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Careless

I slept
full of hope and dreams
I awoke 
empty and forgotten
Careless as I was back then

Morning sounds
swirling in my ears
Pointless thoughts
filling my head

"She can."
but will she ever again
"She is."
though no longer for me

I stood
alone and stiff
I walked
slow and without purpose
Careless as I was back then

The smell of spring
mingled with sunshine
as the touch of day
warmed me no more

"I was."
but I threw it all away
"I did." 
though I do not know why

I hoped
for a day without me
I cried
where no one could see
Careless as I was back then

Was this longing
joyless and caretaking
awaiting its chance
to bring me home again

Or was I lost
forever here like a wounded angel
Despaired and angry
the evening came again

Without warning
Without love
Without consumption
Without her

"In her arms,"
I wondered as the sun slipped away
"would I feel whole again?"
my hurt had wasted another day

I laid down
empty and forgotten
I slept 
full of hope and dreams
Careless as I was back then

Copyright © | Year Posted 2008




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Date: 11/21/2008 3:22:00 PM
Thought provoking poem, and so well deserverved to be featured this week. I didn't catch it the first time, so glad I read through the features this week! ~ Carrie
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Date: 11/19/2008 6:05:00 AM
Congratulations on your well deserved poetry being featured this week. Love, Carol
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Date: 11/18/2008 4:36:00 PM
A contest winner and now a featured write. This poem is definitely a hit! Congratulations. Karen
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Date: 11/18/2008 1:33:00 PM
This poem reads like a journey through the soul - Amazing poetic talent - Congratulations on being featured - God Bless, MJ
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Date: 11/18/2008 1:33:00 PM
This poem reads like a journey through the soul - Amazing poetic talent - Congratulations on being featured - God Bless, MJ
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Date: 11/18/2008 5:18:00 AM
Congrats on this write. I like the 8th stanza in particular....that retrospect becoming here and now. Very tender.... I commiserate. Love, daver
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Date: 11/17/2008 10:44:00 AM
Congratulations on "Careless" being featured. Vince
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Date: 9/29/2008 8:59:00 PM
A very touching poetry here! You deserve to win 100 percent! Brgds. George
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Date: 9/10/2008 3:50:00 AM
Congrats!
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Date: 9/2/2008 11:56:00 AM
Congratulations. This is a very lovely poem. It showed a lot of emotion that can be felt in the heart.You can expect me to read more of your work.
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Date: 8/31/2008 6:10:00 PM
Congratulation on placing first in Mark's contest with this well-written poem. I like the conversational style of this piece. The title compliments the poem. Wishing you continued success with your writing. Karen
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Date: 8/30/2008 6:17:00 AM
Dear Bradley, This is a sensational poem - conveying the deepest depth of emtions felt by the soul. Congratulations on your well deserved win. Lainie
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Date: 8/27/2008 12:09:00 PM
Please except my congratualtions on your well deserved first place win. It is a superb poem. -ED-
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Date: 8/27/2008 11:31:00 AM
Congratulations on your wonderful first place write in Marks contest! Laura
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Date: 8/27/2008 4:15:00 AM
*"She is." though no longer for me* the pain of a lover lost, knowing she still loves but never again with me. I remember this. Not a happy memory! Youe poem very evocative Congratulations on your win
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Date: 8/27/2008 1:40:00 AM
brilliant original piece! i love the way the short staccato lines enhance the meaning. And the repetition is very effective in creating the mood of the poem.Lovely use of language throughout the poem.I was very moved
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Date: 8/26/2008 6:00:00 PM
Bradley, Mark is a wonderful judge and I can see why he picked your poem for First Place. I too, was deeply touched, and I am so sorry I ever missed this remarkable poem. Sadly I have tried and I am unable to comment on any of your poems due to technical difficulties. Hope this has now changed. Warmest congrats on a most well deserved First Place win and please keep writing. Love, Shar
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Date: 8/26/2008 5:51:00 PM
Nice work Bradley
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Date: 6/11/2008 6:19:00 PM
Interesting reflection. Fitting title. Welcome to Poetry Soup! I hope you enjoy your time spent here. Best wishes with your writing. Karen
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Date: 6/11/2008 6:18:00 PM
Interesting reflection. Fitting title. Welcome to Poetry Soup! I hope you enjoy your time spent here. Best wishes with your writing. Karen
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Date: 6/11/2008 6:18:00 PM
Interesting reflection. Fitting title. Welcome to Poetry Soup! I hope you enjoy your time spent here. Best wishes with your writing. Karen
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