Broken Hearted In Monterey

Even before she left she was not here
Her blue eyes focused  somewhere far away
I try to smile as I hold back the tear
While I walk the dark streets of Monterey

She said she loved me in the warmth of Spring 
I did not think about the coming cold
Looking forward to what Summer would bring
Never worrying what Autumn might hold

Then Winter came and brought warmth to an end
With swift goodbyes she took her love one day
And ripped the fabric that will never mend
Left me to walk the streets of Monterey

It's cold here now and that's the price I pay
For crying in the streets of Monterey


10/13/17
Copyright © | Year Posted 2017


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Date: 4/21/2018 4:35:00 PM
Belated congrats on your win with this most endearing sonnet, Larry. Well done.
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Larry Bradfield
Date: 4/21/2018 9:36:00 PM
Thank you, LIne!
Date: 1/12/2018 2:45:00 PM
Very Lyrical Larry, congratulations...
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Date: 1/12/2018 11:18:00 AM
Wonderful sonnet...filled with emotion and vivid imagery . Many congrats on your win, Larry. Elaine
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Date: 1/11/2018 6:20:00 PM
Congratulations Larry on your wonderful win with your beautiful and emotional sonnet. ~Susan
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Date: 1/11/2018 10:52:00 AM
lovely sonnet Larry, congrats ; )-luloo
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Date: 1/10/2018 7:29:00 PM
Nice sonnet Larry, unfortunately the repeated lines kind of affected the score, but I enjoyed this lyrical sonnet anyway, congrats on a fine placement!
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Larry Bradfield
Date: 1/10/2018 9:56:00 PM
It seemed like a good idea at the time, John.Thanks for the placement! I always enjoy your contests!..Larry
Date: 1/10/2018 6:58:00 PM
I love the repeating of Monterey in your lines Larry. It makes this sonnet so personal and beautiful! Congratulations on your win! : )
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Larry Bradfield
Date: 1/10/2018 9:39:00 PM
Thanks, Connie!!!
Date: 10/17/2017 11:00:00 PM
Best wishes and big congrats on your well-earned win, Larry - keep up the great poetry, my friend! :-)
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Larry Bradfield
Date: 1/10/2018 9:38:00 PM
Thank you, Gregory!
Date: 10/17/2017 1:39:00 PM
Larry, congratulations on your win in my contest with this emotional write !
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Date: 10/16/2017 9:34:00 PM
Larry, congratulations on your win!
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Larry Bradfield
Date: 10/16/2017 9:50:00 PM
Thank you, Eve
Date: 10/16/2017 6:17:00 PM
Hi Larry, I really liked how you composed this piece. I felt the heartbreak in each stanza. Congratulations on your placement in the " Broken Hearted Poem contest " . - Alexis
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Larry Bradfield
Date: 10/16/2017 9:16:00 PM
Thank you, Alexis!!
Date: 10/13/2017 11:04:00 PM
Hi Larry! I really like this poem and I think it would make a great song. Good luck in the contest. And, check your soup mail.
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