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Building Tension

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Written: February 15, 2024 ______________________________________ I ultimately rule over these stunning valleys, Elm trees with mossy brows line the alleys. Where distant peaks arise, calm and azure, Akin to the strong tripods used for rapture. Who can't view river stones as viable paths?  A scad of scramblers on spurs stoning laths. To slay fair faces, who bartered leaden blasts, And weapons because of their leopard casts. Who inflicted lasting wounds upon the land, Those who pursued the avian crowns stand. Fetched to flatten fascinating flesh but failed, Who still flies above "fallen Tomahawk," veiled? From my awakened gaze, I view a world, Across eyes that bear a black shade furled. A confined space, restricted and stretched out, Then I cast a velvety gaze over a dumb doubt. In a shadowed visage, this is how I mumble, These walls, built by oppression, must crumble. I must quit as I gaze upon my unique form, Through opened eyes, no longer blind corm. And behold, my unique hands create, The space exists within my mind spate. Nonviolent activists avoid causing friction, Path for discovery, not building any tension. Yield your tension a flight and let it depart, God will never strain you over skills to impart. Stress is only a reaction, probe not to worry, Oddness from bodies and beliefs is blurry. Not all stress stems from having a lot to do, It originates from a lack of follow-through. The potential increases with increasing strain, Growth comes with a sense of life's innate pain. I'm feeling hollow, not due to any sorrow, Yet, in a sense of relief, each knot fades hollow. The most crucial factor in ensuring lifespan, Is staying clear of tension, worry, and strain. Life is not a rising conflict or a stressful scene, Life ought not to be painful; it may be serene. It's habits that induce tension and relaxation, Cutting rituals and building useful tension.

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Date: 3/4/2024 8:30:00 AM
Heartiest congratulations on your top win in my contest with this exceptional poem, Lasaad. Great use of imagery, metaphor and vocabulary!
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Date: 3/1/2024 11:24:00 PM
Wow! Congrats! Thanks for sharing this... I'm delighted with your concluding stanza:"Life is not a rising conflict or a stressful scene, Life ought not to be painful; it may be serene. It's habits that induce tension and relaxation, Cutting rituals and building useful tension." God bless you.
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Date: 3/1/2024 7:49:00 PM
"In a shadowed visage, this is how I mumble, These walls, built by oppression, must crumble" - A very comprehensive work in all the ways. Congratulations!
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Date: 3/1/2024 5:06:00 AM
Actually I must feel proud for sharing podium with you. Congratulations on your well deserved first place win dear friend....
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Date: 2/29/2024 2:03:00 PM
Another brilliant piece congratulations on your 1st place win!
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Date: 2/29/2024 7:49:00 AM
Dear Sotto, A magnificent philosophical addition to your illustrious canon. Streams of stellar verses emanate from your pen. Each line a golden envelope of evocative slants. Congratulations on your selection in contest Howard
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Date: 2/21/2024 11:23:00 PM
Even a topic like Building tension is made positive through your remarkable attitude toward life. "Not all stress stems from having a lot to do, It originates from a lack of follow-through."So very right. In my case, I grow tensed thinking that I have so much to do and much remains undone! It is because of a lack of proper planning and follow-up. "The most crucial factor in ensuring lifespan, Is staying clear of tension, worry, and strain." No psychologist can refute this great truth. As ever another great poem dear friend....!
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Date: 2/18/2024 8:36:00 AM
Can we attain serenity and get rid of walls that seem to kill us? Great ideas with plenty of emotions. We need change.
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Date: 2/15/2024 4:01:00 PM
wow sotto this poem switches course many times but has a definite message superb write hugs Shadow
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Date: 2/15/2024 1:01:00 PM
- Our physical or emotional reactions build our tensions ... proven or unproven ... that's just the way we men are ... reverse side of the medal, Las - Excellent writing as always :) - Best wishes in the contest :) - hugs
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Date: 2/15/2024 12:27:00 PM
I enjoyed reading your wonderful "Building Tension" write with a great ending. Have a blessed day writing away.........................
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Date: 2/15/2024 10:07:00 AM
Nice poem with the realities of life.
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Date: 2/15/2024 6:39:00 AM
I felt the tension building as I read your poem, my friend. Life is a journey full of such---as you ably illustrate.
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Date: 2/15/2024 4:58:00 AM
dearest Sotto--a brilliant creation with flowing rhymes and deep, intricate images.I felt tension in the initial verses but felt a sense of relief and understanding in the final few. Your words spoke a truth that few understand...tension/ stress come from one's own mind and hands. I believe I'm the cause of my own tension and pain and suffering through my thinking and reactions. You seem to allude to that. I agree, life 'ought not to be painful.' This is a masterpiece! your poetess friend, Sara
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Date: 2/15/2024 12:58:00 AM
Nonviolence can be a tool especially when you give it to God! Engaging read. My favorite part is Life is not a rising conflict or a stressful scene, Life ought not to be painful; it may be serene. It's habits that induce tension and relaxation, Cutting rituals and building useful tension.
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