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Butterfly In a Tanka

a butterfly alights momentarily. . . beauty limited to five short lines preserved forevermore Aug. 6, 2015 For Line Gauthier's 'Bite Size Poem no48' Poetry Contest

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Olusegun Arowolo

Date: 8/14/2015 3:10:00 PM

Beautiful piece,dear friend...Congrats on your win..

Jan Allison

Date: 8/14/2015 7:44:00 AM

i would have loved to see the original haiku - but I do like the metamorphis into a tanka - congrats on your win:-) hugs Jan xx

Poet Destroyer A

Date: 8/13/2015 6:58:00 PM

such a sweet win.... LINDA

James Inman

Date: 8/13/2015 10:26:00 AM

Great poem, Andrea. I'm sorry I missed the Haiku.

Skat A

Date: 8/13/2015 1:15:00 AM

I'M GUESSING,, IMAGERY HAS NO LIMIT. SKAT

Dr. Upma A. Sharma

Date: 8/12/2015 11:19:00 PM

Congrats on ur awesome winning tanka Andrea!

Eve Roper

Date: 8/12/2015 9:36:00 PM

Congratulations on your win a 7 hugs Eve

Anindya Mohan Tagore

Date: 8/12/2015 8:22:00 AM

Forevermore, preserved... Beautiful! ... Bobby

Matthew Anish

Date: 8/10/2015 5:00:00 PM

This haiku preserves the beauty of a butterfly like it was preserved in amber. Good Show! PEACE & LOVE Matthew Anish

Jennifer Walker

Date: 8/9/2015 11:35:00 PM

So beautiful penned. So like a butterfly; for all to see it's splendid beauty it alights momentarily. But the Tanka you have written remains in print preserved as you have said, forevermore.

Arthur Vaso

Date: 8/9/2015 11:07:00 PM

LOL This poem is truly a butterfly, I came back to see a metamorphosis!!!

Scott Thirtyseven

Date: 8/8/2015 9:45:00 AM

I love what you have said, there ain't no "trying" about it.

Andrea Dietrich
Date: 8/8/2015 10:11:00 AM

thanks, that was sweet of you. I think when I had it in haiku form, the meaning was not as clear.

Afolabi Muideen

Date: 8/8/2015 4:44:00 AM

A stunning write.... Excellence........A..M.

Daver Austin

Date: 8/7/2015 2:29:00 PM

I'll press this one in my book of fancies. Love, daver

Sara Kendrick

Date: 8/7/2015 2:25:00 PM

Enjoyed reading your work..Way to go for the contest..Smile..Thanks for stopping by..Sara

Thomas Martin

Date: 8/7/2015 1:36:00 PM

Good tanka, Andrea! Sorry haven't been around larely! Seems the pneumonia lingers on.

Afolabi Muideen

Date: 8/7/2015 12:42:00 PM

A beautiful write, it flow nice. Excellence.......A.M.

Eileen Manassian

Date: 8/7/2015 9:27:00 AM

:) Love butterflies....Beauty limited to five short lines. Every bit of this is sweet. Hugs

Anu Nayak

Date: 8/7/2015 4:04:00 AM

Dear Andrea, beautiful....poem happy moments are short-lived in the life which is short span itself...limits are limitlessly limiting our expressions! But your poem has explained it well going beyond ...loved the last line love, Anu

Dr. Upma A. Sharma

Date: 8/7/2015 1:39:00 AM

Awesome haiku Andrea! Limit is only if words hv to be limited,,Gl in contest!

Tim Smith

Date: 8/6/2015 11:21:00 PM

Like painting a picture.... Capture a moment

Arthur Vaso

Date: 8/6/2015 9:58:00 PM

Now I do not usually correct poems in public, but are you sure about "with limits" I rather think that should have said "is Arthur" ok I confess, maybe it only me! I did indeed love this poem, the last line gives it so many meanings. :)

Andrea Dietrich
Date: 8/7/2015 12:23:00 AM

Arthur, I hope it's just a masculine thing because Ian too prefers that I say "without limits." I was hoping people could see that i was making a haiku on a haiku. The haiku is limited to three short lines. Therein lie my limits!!

Alexis Y.

Date: 8/6/2015 9:40:00 PM

Andrea, you managed to say a lot in these few lines. I agree. Great job! Best of luck in the contest:-) Alexis 7

Kp Nunez

Date: 8/6/2015 8:27:00 PM

Oh yes...I can totally appreciate what you meant here, Andie. What we capture in our writes is but a moment in time. Should do well! hugs!

Skat A

Date: 8/6/2015 8:20:00 PM

Andrea, I like this, no wonder I can not write. We have no Beauty down here in Texas, it's all fired.... LOL..... SKAT

Andrea Dietrich
Date: 8/7/2015 12:27:00 AM

haha. Surely that can't be true??