Building Bricks

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Written: June 08, 2024 ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ I carefully molded the clay Created from the depths of my soul A structure that would allow me to shield From the fear of unloving gazes. Oh, what a vast structure I constructed It would let me safely unravel Avoid risks and fears Beyond the perils of emotion and fervent tears. I felt chilly and lonesome in my cocoon It was awaiting structure annihilation Remove all barriers and discard them I realized there had been a few I was previously unaware of it. I explicitly acknowledged it later I ventured where I previously wouldn't I'm immensely overjoyed Since I gained a friend We discussed every nuance Except for the building's layout.

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Duke Beaufort

Date: 6/10/2024 12:17:00 PM

SP, this is making me think about various mechanisms I might use for self-protection. Funny that safety of the structure also turns our to isolate. In any case, with someone's help the walls came down. I'm wondering why the building layout was off limits. That may have been a metaphor for the fact that the level of intimacy was not physical. I really don't know. But it's interesting to think about what inspired this work.

Silent One

Date: 6/9/2024 9:25:00 AM

This poem is a beautifully crafted reflection on the themes of self-protection, vulnerability, and the transformative power of friendship. Through vivid imagery, a reflective tone, and a flowing free verse structure, it captures the emotional journey of the speaker from isolation to connection. The poem invites readers to consider their own barriers and the potential for joy and fulfillment found in opening up to others.

Sara Kendrick

Date: 6/8/2024 4:17:00 PM

Great that you built a building to protect you but found out it was lonesome all hemmed in. I am wondering if you now will work on not being hemmed in all the time. Creative lines. Thanks for sharing. Sara K

Anne-Lise Andresen

Date: 6/8/2024 11:13:00 AM

- A sense that building construction is not solid, Las - Skilled writing as always, my friend - Have a wonderful weekend :) - hugs