Bruise For Bruise

I shot a comment slick as grease
to some unprecedented piece.
It flew with speed to poet’s box
and landed there - a sack of rocks.
 
Though my intent wasmto improve,
the worthy bard wasmnot so moved.
He flashed me back a few choice words.
His perfect poem I had slurred.  
 
My tattered ego hit delete
and now the processnis complete.
While bruise for bruise, the damage done -
the proof of his reply is gone.

written 05-26-2014

Copyright © | Year Posted 2014



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Date: 6/16/2014 10:44:00 AM
Hi Reason, congratulations on a well-deserved win! I enjoyed this very clever write. Well done!
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Date: 6/16/2014 9:11:00 AM
I can so relate to this, one of my favorites for the contest. Bravo!
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Date: 6/16/2014 8:17:00 AM
Great write worthy of win Reason ! Huge congrats ! Trust this is just an imagery else word of advise wud be never shud u feel offended wid such things my friend !
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Date: 6/16/2014 5:11:00 AM
Thanks for participating in the contest and congrats on a fine win, Reason
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Date: 5/28/2014 2:51:00 PM
Very well done...Slam mine as much as you like...I am nowhere near perfect nor do I claim to be
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Reason A. Poteet
Date: 5/31/2014 9:52:00 PM
It was on another site. Guess I should post this for one of the slam contests of which there were three the last time I checked.
Date: 5/28/2014 9:56:00 AM
A lot of fragile egos here....Constructive criticism ..........Whats the problem?
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Reason A. Poteet
Date: 5/28/2014 11:34:00 AM
Well-said, thanks for the read and remark.
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