Butterflies In Jar

i hear chirping beaks, my love, as you deeply sleep with your mouth ajar butterflies in jar - my abdomen aches with thoughts of sudden silence
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Fowler Avatar
October 11, 2023 at 6:53 AM
Sweet on the outside, but the underlying thought is not. I like this one a lot Kim! :)
Rodrigues Avatar
October 11, 2023 at 10:49 AM
Thank you kindly!
Buhagiar Avatar
October 6, 2023 at 10:03 AM
Must be metaphoric write as the butterflies will die in a jar. Blessings.
Rodrigues Avatar
October 6, 2023 at 11:58 AM
Blessings :)
Poet Avatar
October 6, 2023 at 8:44 AM
Kim, these two Sedoka poems are absolutely stunning. I am particularly captivated by the vivid imagery and intricate emotions conveyed in the second one.
Rodrigues Avatar
October 6, 2023 at 8:52 AM
Thank you so much! You are a dear friend!
Baker Avatar
October 6, 2023 at 8:14 AM
I thought you had an upset stomach because you'd left butterflies in the jar without holes in the top and you realized they would suddenly go silent... no more fluttering after they die. Only you know how this one turns out. :-) Bill
Rodrigues Avatar
October 6, 2023 at 8:52 AM
Emphasis on “my love” God bless you, dear friend!
Wolf Avatar
October 5, 2023 at 9:03 PM
Jarred me awake, Kim, this one did. ~ Jughead
Rodrigues Avatar
October 6, 2023 at 8:54 AM
Thank you, Jughead (lol) an Archie reference ;) :)
Goldsmith Avatar
October 5, 2023 at 2:51 PM
What a creative write. If I have abdomen pain, now I will know why. Hahaha... Have a blessed day.................
Rodrigues Avatar
October 6, 2023 at 8:54 AM
Funny, you are ;)
One Avatar
October 5, 2023 at 1:00 PM
These two are brilliant.. especially the second one..
Rodrigues Avatar
October 6, 2023 at 8:55 AM
Thanks so much, Silent! :)
Hind Avatar
October 5, 2023 at 12:46 PM
I sleep like that, lol. Nice poem :)
Rodrigues Avatar
October 6, 2023 at 8:55 AM
With your mouth ajar waiting to be filled with butterflies ;) ?
Rolland Avatar
October 5, 2023 at 12:22 PM
so delicious images and poem, playing with butterflies in stomach, very inspiring have a nice day
Rodrigues Avatar
October 6, 2023 at 8:55 AM
Thanks so much!
Kendrick Avatar
October 5, 2023 at 8:26 AM
Excelente are these lines. Yes, we do not want to think about our death or our loved ones. Thanks for sharing this very descriptive, emotive, and well-worded Sedoka. I appreciate the visit to my page. Sara
Rodrigues Avatar
October 6, 2023 at 8:56 AM
You, Sara, do inspire me! <3
Lane Avatar
October 5, 2023 at 8:11 AM
Set them free, Kim. Perhaps not a metaphorical write, but to me it is.
Rodrigues Avatar
October 6, 2023 at 8:56 AM
Definitely metaphorical! :) Thank you.
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October 5, 2023 at 6:47 AM
Love this Kim! Debx
Rodrigues Avatar
October 6, 2023 at 8:57 AM
Thanks, Deb
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October 5, 2023 at 6:44 AM
Oh this is quite an evocative poem with the description of butterflies in jar and those fluttering within us.. A wonderful write dear Kim!
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