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Breaking

six a.m. gray dulls the straight horizon with morning tumble-burst rain clouds look, even the sun is breaking! so am I tied to my bed in thoughts of the having, the holding, the breaking broken glass is nice it cuts less, grinds down instead of in in fact, broken glass can't bring you half the sadness of breaking it goes deep and down, then it twists around now, it's done again it stays there like thick fog covering sunlight trying to rise yellow bright reduced to breaking smoky gray honey, sitting on a shelf in a bandage womb of blankets; paste her together with plaster and glue in only hours she'll be just like new all my tomorrows I was the fool lit to "dusty death" out brief candle! alone again, hoping to break out instead of breaking inside
*Entry for Mark Toney's Marathon Mile 3 Premium Contest
Copyright © | Year Posted 2010

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Oule Avatar
March 6, 2015 at 6:07 AM
Congs Carol,
Trichet Avatar
March 5, 2015 at 12:22 AM
Congrats Carolyn, I can feel your pain with this lovely write - well done
Marcum Wong Avatar
March 4, 2015 at 6:23 PM
Carolyn, I can see why Richard chose this poignant piece as a #1 winner. It is truly beautiful. Congratulations on your win my friend! 7
Ryerson Avatar
March 4, 2015 at 11:08 AM
So this is where it all started huh? SO glad it did!! You were one of the very first to welcome me to the Soup and for THAT I will forever be grateful...Of course, you know how much I identify my dear friend...
Allison Avatar
March 4, 2015 at 10:25 AM
Heartbreakingly sad write Caroly with such amazing deep imagery - it is so interesting reading the reasons why we started to post poems here congrats on your win:-) Hugs Jan xx
Kendrick Avatar
March 15, 2012 at 3:15 PM
Congrats on your winning entry ..Way to go..Sara
Maverick Avatar
March 13, 2012 at 10:41 PM
Congratulations on the H M Carolyn,, can't send you soup mail; but thinking of you..)
Johnson Avatar
March 13, 2012 at 6:32 PM
I guess she was looking for something else or this one would have been at the top of the heap. Very lovely, Carolyn. Love, Joyce
Sweetheart Avatar
March 13, 2012 at 3:33 PM
congrats Carolyn on winning an HM for PD souper contest with this super entry luv.. enjoy honor..
Brown Avatar
March 13, 2012 at 6:17 AM
Congratulations for your win in P.D.'s get well soup contest Carolyn. Love, Carol
Tams The Golden Girl Avatar
March 13, 2012 at 2:55 AM
Hi and congratulations Carolyn, nice one xx
Brown Avatar
December 19, 2011 at 5:30 AM
Congratulations on your super win in P.D.'s "It's Up To You" contest Carolyn. Love, Carol
Poet Avatar
December 18, 2011 at 3:24 AM
A touching write Carolyn.Congrats on your win.
Quigley Avatar
December 17, 2011 at 2:25 PM
A very stirring write Carolyn. Well done. Congratulations
Laan Avatar
March 23, 2011 at 4:00 AM
Wonderful poem, congratulations on your win:)))
Brown Avatar
March 21, 2011 at 10:45 AM
Congratulations to you Carolyn for your win in Catie's contest "Free Verse Frenzy". Love, Carol
Beck Avatar
March 21, 2011 at 9:29 AM
a delightful mixture of a poem filled with Devonshire and Shakespeare, and I enjoyed every line...well done Carolyn.....best wishes Syd
George   Avatar
March 21, 2011 at 6:58 AM
Sensational Free Verse, Carolyn. This is the genre I find most difficult to write. You inspire me. Many congrat's on your BIG WIN. Elaine
Onclaud Avatar
March 21, 2011 at 12:40 AM
riveting, carols.. happy congrats for this fine win! huggs, nette
Guzzi Avatar
March 20, 2011 at 2:26 PM
A marvel, soul baring, evocative, actually painful as you felt it to read...Congrad's [geez I haven't read one yet which didn't deserve a #1 this was some stiff competition!] Light & Love
Frayer Avatar
March 20, 2011 at 12:11 PM
You are so gifted Carolyn! It seems to me that you have broke out and ur writings will take you farther than you could imagine. Even though a sad poem this is, its the saddest moments that make for the best of writers Congrats with much luv ~Virginia
Calhoun Avatar
March 20, 2011 at 11:35 AM
Loved this. Aa BIG 7+++rating. Congratulations on your BIG WIN in Catie's contest. Best wishes, KC
Richards Avatar
March 20, 2011 at 9:20 AM
Wow, Carolyn....I don't remember ever seeing this one of yours, but I agree with Catie....I think this is one of your best! Powerful and wonderful ! Congratulations!!
Freeman Avatar
March 20, 2011 at 8:07 AM
Exceptional work Carolyn, good to see you at the top. Congratulations on your worthy honor in the top five. Agape, Moses
Fraser Avatar
August 25, 2010 at 1:02 PM
Wow Carolyn, you are on a roll with the wins, well done you. I hope you are feeling a little better >> James
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