Breakdown

The hours have dissolved
Like sugar in my many cups
And, all thats left are
Jumbled words and ideas.

9/5/21
Liberum divisa contest
From The significance of table 8
Copyright © | Year Posted 2021

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Lusardi Avatar
January 5, 2022 at 11:22 AM
Thank you all for your appreciated comments, i hold them close.
Agustin Avatar
November 1, 2021 at 8:06 PM
Wow! Congrats! Thanks for sharing this. God bless you.
Faulkner Avatar
November 1, 2021 at 5:27 PM
Very descriptive, especially the metaphor of sugar dissolving, congratulations, John~
Dietrich Avatar
November 1, 2021 at 11:48 AM
Great description of a breakdown! Congrats, John.
Peck Avatar
November 1, 2021 at 9:39 AM
I love this poem! It's just the way I feel :) Congratulations on your win!
La France Avatar
November 1, 2021 at 6:43 AM
John, beautiful and congratulations on your win in the contest ~ friendship and poetry _Constance
Lusardi Avatar
October 31, 2021 at 12:29 AM
Thank you for your comment, i am pleased it gives transparency.
Barden Avatar
October 30, 2021 at 7:35 PM
This could express many things, and I like that ambiguity and the layers it paints ... nicely done on a well-earned eight place in this VERY tight winners field - I enjoyed this thoroughly. Blessings! - the bard
Barden Avatar
October 30, 2021 at 7:36 PM
No other comments?? That's just crazy ...
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