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a diabolical grace ...

dark, deep, warm-black arms of
an endless night wrap me ...
head thrown back in abdication -
arms spread wide in surrender,
falling backward, back, back, onto a
hard dogwood blackness ...
nails of my own stark weakness
fasten my hands to a
weighty tree of terrifying introspection ...

poison saturates my blood,
courses with its curses through the
very vessel my soul inhabits ...
dictates to me by the minutes the
movements of my muscles,
states of my vapid organs, thus ...
responses and emotions, true,
like the visceral, mighty hand of some
morbidly jealous god, squeezing
the true and the good from every last
cell of my being - the strength
and health built by a lifetime of good
habit and task, torn asunder
by a guileful beast - a duplicitous, faceless
monster that I invited in from
wintertide like some pitiful, starving fawn ...

oh, it IS pitiful in its treachery,
and it starves - oh yes, it starves ...
with a hunger for souls and
lives and accomplishments and truth,
and it eats them ALL with a
lust unending, and a ravenous fury,
laughing at you with a Cheshire
grin, your own warm, crimson blood on
its shining, chiseled teeth ...

and while you tremble in horror at
its stark visage, while you
stare transfixed into lifeless black eyes,
the face changes, the abomination
transforms into a beauty so pure and
compelling, that your only
thought and desire and compulsion,
is to drink it in with a kiss as
deep as the Universe itself .. to pour
yourself into it with every
passion and emotion you can scrape
from the ice-flaked walls of
your conscience, to merge with it, join it
in all abandon and care and
affliction, and give yourself whole to the
dim, shadowy vehemence
complete, while the deafening roar of your
own screams and scratchings,
plays a somber requiem, final - a sickly
sweet song ...

of obliteration.







~ 1st Place ~  in the "Brainstorm" Poetry Contest, John Hamilton, Judge & Sponsor.

Copyright © | Year Posted 2018



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Date: 10/26/2018 11:08:00 AM
That is a masterpiece. I hope after obliteration starts the rebuild...Congratulations on your well deserved win, Kai
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Date: 10/25/2018 6:56:00 PM
Congratulations on your first place win with this outstanding piece of writing. It is so very well deserved. Deb
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Date: 10/25/2018 1:36:00 PM
- A wonderful writing, with strong anxiety and deep depression ... each verse gives each word a great deal of weight, Gregory - Congratulations with well deserved 1st place in the contest - hugs // Anne-Lise :)
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Date: 10/25/2018 12:49:00 PM
Well done Gregory, congratulations on a terrific piece...
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Date: 10/25/2018 12:37:00 PM
So Greg what can I say...another stunning write, congrats on a fine shared number 1!
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Date: 1/12/2018 8:07:00 AM
Life has a way of making one oblivion ready! Of course, you said it much more poetically and dramatically, a mood my pen and I have been in more than once, but never by choice (that I recall.) Great write, truly. I marinated in each line. Poetry hugs ... CayCay
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Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 1/19/2018 11:45:00 PM
I adore this comment ... "marinated in each line"!
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Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 1/12/2018 6:36:00 PM
Ooh I love that comment/imagery, CayCay - "marinated in each line" ... wow, that's exquisite, and am so flattered by such description! Thank you so much for these wonderful words, my friend! :-) <3
Date: 1/11/2018 5:05:00 PM
wow, this is powerfully written, Greg, This "faceless monster" is a heartless beast. I'm in awe of your writing.
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Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 1/11/2018 10:20:00 PM
Thank you very much, Becca, that's so kind of you ... I'm glad you liked this one, my friend! Blessings! :-) <3
Date: 1/10/2018 9:29:00 PM
Although in ‘Free Form’ (for many an excuse for random phrasing), you have created poetry that does have form that appeals and enhances the descriptive power of your words- impressive.
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Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 1/10/2018 10:17:00 PM
That's very kind of you, Geoffrey, and I am humbled by your very sincere comments ... blessings, my friend! :-)
Date: 1/9/2018 7:56:00 AM
so poignant Greg, loved this poem very much, good luck it will place high I'm sure ;) -luloo
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Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 1/10/2018 7:30:00 PM
That's very kind of you, Luloo - thank you so much, My Friend! :-) <3
Date: 1/9/2018 5:38:00 AM
Addictions is a very difficult thing and something very personal, I felt the real emotions through your words.. A dark and deep poem highlighting the issues... Excellent write Greg..
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Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 1/10/2018 7:29:00 PM
Thank you so much, S1 ... it is a lifetime battle, and one that has much misunderstanding surrounding it, and little compassion. I hope I can help to remedy that in some way - I believe that's why I'm still here, walking this marvelous life! :-)
Date: 1/8/2018 8:44:00 PM
Superbly done, Gregory. GL with this strong winner.
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Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 1/10/2018 7:27:00 PM
Thank you very much, Line - best to you, friend! :-) <3
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