Eileen Manassian Poet Acrostic

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Breathtaking Night

Beyond the limits of my finite mind
Right past the layered air is where I find
Eternity is etched in orbs that glow
And as I gaze, I'm breathless by the show
The garb of night embellished by the stars
Haphazard not one orbit, there is Mars
Triumphant, every constellation rules
Adoring thoughts ascend from human fools
Kinetic, though to me, they're standing still
Inspired, I take in celestial thrill
No single thing can match this wondrous sight
Grandiloquent the stars that bring delight!

March 9, 1016
For the Breathtaking Contest
Sponsor: John Hamilton

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Sathya Babu March 13, 2016 at 9:00 PM Eileen........Many congrats on this WIN

Andrea Dietrich March 13, 2016 at 7:41 PM Congrats, Eileen. I am so glad this is on the list. By the way, were you around Soup in 2013? I think that is when I did my names on Soup. Sorry you got left off. I will have to do a new one another time!!

Sam Jameson March 13, 2016 at 4:01 PM I like the angle you took, Eileen-- the expansion of wonderment to the depths of the universe..and then all the way back into the individual's mind. I enjoyed this, thank you...congrats on your placement!

Beautiful Scars March 13, 2016 at 12:41 PM Eileen, a wonderful acrostic, and congrats on your placement in the contest :)-luloo

John Hamilton March 12, 2016 at 10:43 PM This was wonderful Eileen, captures the essence of the word perfectly, gives glory to God all the more appropriate! 32/34 congrats on fine 3rd place win! John

Richard Lamoureux March 10, 2016 at 6:22 AM Yes, it will be grest to be back home. Hugs Rck. Eileen Manassian March 10, 2016 at 7:38 AM :) I'm happy for you, dear. Safe travels. Hugs

Dr. Upma A. Sharma March 10, 2016 at 2:36 AM Well breathtaking is the word sweet Eileen..of course a 7 from me.. best wishes.. Eileen Manassian March 10, 2016 at 7:39 AM Thank you, Dr. Upma. Good to have a visit from you. Hope all is well. Hugs

Winged Warrior March 10, 2016 at 12:42 AM Beyond breathtaking! Eileen...(:^WW^:) Eileen Manassian March 10, 2016 at 7:40 AM Thank you Winged Warrior. So happy that you enjoyed this piece. :) I'll be by to visit you soon.

Laura Leiser March 10, 2016 at 12:07 AM Oh, what a marvelous and masterfully written poem, Eileen! You describe the magnificent celestial skies so well, a 7 :) Eileen Manassian March 10, 2016 at 7:45 AM Laura, dear. The heavens declare the glory of God; the skies proclaim the work of his hands." Psalms 91:1 :) Thank you for this lovely visit. Blessings.

Timothy Hicks March 9, 2016 at 10:43 PM Ahhh okay ... makes more sense now :) I've always been terrible with scanning for stressed syllables ... even in school my teacher didn't really understand them (and so they were probably communicated too me badly) ... oh well. I guess over the years, perhaps it will come more natural to me, through practice. Eileen Manassian March 9, 2016 at 10:57 PM :) I'm sure it will, dear. I have to check sometimes to make sure about something. I check the dictionary. So...knowledge is progressive. Anyway....your free verse rocks! It is always good to try your hand at something new. ;) Hugs. A second visit is fun!

Richard Lamoureux March 9, 2016 at 10:08 PM Heading home tomorrow. Eileen Manassian March 9, 2016 at 10:21 PM :) I'm sure you're looking ford to that. Hubby doesn't get back till the 15th. He's been gone since Feb 27... :( Anyway...safe trip, dear. Hugs

Constance La France March 9, 2016 at 9:35 PM Eileen, your acrostic is truly breathtaking, it flows perfectly, a sure winner and I am loving it 7 ~ Eileen Manassian March 9, 2016 at 10:00 PM Thank you, Constance. You have given me cause to smile this morning. :) Thank you.

Richard D Seal March 9, 2016 at 7:42 PM You're a twinkle, twinkle little star with this write my little Desert Orchid. I can think of one thing that matches this wondrous sight, You. Take care, Richard Eileen Manassian March 9, 2016 at 10:02 PM Mr Seal....your comment has me glowing. Thank you for being sweet as well as a tease. Hugs

Richard Lamoureux March 9, 2016 at 7:34 PM Oops I forgot your 7! Eileen Manassian March 9, 2016 at 10:29 PM Remember, Timothy...I'm trying to use iambic pentameter so sometimes the word structure might seem odd. That line was referring to the fact that God has set these planets in their paths....it is the work of a Creator God and there is nothing haphazard about it. :) That last line....I changed from the original as I had to find a word that has the stress on the second syllable. :) Thanks for the visit, dear. The heavens have always fascinated me. Eileen Manassian March 9, 2016 at 10:04 PM Glad you came back for that one, dear. :)

Richard Lamoureux March 9, 2016 at 7:34 PM I expect this breathtaking piece will do very well Eileen a hug and a 7! Eileen Manassian March 9, 2016 at 10:03 PM I really hope so, Richard. I'd love to do well in this contest. Hugs to you. Hope your trip is going well.

