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Breakfast of Good-Bye

Breakfast of Good-bye


fine remnants softly linger
along the edges - reminiscence,
soft ruffling of a curtain
tickled by a warm summer breeze,
cold scent of passion’s pillow
pressed into the face of yesterday,
lost shoe recovered from act one
flamboyant curtain call,
damp towel draped across a chair
auburn strands entwined,
dripping heart shape
foggy shower door,
wine glass blessed
her gentle passing kiss,
music faintly loitering
amid fading dream,
note that begged forgiveness
for the moment stolen,
fine wine, soggy pasta
breakfast of good-bye.



7/10/2015

Copyright © John Lawless | Year Posted 2015

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Scott Thirtyseven Date: 7/24/2016 8:03:00 AM Found this on the home page, what a pleasure. Login to Reply

Dr. Upma A. Sharma Date: 7/22/2015 2:52:00 AM Awesome write n win John! Big congrats! Login to Reply

Lycia Harding Date: 7/22/2015 1:53:00 AM That is so sad and so lovely. Congrats on your win, John. xoxo Login to Reply

Connie Marcum Wong Date: 7/20/2015 1:51:00 PM Wow John! No contest...this truly belongs at the top! You would make a great novelest. I love the way you have set the scene which draws emotion from the reader. This is superb and going into my favorites! A great choice from Charlotte.7 Login to Reply John Lawless Date: 7/20/2015 2:01:00 PM Thank you Connie for the high praise and high marks.

Kp Nunez Date: 7/20/2015 8:50:00 AM This surely deserves the top win, John. For all the reasons Charlotte already mentioned. Congrats! Kim Login to Reply John Lawless Date: 7/20/2015 2:00:00 PM Thanks Kim, always nice to hear from you.

Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser Date: 7/20/2015 7:59:00 AM John, the title is eye catching and the yours lines wow me again!! the imagery is heavy pulling!! CONGRATULATIONS!~Olive Eloisa Login to Reply John Lawless Date: 7/20/2015 1:59:00 PM sort of the Cinderella syndrome - after the ball is over..Thanks for stopping by to comment

Julia Ward Date: 7/20/2015 6:50:00 AM Your poem displays a gradual, evocative build-up to the final sad scene... Congratulations for all the imagery, John! Login to Reply John Lawless Date: 7/20/2015 1:57:00 PM Thanks Julia, the climax/anti climax phases of passion.

Paul Callus Date: 7/20/2015 3:31:00 AM Love your suggestive imagery and style of writing, John! Indeed, a worthy top winner! #7 Congratulations! // paul Login to Reply John Lawless Date: 7/20/2015 5:08:00 AM Alway nice to hear from you Paul, thanks for stopping by to read and comment and for the high mark

Viv Wigley Date: 7/19/2015 8:17:00 PM This is an absolute belter of a poem, John, must have been a memorable night. A worthy win, and a fave. Score- eleventy-four out of seven. Regards, Viv Login to Reply John Lawless Date: 7/20/2015 5:08:00 AM Easy Viv, scores like that could put poetry soup into the UPDATE MODE.

Skat A Date: 7/19/2015 6:09:00 PM Hello, John, I love this.. glad to see it on the top... SKAT Login to Reply John Lawless Date: 7/20/2015 5:07:00 AM Thanks SKAT glad you enjoyed it.

Carrie Richards Date: 7/19/2015 6:05:00 PM So softly sensual, and takes us to this morning afterglow! Lovely win, and well deserved !! Congratulations, John! Login to Reply John Lawless Date: 7/20/2015 5:06:00 AM Carrie, I love the word afterglow as used to describe this write. There is a "passion" residue in the morning around the room, the house and the glow of the lovers.

Eve Roper Date: 7/19/2015 3:53:00 PM John, wonderfuL write congratulations on your win hugs Eve Login to Reply John Lawless Date: 7/20/2015 5:05:00 AM thanks Eve, I had some fun writing this.

Charlotte Puddifoot Date: 7/19/2015 2:41:00 PM this one impressed me from the first time I read it; it's contemporary, subtle and understated, and very evocative - congrats on your 1st place win in my contest! Login to Reply John Lawless Date: 7/20/2015 5:04:00 AM Thank you Charlotte for the simplicity of an "open poetry" contest as it allowed the muse free reign of subject and presentation.

Jan Allison Date: 7/19/2015 2:35:00 PM Dropping back with my congratulations John:-) Hugs Jan xx Login to Reply John Lawless Date: 7/20/2015 5:01:00 AM always appreciated Jan

Jaycee Cervenka Date: 7/11/2015 11:31:00 AM Great description to convey a heated night of passion, as evidenced by the signs of its aftermath. Hope this does well. Login to Reply John Lawless Date: 7/11/2015 11:54:00 AM Thanks for stopping by to read and comment and don't tell Ian I snuck in a non-footle....

Jan Allison Date: 7/11/2015 11:14:00 AM what amazing imagery John - good luck in the contest - i wasn't going to post my poem until tomorrow but it is filling so fast i will do it today:-) Hugs Jan xx Login to Reply John Lawless Date: 7/11/2015 11:20:00 AM I know Jan, I was surprised at how quickly it was filling also. It seems the summer heat has the muse warmed up and ready to write.