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Burial

A straggle of figures litters the path Stumbling, windblown, straying apart, A ragged assembly against graphite clouds, Inky - black smudges blurred by the rain Flapping dark shadows, crows circle above them. Struggling, the figures cluster together Wearily shuffling, standing then slumping. Rag dolls with stuffing steadily leaking. Far away faintly, a wind-torn crying, The fading call of a solitary bird Nearer, the sound of someone sighing And the soft thudding of falling earth.

Copyright © | Year Posted 2008




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Date: 5/3/2009 2:30:00 PM
Maggie, my belated congrats in making the semi finals...Raul
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Date: 4/10/2009 7:11:00 AM
Congratulations on your poetry making it into the semi finals. Wishing you the best of luck in the finals Maggie. Love, Carol
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Date: 12/14/2008 10:23:00 AM
Wow..so deep and sad...but done so well! congratulations of your feature work this week! ~ Carrie
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Date: 12/9/2008 12:22:00 PM
Maggie, your poetry is simply brilliant. Congratulations on an amazing featured write. Warmest holiday wishes. Love, Shar
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Date: 12/8/2008 8:29:00 PM
Congrats Maggie on "Burial" being featured. Vince
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Date: 12/8/2008 4:30:00 PM
Oh! what an ambiance you create here. I see it all so very claearly. Well done! Maggie. lainie
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Date: 12/7/2008 10:54:00 PM
Maggie, You have described flawlessly the feeling of a funeral from the point of view of my eyes! This is perfect imagry. It took me to the cemetary on a windy cold day, holding on to my hat, looking at my old black shoes. Congrats on being featured. Beautifully written! love, Karen
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Date: 12/7/2008 8:21:00 PM
Maggie, the endarkened imagery of the poem is beautiful, congragulations on being featured this, keep them coming, Mark
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Date: 12/7/2008 7:25:00 PM
Maggie the imaginary in this poem is excellent - Congratulations on being featured this week - God Bless, MJ
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Date: 12/7/2008 4:27:00 PM
Dear Maggie - Congratulations on your featured poem this week! Wishing you and yours a Happy Holiday season. Peace always, John
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Date: 12/7/2008 2:56:00 PM
Maggie, what an image you have painted here that becomes clear in your readers minds eye. I admire your creative writing style as I now say Congratualtions for being featured. Wonderful Poem... MPK
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Date: 12/7/2008 1:52:00 PM
Interesting imagery and vivid verb choice convey your thoughts in a creative way. Congratulations on having your poem featured. I wish you continued success with your writing. Karen
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Date: 9/27/2008 8:25:00 AM
Beautiful verse with great imagery and flow.Reading this poem is experiencing the moment.Excellent. Thank you for your kind comments on my poem dear friend. Love always, Margaret.
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Date: 9/9/2008 6:24:00 PM
I hope these are not inspired of actual events, a deep and foreboding write take care,D-nyce
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Date: 9/8/2008 9:29:00 AM
This sounds so brooding, and sad, yet done so beautifully. I hope it is a fictional work, it is quite a masterpiece, yet so sad that I hope it's not a real experience you've had. I love your work! ~ Carrie....P.S. You mentioned you are in London,...so nice to meet you! I'm in Northern California..but have a pen pal who lives in East Grinstead. Say hello for me!! :)
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Date: 9/6/2008 7:20:00 AM
Interesting perspective. The crows fit in perfectly to the dark atmosphere. Hope this is not a personal loss. Sorry if it is. Excellent write. Love, Shar
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Date: 9/6/2008 6:11:00 AM
i can almost see you in the rain huddled in the middle with a penn and a pad. your our representitive and this is your report. good job. John H Loving III
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