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Captivated

as deep as the ocean my thoughts dare to dive as strong as devotion my will has designed as long as i breathe or could there be an end of time as in all love stories everything will be fine as distant as the farthest star i would follow you there as words they make vivid pictures they're there to prove i care as the sun goes down another day look up to God and then i pray and as the stars slowly appear each wish i make to bring you nearer

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Cecilia Macfarlane

Date: 2/15/2012 3:01:00 PM

A very charming well written write!

Maureen Lefanue

Date: 2/14/2012 2:06:00 AM

Thanks, John, for your kind comment re my poem. I enjoyed reading your well written poem, Captivated. Cheers, Maureen

Nette Onclaud

Date: 1/17/2012 7:18:00 AM

incredibly written, john... such graceful movement and tonality of pharses..:) huggs!

Sara Kendrick

Date: 1/16/2012 3:19:00 PM

Enjoyed this one..I feel the love in this one..Very passionate work..Sara

Elizabeth Wesley

Date: 1/15/2012 8:39:00 AM

I'm feeling that this has to do with a memory John. Sounds like it sustains you in the most amazing way. Hugs, Lizzie :)

Date: 1/15/2012 7:17:00 PM

No. It is a generalization of the power of love. Yes it comes from memory but they are maternal and have graduated sence then. I'm sorry for what I did to make you block me for these few days. And even sorrier that you had to come back because you know I have the fire. At least for now .

Carol Eastman

Date: 1/15/2012 7:45:00 AM

Wonderfully and beautifully written. Amen.

Dinda Minardi

Date: 1/14/2012 5:54:00 AM

A love poem to God. this is very sweet I must say, Enjoyed this a lot :)

M.I.A .

Date: 1/14/2012 3:16:00 AM

wow! truly captivating indeed. there's a raw emotion here that simply make this poem 'burns'

Robert Pettit

Date: 1/13/2012 3:47:00 PM

Nice poem John. In your fifth line, all you have to do is put an "e" on the end of "breath". What you have there now is the noun, but you need the verb. Adding the "e" to the end of that noun will make it a verb. Everything else looks fine.

Milton Toran

Date: 1/13/2012 12:30:00 PM

I truly am captivated by this marvelous piece! What I think is so brilliant is the fact that you chose to write in lower-cased letters and capitalize the "G" in God. I appreciate a writer (poet) who's not afraid to "shake" things up a bit! Well done!...Milt

Brenda Victoria Northeast

Date: 1/12/2012 6:08:00 PM

So heartfelt and true, blessings to you, all the very best John and thank you for your visit, love in Christ, brenda : )

Natalie The Rogue Rhymer

Date: 1/12/2012 5:57:00 PM

John-This is such a strong motivational piece-it's just great! You are being WAY too nice to me today BTW :)