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Breathless

My eyes are all out of breath A day such as this feels the calm fingers ........ of eternity In this....the morning of a new year change stands on the horizon Yet, earth feels no quiver ...the air weaves no motion in the shafts of wheat to mark the soundless trail by which the seasons pass So hushed a day is this that one mere leaf floating earthward with compliant sigh would send the echo of it's whispering across the purple arches of the sky can I? should I? even try to write a poem? for, who am I to describe? a q u i e t b e a u t y t r a n s c e n d i n g a l l e y e s this gift from God ____________________________________________________________

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Date: 10/3/2010 10:38:00 AM
great write and well deserved win!!
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Date: 9/27/2010 5:42:00 AM
Congratulations on your win Carrie in John Freeman's contest "Your Free Verse Precept" Love,Carol
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Date: 9/26/2010 6:49:00 PM
Man have you got it or what there Lady Carrie. very lovely..I'm talkin' lovely...congratulations on your win with this under appraised gem.
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Date: 9/26/2010 3:42:00 PM
Congratulations on your win in John's contest. :) Love, iolanda
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Date: 9/26/2010 2:48:00 PM
Congratulations on your win in the contest, Carrie. Love, Audrey
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Date: 9/26/2010 11:51:00 AM
Carrie, Congratulations on your win in John's contest! I thought this was one of the best entries. Love, Carolyn
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Date: 9/26/2010 11:11:00 AM
"Yes of course write a poem", A quiet beauty transcending all eyes" Smile, that is what heart poetry is all about, isn't it? Smile. "Congratulations" Agape, Moses
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Date: 9/26/2010 10:28:00 AM
Congratulations on this fine win in the contesdt, Carrie
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Date: 9/26/2010 10:10:00 AM
Very beautifully presented!!!!!!!!!best of luck!!!!!!! Vrushani!!!!!!!
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Date: 9/26/2010 10:01:00 AM
Congrats Carrie on your big win in John's contest with these lovely words so poignant.. enjoy your sweet success this happy Sunday with luv..
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Date: 9/22/2010 3:13:00 AM
Carrie, you have such a unique way of writing. . .enchanting, a bit mysterious and always beautiful! I really loved this one. It is sure to do really well in the contest. Aloha, Connie
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Date: 9/21/2010 9:18:00 PM
Wow Carrie, I just love your entry for John's contest. Your ending is sweet sublime. Best wishes for the contest, love Wilma
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Date: 9/21/2010 6:04:00 PM
Well, U did an excellent job of discribing it. I think I like autumn poetry. hmmm....
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Date: 9/21/2010 5:25:00 PM
Very beautiful..loved it Take care~Deb
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Date: 9/21/2010 5:04:00 PM
Exquisite piece Carrie... enjoyed reading tonight .. if for any contest ..good luck..with luv..
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Date: 9/21/2010 4:34:00 PM
Excellent use of the free verse form and a strong message clearly conveyed in your words, Carrie. John is sure to love this one. Best wishes in his contest. Love, Carolyn
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Date: 9/21/2010 2:32:00 PM
i think of winter as the earth exhaling and spring as inhaling. nice writing. john
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Date: 9/21/2010 2:20:00 PM
A nice example of quite a free verse, Carrie
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