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Breathless

His chest rose...fell Relaxed...Death took him away Breathless... Stiff as Stone

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Date: 6/21/2019 6:59:00 AM
Wow! That is how I want to go. So fast!
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Gershon Wolf
Date: 6/21/2019 11:34:00 AM
Interesting comment... I hadn't even realized that you could interpret this haiku the way you did. I had focused on the double entendre of the word 'breathless'... Now that you've pointed it out the 'sudden death' aspect to me, I see it clearly. Thanks!! :) gw
Date: 6/20/2019 12:39:00 AM
Poor guy, it was his time, we all still need to face this - well penned my friend. Hugs, Jennifer.
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Gershon Wolf
Date: 6/20/2019 8:28:00 AM
Appreciate the support, Jennifer. Warm wishes, gw
Date: 6/19/2019 10:52:00 PM
Nicely done!
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Gershon Wolf
Date: 6/20/2019 8:28:00 AM
TYSM, Kim. :) gw

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