wow! I was with you there inside the castle and my pulse is still racing, wonderful poetry, Victor, you have an unrivalled imagination:)
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Date: 5/28/2021 4:58:00 AM
The ending made me smile. A story spun from your gifted pen, Victor, never disappoints.
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Date: 5/28/2021 4:20:00 AM
What will it be ... real world or dream world? Well penned, Victor!
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Date: 5/28/2021 4:11:00 AM
Quite the ghost story!
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Date: 5/28/2021 4:04:00 AM
Yes Victor you know how to tell a story with imagery. You do provide imagery here within your entry. Thank you for sharing the castle on the hill. Have a wonderful day and enjoy poetry soup.
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