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six a.m. gray dulls the straight horizon with morning tumble-burst rain clouds look, even the sun is breaking! so am I tied to my bed in thoughts of the having, the holding, the breaking broken glass is nice it cuts less, grinds down instead of in in fact, broken glass can't bring you half the sadness of breaking it goes deep and down, then it twists around now, it's done again it stays there like thick fog covering sunlight trying to rise yellow bright reduced to breaking smoky gray honey, sitting on a shelf in a bandage womb of blankets; paste her together with plaster and glue in only hours she'll be just like new all my tomorrows I was the fool lit to "dusty death" out brief candle! alone again, hoping to break out instead of breaking inside
*Entry for Mark Toney's Marathon Mile 3 Premium Contest

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Date: 3/6/2015 6:07:00 AM
Congs Carol,
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Date: 3/5/2015 12:22:00 AM
Congrats Carolyn, I can feel your pain with this lovely write - well done
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Date: 3/4/2015 6:23:00 PM
Carolyn, I can see why Richard chose this poignant piece as a #1 winner. It is truly beautiful. Congratulations on your win my friend! 7
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Date: 3/4/2015 11:08:00 AM
So this is where it all started huh? SO glad it did!! You were one of the very first to welcome me to the Soup and for THAT I will forever be grateful...Of course, you know how much I identify my dear friend...
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Date: 3/4/2015 10:25:00 AM
Heartbreakingly sad write Caroly with such amazing deep imagery - it is so interesting reading the reasons why we started to post poems here congrats on your win:-) Hugs Jan xx
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Date: 3/15/2012 3:15:00 PM
Congrats on your winning entry ..Way to go..Sara
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Date: 3/13/2012 10:41:00 PM
Congratulations on the H M Carolyn,, can't send you soup mail; but thinking of you..)
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Date: 3/13/2012 6:32:00 PM
I guess she was looking for something else or this one would have been at the top of the heap. Very lovely, Carolyn. Love, Joyce
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Date: 3/13/2012 3:33:00 PM
congrats Carolyn on winning an HM for PD souper contest with this super entry luv.. enjoy honor..
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Date: 3/13/2012 6:17:00 AM
Congratulations for your win in P.D.'s get well soup contest Carolyn. Love, Carol
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Date: 3/13/2012 2:55:00 AM
Hi and congratulations Carolyn, nice one xx
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Date: 12/19/2011 5:30:00 AM
Congratulations on your super win in P.D.'s "It's Up To You" contest Carolyn. Love, Carol
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Date: 12/18/2011 3:24:00 AM
A touching write Carolyn.Congrats on your win.
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Date: 12/17/2011 2:25:00 PM
A very stirring write Carolyn. Well done. Congratulations
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Date: 3/23/2011 4:00:00 AM
Wonderful poem, congratulations on your win:)))
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Date: 3/21/2011 10:45:00 AM
Congratulations to you Carolyn for your win in Catie's contest "Free Verse Frenzy". Love, Carol
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Date: 3/21/2011 9:29:00 AM
a delightful mixture of a poem filled with Devonshire and Shakespeare, and I enjoyed every line...well done Carolyn.....best wishes Syd
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Date: 3/21/2011 6:58:00 AM
Sensational Free Verse, Carolyn. This is the genre I find most difficult to write. You inspire me. Many congrat's on your BIG WIN. Elaine
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Date: 3/21/2011 12:40:00 AM
riveting, carols.. happy congrats for this fine win! huggs, nette
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Date: 3/20/2011 2:26:00 PM
A marvel, soul baring, evocative, actually painful as you felt it to read...Congrad's [geez I haven't read one yet which didn't deserve a #1 this was some stiff competition!] Light & Love
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Date: 3/20/2011 12:11:00 PM
You are so gifted Carolyn! It seems to me that you have broke out and ur writings will take you farther than you could imagine. Even though a sad poem this is, its the saddest moments that make for the best of writers Congrats with much luv ~Virginia
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Date: 3/20/2011 11:35:00 AM
Loved this. Aa BIG 7+++rating. Congratulations on your BIG WIN in Catie's contest. Best wishes, KC
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Date: 3/20/2011 9:20:00 AM
Wow, Carolyn....I don't remember ever seeing this one of yours, but I agree with Catie....I think this is one of your best! Powerful and wonderful ! Congratulations!!
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Date: 3/20/2011 8:07:00 AM
Exceptional work Carolyn, good to see you at the top. Congratulations on your worthy honor in the top five. Agape, Moses
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Date: 8/25/2010 1:02:00 PM
Wow Carolyn, you are on a roll with the wins, well done you. I hope you are feeling a little better >> James
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