Timothy Hicks March 9, 2016 at 7:27 PM Grandiloquent .... now this is a word new to me! It is splendid. I'm a sucker for "spacey" writes, and this one is great ... very pretty. "Adoring thoughts ascend from human fools" ... interesting line. The stars are humbling no doubt. On your one section, "Haphazard not one orbit" I'm not exactly sure what you meant here? Maybe I'm dense. Lol ... in any case best of luck on the contest :) Eileen Manassian March 9, 2016 at 10:37 PM Remember, Timothy...I'm trying to use iambic pentameter so sometimes the word structure might seem odd. That line was referring to the fact that God has set these planets in their paths....it is the work of a Creator God and there is nothing haphazard about it. :) That last line....I changed from the original as I had to find a word that has the stress on the second syllable. :) Thanks for the visit, dear. The heavens have always fascinated me.

Arthur Vaso March 9, 2016 at 7:14 PM Oh this is so wonderful, and well breathtaking, and the line of "orbs" reminds me of a saint, and her story! Eileen Manassian March 9, 2016 at 10:40 PM Thank you, dear. I'm glad you could relate to this write. For me....orbs always reminds me of Vincent van Gogh. His painting of Starry Night was in my mind. :) Hope all is well. Hugs

Ilene Bauer March 9, 2016 at 5:14 PM a perfect topic for a contest called "breathtaking," eileen, and you've done a beautiful job of describing the stars above... Eileen Manassian March 9, 2016 at 10:45 PM Thank you, SO. Your praise brings joy. Eileen Manassian March 9, 2016 at 10:41 PM Thank you, dear. I decided to deviate from my usual mush for this one. :) I appreciate your lovely visit, Ilene. Hugs

Andrea Dietrich March 9, 2016 at 3:55 PM Gorgeous and smooth flowing. I hope he does not mind rhyme on the breathtaking ones. Sometimes I get mixed up when he wants us to rhyme them or not. I want to do a romantic one. Wish me luck. haha. Eileen Manassian March 9, 2016 at 10:48 PM OH!! Andie going for romantic. :) I will be sure to check you out. I love it when you do romantic writes, dear. I don't know if he wants them rhymed, but I think I did that for the last contest and I did ok. Unless my memory fails me. ;) Hugs

Bl Devnath March 9, 2016 at 1:14 PM Excellent poem in contest my lovely friend. Loved always, bl Eileen Manassian March 9, 2016 at 1:36 PM Thanks, BL. It's nice to have a visit from you. :)

Charlie Smith March 9, 2016 at 1:07 PM A celestial delight, well done and fond wishes for its success, Eileen Eileen Manassian March 9, 2016 at 1:35 PM :) Thanks, Charlie. I appreciate your visit and kind words. Blessings.

Daniel Turner March 9, 2016 at 1:06 PM Well done, Eileen. Great acrostic. Good luck and Peace dear lady:) Eileen Manassian March 9, 2016 at 1:34 PM Thank you, Daniel. I'm glad you liked this piece. I'm not happy with the meter in that last line. Might make some changes. Hugs

Paul Callus March 9, 2016 at 12:42 PM Content and lovely rhyme make this poem (in flowing acrostic form) one of "pure delight"! No doubt...winning material, Eileen! Hugs // paul Eileen Manassian March 9, 2016 at 12:58 PM Thanks, dear one. Appassionata is pleased with your lovely post. Hugs

Anne-Lise Andresen March 9, 2016 at 12:32 PM - Wish to see the northern lights dancing (much northern light in northern Norway but I live on the west coast), heavens colors, astronomy and "diamonds" fascinates me - a beautiful poem, dear Eileen Eileen Manassian March 9, 2016 at 12:57 PM Sunshine....I would love to see the norther lights before I die....yes...how fascinating. Thanks for the visit, sweetie. Wish you could have all the diamonds your heart desires...hugs

Lin Lane March 9, 2016 at 12:22 PM "Adoring thoughts ascend from human fools" Good one, Eileen. Eileen Manassian March 9, 2016 at 12:26 PM Thanks, dear. My Daddy was a Master Guide and Camp director. :) He loved teaching astronomy. He'd point out constellations to us kids. There is no way you can look up at the stars and not be awed by the greatness of God and the nothingness of man. Thanks for the visit, dear. Hugs