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Butterfly In a Tanka

a butterfly 

alights momentarily. . .

beauty limited

to five short lines

preserved forevermore


Aug. 6, 2015 
For Line Gauthier's 'Bite Size Poem no48' Poetry Contest

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Olusegun Arowolo

August 14, 2015 at 3:10 PM

Beautiful piece,dear friend...Congrats on your win..

Jan Allison

August 14, 2015 at 7:44 AM

i would have loved to see the original haiku - but I do like the metamorphis into a tanka - congrats on your win:-) hugs Jan xx

Poet Destroyer A

August 13, 2015 at 6:58 PM

such a sweet win.... LINDA

James Inman

August 13, 2015 at 10:26 AM

Great poem, Andrea. I'm sorry I missed the Haiku.

Skat A

August 13, 2015 at 1:15 AM

I'M GUESSING,, IMAGERY HAS NO LIMIT. SKAT

Dr. Upma A. Sharma

August 12, 2015 at 11:19 PM

Congrats on ur awesome winning tanka Andrea!

Eve Roper

August 12, 2015 at 9:36 PM

Congratulations on your win a 7 hugs Eve

Anindya Mohan Tagore

August 12, 2015 at 8:22 AM

Forevermore, preserved... Beautiful! ... Bobby

Matthew Anish

August 10, 2015 at 5:00 PM

This haiku preserves the beauty of a butterfly like it was preserved in amber. Good Show! PEACE & LOVE Matthew Anish

Jennifer Walker

August 9, 2015 at 11:35 PM

So beautiful penned. So like a butterfly; for all to see it's splendid beauty it alights momentarily. But the Tanka you have written remains in print preserved as you have said, forevermore.

Arthur Vaso

August 9, 2015 at 11:07 PM

LOL This poem is truly a butterfly, I came back to see a metamorphosis!!!

Scott Thirtyseven

August 8, 2015 at 9:45 AM

I love what you have said, there ain't no "trying" about it.

Andrea Dietrich

August 8, 2015 at 10:11 AM

thanks, that was sweet of you. I think when I had it in haiku form, the meaning was not as clear.

Afolabi Muideen

August 8, 2015 at 4:44 AM

A stunning write.... Excellence........A..M.

Daver Austin

August 7, 2015 at 2:29 PM

I'll press this one in my book of fancies. Love, daver

Sara Kendrick

August 7, 2015 at 2:25 PM

Enjoyed reading your work..Way to go for the contest..Smile..Thanks for stopping by..Sara

Thomas Martin

August 7, 2015 at 1:36 PM

Good tanka, Andrea! Sorry haven't been around larely! Seems the pneumonia lingers on.

Afolabi Muideen

August 7, 2015 at 12:42 PM

A beautiful write, it flow nice. Excellence.......A.M.

Eileen Manassian

August 7, 2015 at 9:27 AM

:) Love butterflies....Beauty limited to five short lines. Every bit of this is sweet. Hugs

Anu Nayak

August 7, 2015 at 4:04 AM

Dear Andrea, beautiful....poem happy moments are short-lived in the life which is short span itself...limits are limitlessly limiting our expressions! But your poem has explained it well going beyond ...loved the last line love, Anu

Dr. Upma A. Sharma

August 7, 2015 at 1:39 AM

Awesome haiku Andrea! Limit is only if words hv to be limited,,Gl in contest!

Tim Smith

August 6, 2015 at 11:21 PM

Like painting a picture.... Capture a moment

Arthur Vaso

August 6, 2015 at 9:58 PM

Now I do not usually correct poems in public, but are you sure about "with limits" I rather think that should have said "is Arthur" ok I confess, maybe it only me! I did indeed love this poem, the last line gives it so many meanings. :)

Andrea Dietrich

August 7, 2015 at 12:23 AM

Arthur, I hope it's just a masculine thing because Ian too prefers that I say "without limits." I was hoping people could see that i was making a haiku on a haiku. The haiku is limited to three short lines. Therein lie my limits!!