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Butterflies In Jar

i hear chirping beaks, my love, as you deeply sleep with your mouth ajar butterflies in jar - my abdomen aches with thoughts of sudden silence

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Linda Alice Fowler

Date: 10/11/2023 6:53:00 AM

Sweet on the outside, but the underlying thought is not. I like this one a lot Kim! :)

Kim Rodrigues
Date: 10/11/2023 10:49:00 AM

Thank you kindly!

Victor Buhagiar

Date: 10/6/2023 10:03:00 AM

Must be metaphoric write as the butterflies will die in a jar. Blessings.

Kim Rodrigues
Date: 10/6/2023 11:58:00 AM

Blessings :)

Sotto Poet

Date: 10/6/2023 8:44:00 AM

Kim, these two Sedoka poems are absolutely stunning. I am particularly captivated by the vivid imagery and intricate emotions conveyed in the second one.

Kim Rodrigues
Date: 10/6/2023 8:52:00 AM

Thank you so much! You are a dear friend!

Bill Baker

Date: 10/6/2023 8:14:00 AM

I thought you had an upset stomach because you'd left butterflies in the jar without holes in the top and you realized they would suddenly go silent... no more fluttering after they die. Only you know how this one turns out. :-) Bill

Kim Rodrigues
Date: 10/6/2023 8:52:00 AM

Emphasis on “my love” God bless you, dear friend!

Gershon Wolf

Date: 10/5/2023 9:03:00 PM

Jarred me awake, Kim, this one did. ~ Jughead

Kim Rodrigues
Date: 10/6/2023 8:54:00 AM

Thank you, Jughead (lol) an Archie reference ;) :)

Paula Goldsmith

Date: 10/5/2023 2:51:00 PM

What a creative write. If I have abdomen pain, now I will know why. Hahaha... Have a blessed day.................

Kim Rodrigues
Date: 10/6/2023 8:54:00 AM

Funny, you are ;)

Silent One

Date: 10/5/2023 1:00:00 PM

These two are brilliant.. especially the second one..

Kim Rodrigues
Date: 10/6/2023 8:55:00 AM

Thanks so much, Silent! :)

Paige Hind

Date: 10/5/2023 12:46:00 PM

I sleep like that, lol. Nice poem :)

Kim Rodrigues
Date: 10/6/2023 8:55:00 AM

With your mouth ajar waiting to be filled with butterflies ;) ?

Yann Rolland

Date: 10/5/2023 12:22:00 PM

so delicious images and poem, playing with butterflies in stomach, very inspiring have a nice day

Kim Rodrigues
Date: 10/6/2023 8:55:00 AM

Thanks so much!

Sara Kendrick

Date: 10/5/2023 8:26:00 AM

Excelente are these lines. Yes, we do not want to think about our death or our loved ones. Thanks for sharing this very descriptive, emotive, and well-worded Sedoka. I appreciate the visit to my page. Sara

Kim Rodrigues
Date: 10/6/2023 8:56:00 AM

You, Sara, do inspire me! <3