But, I Was In a Trance

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Poetry/Verse/But, I Was In a Trance
Copyright Protected, ID 10-1680-476-11
All Rights Reserved, 2024, Constance La France
Copying any part of this work is prohibited without permission.

Written, October 11, 2024
For the International Contest, Scary Stories
Sponsor, Cystol Woods, Judged 10/17/2024

1920s Illustration of a Female Phantom 2 by ObsidianPlanet on DeviantArt

Written in my created form, Story in Verse and Refrain
8, 6, 6, 6, 6, 6r  syllables per line, 5 stanzas, non-rhymed, 30 lines
 Human-Generated

 

 
I was walking on a long path, and found an old farmhouse; with a garden decayed, and a voice whispered come ! Oh, that voice was creepy; but, I was in a trance. I stepped onto a broken porch, the door made a harsh moan; and the inside was dim, I tried to make out shapes. Rocking chair, piano; but, I was in a trance. Then, I saw her in an old chair, the fabric was tattered; her dress a sickly white. her face so very pale. Yet, she was beautiful; but, I was in a trance. In the hush she said, oh Dear Heart, I have been waiting child; it is time that you come, come I whispered, come where ? No thank you, I am fine; but, I was in a trance. She got up and floated to me, I will never forget; those brittle cold bone hands, caressing, touching me. I let out a wild scream; but, I was in a trance ! Poetry/Verse/But, I Was In a Trance Copyright Protected, ID 10-1680-476-11 All Rights Reserved, 2024, Constance La France Copying any part of this work is prohibited without permission.

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Date: 10/12/2024 5:38:00 AM
Oh, this is scary and delightful at the same time. I feel as if trapped in a ghostly palace. The refrain, 'but I was in a trance' adds to the mysterious effect of the poem. Well done, dear Constance.
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Constance La France
Date: 10/12/2024 10:28:00 PM
Valsa, thank you so much for the compliment and comment, love Constance
Date: 10/11/2024 6:12:00 PM
Keep away from hypnotists. This is a frightening scene. It holds my interest to the last scream.
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Date: 10/12/2024 10:29:00 PM
Hilda, thank you for the comment and compliment, love Constance
Date: 10/11/2024 2:20:00 PM
WOW!!! I enjoyed reading your wonderful/creative ~ write/story.  Great Ending/Great Picture... "Good Luck" Have a wonderful Autumn day writing away...................
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Constance La France
Date: 10/12/2024 10:29:00 PM
Paula, thank you for the complimet and comment, blessings Constance
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