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Bubbling Over

Aerial dribs and drabs, a sidewalk canvas As a toddler chases bubbles her mother blows from confectionary soap, Fluttering fluidity in spring air Child's laugh, a mosaic of innocence, discovery and glee Her run after each globe, unsteady, twisted gravity Her footwork shifts in warfare wobble, no sinkhole falling Her reach to pop each bubble, circus kerfuffle, giddy, giggles that swing like a trapeze artist, while a mother retrieves unexpected memory shards of recovery that coat a guarded self Neverland jester, a child's guileless glow, routing air baubles unconstrained by space, untethered from fear, avoiding a fall off the planet to limited mobility For sometimes life's march doesn't start on time Poem revised: April 19, 2021

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Date: 7/11/2021 5:56:00 PM
Hey, congratulations on your win :)
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Brian Sambourne
Date: 7/11/2021 8:39:00 PM
Thanks very much Paghunda, for your congratulations. Be well. Brian
Date: 6/16/2021 8:03:00 AM
a colorful bubble of a poem - nice!
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Brian Sambourne
Date: 6/16/2021 9:35:00 AM
Thank you Anais. Kind of you to drop by + comment. Best wishes, Brian
Date: 8/4/2020 10:00:00 PM
There is no sound to my ears sweeter than a child's laughter. You've captured this bubbly moment so poetically, with wonderful imagery and the language of childhood. I love your ending. Congratulations of your high placement ~ John
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Brian Sambourne
Date: 8/5/2020 5:35:00 AM
Thank you John. I have revised the poem a few times but will leave it to stand now. So much of the piece is about movement so the final line conveys a purposeful march, something adults with goals seem destined to do. Best wishes Brian
Date: 8/4/2020 4:28:00 PM
Brian! In no offhand way do I say, Bubbling - is a gem. 'Fluterring fluidity' paused me, caused me to drink this in slowly. Enjoy I certainly did! Threaded subtly with circus references, 'kerfuffle' - that entire sentence laughs like a brook! ' Warfare wobble', Neverland jester' - describe a toddler to a tee. With your new thought and expression, this moment jumps off the page, ingrained in everyone's sentiment.
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Brian Sambourne
Date: 8/4/2020 4:57:00 PM
Hello Sigrid Thank you heartily for your kind + astute comments. The child's tottering delight, a circus like frenzy, is balanced by the mother's momentary reserve from watching her daughter. The little girl (innocent/untroubled) lives in the moment. The mother (heavy with experience) has tread life's march as the daughter will do. Your insight into sub text is very commendable. Best wishes Brian
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Sigrid Ermine
Date: 8/4/2020 4:28:00 PM
Fluttering!
Date: 8/4/2020 12:42:00 PM
Loved this soothing moment of the soft innocence in childhood. You've remarkably portrayed the gentle imaginations and emotions. Congratulations on your win Brian! :)
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Brian Sambourne
Date: 8/4/2020 5:02:00 PM
Thank you Aditi. Innocence versus experience is certainly a theme I was hoping to convey. I often read your fine poetry too. Best wishes always, Brian
Date: 8/4/2020 6:27:00 AM
precious ~ congrats on your well deserved win, Brian.
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Brian Sambourne
Date: 8/4/2020 6:51:00 AM
Hello Line Thank you for the positive response. I was encouraged to write as I watched a pensive mother presiding over her daughter's riotous glee at bubble bursting. For just a moment the mother's thoughts seemed suspended. Best wishes, Brian
Date: 8/4/2020 5:24:00 AM
I was slowed by the subtle shift in the moment of this poem as its shadow shifted from child to mother. Nicely done Brian and thanks for playing in the moment contest
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Brian Sambourne
Date: 8/4/2020 6:11:00 AM
Hi John Thank you for directing the contest. In the strung together moments of her child chasing bubbles, the mother reflects on life - perhaps the innocence lost or the energy faded in aging - I leave that to the reader. Thank you for your kind remarks. Brian

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