Bumbly Bee

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Wrested from my writing by a drone
which signified that I was not alone
in its black and yellow jumper it had come
fat and furry, bigger than my thumb
it cruised around the room in lazy eights
before it worked itself into a state
against the window wings fizzed on the glass
as fruitlessly it struggled to get past
annoyed at every corner on inspection
too close to even see it's own reflection
the outside world all plainly in it's sight
but out of reach, no this cannot be right
it thought  “the flowers in the garden I can see
but cannot fly to them- how can this bee?”
I pitied this paradox of aviation
for being in a desperate situation
it's compound eyes with panoramic view
blind to the neighbouring window it flew through.
“ I feel your pane”  I told the frame inspector
too knackered now to gather any nectar
and went and fetched a beaker and some card
then scooped it up, released it in the yard.
We, too, in life in lazy circles go
until whatever circumstances throw
leaves us adrift, no chance of some release
we thrash round for solutions, have no peace
take on our problems close up, face to face
instead of stepping back and giving space
so we may then take in the wider view
the answer is nearby what we should do
so stop banging your head and then you'll see
you won't need glass and card.
Unlike the bee.

Copyright © | Year Posted 2015



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Date: 7/3/2015 7:33:00 PM
G'day Viv... You are so right Viv. There's a heck of a lot of bumbly bee in us humans as we bang our heads against the window in this case. It's a great description of how you see so much of us in the problem of a bee that's lost its way - thank you Viv - Lindsay
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Date: 7/3/2015 9:44:00 PM
Cheers, Lindsay, glad you like it. My good Lady tends to be more waspish, though. Regards, Viv
Date: 7/2/2015 7:07:00 AM
This is something wonderful and true. You have talent that is very special and unusual. How many can really think outside the box and make this kind of parallel? The puns are pure smile makers!!
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Date: 7/2/2015 8:45:00 AM
I sometimes wonder that myself, Duke, but don't dwell on it or otherwise I would lay awake all night. Regards, Viv
Date: 7/1/2015 10:38:00 AM
Your message is clear and truly poetically expressed with clever analogies and wonderful imagery. Emile. #7
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Date: 7/1/2015 10:40:00 AM
Thanks for dropping by, Emile, blessings, Viv
Date: 7/1/2015 6:51:00 AM
I like your puns and the way in which you drew a life lesson from a bee. Also, thanks for your kind comments about my poem.
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Date: 7/1/2015 10:36:00 AM
Cheers, Gawaine, thanks for popping by. Onward and upward with your verse. Regards, Viv
Date: 7/1/2015 1:34:00 AM
Hi Viv, the life of a bee, viewed by a garden statue. I love it... LINDA
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Date: 7/1/2015 10:35:00 AM
Thanks for popping by, Linda, hope you had a good break. Viv x
Date: 6/30/2015 7:40:00 PM
You understand the meaning of capturing one's attention, holding it, and then topping it off by imparting a meaningful metaphoric message! Outstanding! 7
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Date: 6/30/2015 8:49:00 PM
Thanks, Connie. one gets inspiration from the oddest things- even a distraction. Viv x
Date: 6/30/2015 7:28:00 PM
Hi, Viv, I enjoyed your poem and your comparison to humans. A great poem on this subject. ~~Darlene
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Date: 6/30/2015 8:49:00 PM
Thanks Darlene, fun to write. Viv x
Date: 6/30/2015 9:55:00 AM
I like the deeper meaning, told in a lighthearted manner. More often than not, we are like that bee... I like the clever wordplay too. Loved it Viv!
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Date: 6/30/2015 9:59:00 AM
Thanks, Kim, for popping by. Viv x
Date: 6/30/2015 8:45:00 AM
Viv, this is wonderfully penned 7, I admire your compassion for the bee, the bees in Canada are in trouble, not many and no place to rest and do bee things, very sad, and thanks for visiting my death poem, you captured what I was envisioning when I wrote it and guess what, it got 2nd place
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Date: 6/30/2015 10:01:00 AM
Thanks, BW, and well done again. Viv x
Date: 6/30/2015 4:24:00 AM
- One small but important Bumbly bee .... became to a wonderful poem, Viv :) ! - hugs // Anne-Lise :)
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Date: 6/30/2015 6:08:00 AM
Not many bees this year Anne Lise, sadly. Takk, Viv x
Date: 6/30/2015 3:52:00 AM
Thanks, Julia. As you are too well aware, inspiration comes from anywhere. And not necessarily with a sting in the tail. Viv x
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Date: 6/30/2015 4:23:00 AM
oops, wrong box.
Date: 6/30/2015 3:20:00 AM
I like the nice flow to your poem and its lightheartedness. Best wishes, Julia, xx
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Date: 6/30/2015 3:57:00 AM
Thanks, Julia. As you are too well aware, inspiration comes from anywhere. And not necessarily with a sting in the tail. Viv x
Date: 6/29/2015 11:58:00 PM
Cute bee poem, I could see and hear him : ) Thanks for the note btw ...I was excited to see that my poem placed where it did. I've been having fun trying to figure the contests out and the whole poetry soup in general. Thanks again Lee
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Date: 6/30/2015 12:03:00 AM
Thanks for stopping by, Lee. Yes, there's much to see and do. I'm messing about with terzanelles and quatrains at the moment, just seeing what I come up with, but every now and then a rhyme or something pops into my head, so I have to get it down quick. Have fun. Regards, Viv
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