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For Andrea Dietrich's put your best sijo forward poetry contest.

I would not say this was my best sijo, but wanted to post a new one.

Also it doesnt matter what kind of bird you are... You should be able to love anyone you want to..

A Sijo is a type of poem that has three lines containing fourteen to sixteen lines each. The Sijo is a poem of Korean descent where each line of the poem having its own role. The first line is used in order to introduce the theme or topic of the poem. In the second line is meant to delve deeper, give more information about the theme that was introduced in the first line. It's meant to change or agree with and give detail on what the poem is about. The last line of a Sijo poem is the conclusion line. It takes the information from the second line about the topic from the first line and ends it in a way that is both beautiful and satisfying, or challenging depending on the poet. The ending line is not meant to be predictable, in fact, it's meant to twist what you know so that it is unexpected and enjoyable. A Sijo was originally meant to be sung so each line should have its own natural break. 

Sijo is the classic form of unrhymed poetry in Korea. Sijo have three long lines. Each line varies between 14 and 16 syllables, with the middle line often the longest. The first line states a theme, the second line counters it, and the third line resolves the poem.

Caged Warbler

Lonesome heart beats like a caged warbler without a morning song, pining to be free, before cherry blossoms float away with breeze. Hope arrives as a Lovebird opens lock for him to spread wings.
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Kendrick Avatar
February 5, 2024 at 10:21 AM
Back with congratulations on your winning work in Andrea's contest. Way to go. I enjoyed reading your lines. Sara K
Dietrich Avatar
February 4, 2024 at 1:13 PM
This one is so sweet, Silent One. A well-deserved win on the podium. Congrats.
White Avatar
January 23, 2024 at 11:49 AM
I love this so ethereal and free, SO, Kelli
Canerdy Avatar
January 22, 2024 at 4:47 PM
Well done, expressive, sweet, S.O. Janice
Herrick Avatar
January 20, 2024 at 3:19 PM
Cherry Blossoms and not letting their oppor-tune time be a set wing over the face of regret. Lovely Dovey dove dove right in and spread wings of hope. Knowing that's why they are there.
May Avatar
January 20, 2024 at 2:40 PM
At last a morning song is possible, I like how you ended your Sijo Silent, GL in the contest
Buehler Avatar
January 20, 2024 at 2:22 PM
What a lovely feeling of escape that must have been! A fabulous love tale, Silent One. BOL in the contest. :)
Poet Avatar
January 20, 2024 at 1:12 PM
I thoroughly enjoyed the clever use of rhyme in your poetry. The vivid imagery evokes strong emotions and leaves a lasting impact on the reader. The introduction of hope symbolized by a Lovebird unlocking its wings is a brilliant way to conclude your exceptional Sijo.
Pandit Avatar
January 20, 2024 at 7:27 AM
Hope arrives as a Lovebird opens lock for him to spread wings--a fabulous ending to you fine Sijo, SO.
Kendrick Avatar
January 20, 2024 at 6:43 AM
Ahhh!!! I like their love affair. Aren't they beautiful. It reads like a good contender to me for the contest. Way to go. Your visit to my page added just the right touch. Sara K
Empress Avatar
January 20, 2024 at 6:20 AM
Cute picture, love birds i see them alot, as we have a bird haven. And i must say your sijo is brilliant and so beautiful too. I love how your first line depicts loneliness and how it makes one feel caged without a morning song, which means a ray of light. A very metaphorical way of conveying that in such eloquence . And i love the line “ before cherry blossoms fade away” they do fade away huh? Which is why i dont. Chase sakura skies: love how this ends on a positive note, with love being found
Empress Avatar
January 20, 2024 at 6:22 AM
And ensuring that it helps one spread their wings, love is the key and love can do wonders and your sijo here reminds us that once again. Loneliness is a state of mind that many experience even with their love birds by their side but having their beloved is definitely more comforting than being alone entirely. Pleasure reading this! A new fave for me! Best wishes for the contest
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