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Butterflies In Jar

i hear chirping beaks,
my love, as you deeply sleep
with your mouth ajar

butterflies in jar -
my abdomen aches with thoughts
of sudden silence

Copyright © Kim Rodrigues | Year Posted 2023

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Linda Alice Fowler Date: 10/11/2023 6:53:00 AM Sweet on the outside, but the underlying thought is not. I like this one a lot Kim! :) Login to Reply Kim Rodrigues Date: 10/11/2023 10:49:00 AM Thank you kindly!

Victor Buhagiar Date: 10/6/2023 10:03:00 AM Must be metaphoric write as the butterflies will die in a jar. Blessings. Login to Reply Kim Rodrigues Date: 10/6/2023 11:58:00 AM Blessings :)

Sotto Poet Date: 10/6/2023 8:44:00 AM Kim, these two Sedoka poems are absolutely stunning. I am particularly captivated by the vivid imagery and intricate emotions conveyed in the second one. Login to Reply Kim Rodrigues Date: 10/6/2023 8:52:00 AM Thank you so much! You are a dear friend!

Bill Baker Date: 10/6/2023 8:14:00 AM I thought you had an upset stomach because you'd left butterflies in the jar without holes in the top and you realized they would suddenly go silent... no more fluttering after they die. Only you know how this one turns out. :-) Bill Login to Reply Kim Rodrigues Date: 10/6/2023 8:52:00 AM Emphasis on “my love” God bless you, dear friend!

Gershon Wolf Date: 10/5/2023 9:03:00 PM Jarred me awake, Kim, this one did. ~ Jughead Login to Reply Kim Rodrigues Date: 10/6/2023 8:54:00 AM Thank you, Jughead (lol) an Archie reference ;) :)

Paula Goldsmith Date: 10/5/2023 2:51:00 PM What a creative write. If I have abdomen pain, now I will know why. Hahaha... Have a blessed day................. Login to Reply Kim Rodrigues Date: 10/6/2023 8:54:00 AM Funny, you are ;)

Silent One Date: 10/5/2023 1:00:00 PM These two are brilliant.. especially the second one.. Login to Reply Kim Rodrigues Date: 10/6/2023 8:55:00 AM Thanks so much, Silent! :)

Paige Hind Date: 10/5/2023 12:46:00 PM I sleep like that, lol. Nice poem :) Login to Reply Kim Rodrigues Date: 10/6/2023 8:55:00 AM With your mouth ajar waiting to be filled with butterflies ;) ?

Yann Rolland Date: 10/5/2023 12:22:00 PM so delicious images and poem, playing with butterflies in stomach, very inspiring have a nice day Login to Reply Kim Rodrigues Date: 10/6/2023 8:55:00 AM Thanks so much!

Sara Kendrick Date: 10/5/2023 8:26:00 AM Excelente are these lines. Yes, we do not want to think about our death or our loved ones. Thanks for sharing this very descriptive, emotive, and well-worded Sedoka. I appreciate the visit to my page. Sara Login to Reply Kim Rodrigues Date: 10/6/2023 8:56:00 AM You, Sara, do inspire me! <3

Lin Lane Date: 10/5/2023 8:11:00 AM Set them free, Kim. Perhaps not a metaphorical write, but to me it is. Login to Reply Kim Rodrigues Date: 10/6/2023 8:56:00 AM Definitely metaphorical! :) Thank you.

Deb M Date: 10/5/2023 6:47:00 AM Love this Kim! Debx Login to Reply Kim Rodrigues Date: 10/6/2023 8:57:00 AM Thanks, Deb

Hiya Sharma Date: 10/5/2023 6:44:00 AM Oh this is quite an evocative poem with the description of butterflies in jar and those fluttering within us.. A wonderful write dear Kim! Login to Reply