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Breathing With Mystic Rose

When the night claims you like a wayward leaf of old 
and it takes you to the caves where anything turns gold 
you don't ask any questions and you don't dare breathe
you just follow her, like a light weight tumbled weed 

Down the passages of dark, down the staircase of rune 
every step a little deeper than the crevices of moon
you can almost taste the air, on your tonguing clepe
you can down the stars of heaven in one single leap 

Taking you by the waist it shall dance you through
the elixir of happiness when your feeling down n' blue 
you just thank the Lord for the magic of this gift 
all you need is skin n' eyes to cross her lowly rift 

When night claims you like a wayward leaf of old
and takes you to her caves, all etched with gold
don't ask her any questions just go ahead breathe 
no, don't ask her anything at all, just breathe, 
yes breathe... 

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Deep breaths I took when she stepped into my world
a goddess she became when in my arms she twirled.
At entry to her cave she beckoned with promising eyes.
I would've followed her until the stars fell from the skies.

We heard celestial music playing, a lover's waltz the tune
I held her in my arms and we danced around the moon
Back down into her cave, we romped into a golden maze
Her scent of wild magnolia set the fire in my heart ablaze.

We paused for a moment as she placed a finger to my lips.
Passion aroused, my hands slowly dropped down to her hips.
She batted her silken lashes and danced deeper into her cave.
Teasing little minx, turned and raised her hand in alluring wave.

Not a dream is my goddess, who still sleeps within my arms
enticed me into her cave with soft music and sensual charms.
I will linger here beside her until we take our last breath.
In our cave where all is gold, we'll stay even after death.

yes, we breathe... we breathe as one



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December 29th 2015
Collaboration Contest
Sponsor: Mystic Rose
Copyright © | Year Posted 2015

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Hassen Avatar
January 31, 2016 at 11:59 AM
Beautifully written!
Lane Avatar
January 31, 2016 at 3:31 PM
Thanks so much, Lisanne.
Gulley Avatar
January 28, 2016 at 12:34 PM
A wonderful write Lin with Mystic Rose. Congratulations on this fantastic first place win.....Sharon
Lane Avatar
January 28, 2016 at 2:46 PM
Thank you very much, Sharon.
Tor Avatar
January 27, 2016 at 10:52 AM
Been away but temporarily back want to congratulate you Lin. On all your wins! I'm sorry for not entering your contest I was away training for work.
Lane Avatar
January 28, 2016 at 2:44 PM
Thank you for letting me know that, Michael. I appreciate that you told me and hope your training went well.
Selfa Avatar
January 27, 2016 at 8:19 AM
A great collaboration! Congratulations on your wonderful win Lin!! :) -HANS
Lane Avatar
January 28, 2016 at 2:42 PM
Thanks...MR's verses made it easy to get in the right frame of mind.
A  Avatar
January 26, 2016 at 11:12 PM
Lin,,, congratulations on your collaboration with mystic rose. Luv Skat
Roper Avatar
January 26, 2016 at 10:04 PM
Great add on, Lin, the rhythm, flow is wonderful :-) Congratulations on your win!
Lane Avatar
January 28, 2016 at 2:41 PM
Thanks, sweety..;)
Cwiak Avatar
January 26, 2016 at 8:18 PM
Wonderful write, Lin! Deeply set in the cave where only lovers can breathe. Kudos on your win.
Lane Avatar
January 28, 2016 at 2:40 PM
Thanks so much, Dan.
Fisher Avatar
January 26, 2016 at 8:06 PM
Congrats on a top placement, Lin! Very enjoyable and enchanting poem.
Lane Avatar
January 28, 2016 at 2:39 PM
Thank you, David.
Haight Avatar
January 26, 2016 at 7:36 PM
I love how you did this, Lin! Beautiful, and congratulations on your top win! Hugs, Sandra
Lane Avatar
January 28, 2016 at 2:38 PM
thank you so much, Sandra.
Lindley Avatar
January 2, 2016 at 6:48 AM
Wow. Seems I've missed so many gems that you have cast forth lately my friend. This collaboration is magnificent from start to finish!! Congrats on you and Mystic writing one truly superlative entry in that contest. Surely will place very , very high IMHO. A7
Lane Avatar
January 2, 2016 at 7:17 AM
Mystic set the stage for this one...Thank you for liking it so well, Robert.
Scars Avatar
January 1, 2016 at 7:24 PM
Beautiful Lin...just amazing and good luck in the contest..*smiles* -luloo
Lane Avatar
January 1, 2016 at 7:26 PM
Thanks a bunch, Luloo. Vienna set the scene...easy to follow her lead.
May Avatar
December 31, 2015 at 10:01 AM
Great write Lin..I especially liked the 2nd stanza...best wishes
Lane Avatar
December 31, 2015 at 10:05 AM
Thank you very much, Joseph...so glad you like our collaboration.
Sage Avatar
December 31, 2015 at 3:53 AM
wow...outstanding, you did well...best of luck for the contest
Lane Avatar
December 31, 2015 at 5:12 AM
Thanks for such a nice compliment. It's appreciated.
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