Brainstorm-Finding Abigail

Finding Abigail

“Abigail! ~Abigail!...where are you, my love?
I can’t see you, nor smell you, let alone touch you…”

A nebulous cloud encroaches the corridors of mind,
Where a fallacious hope seeks its refuge in silence.

“Abigail! Is that you? I thought I heard someone talking…”

Disembodied voices revel throughout the empty voids,
Existence in the grand abyss impenetrable from both sides.

“Abigail, I know you care about me…I can’t see you,
but I hear you…I remember the time we met my sweet,
the sky and air stood still until we embraced…
then came the fireworks…we must still be there, for all I see
is smoke my dearest…Abigail! come back my love,
 I’ve lost you in the smog!”

Illusions begging resolutions, the marginal mind wanders,
Taking with it memories of what used to be,
but now has been abandoned.

“Abigail my love…I’m afraid…can you hold my hand my sweet?
this is no good, I can’t reach you…where are you…Abigail!?”

The subject is going into Cardiac arrest… convulsions are increasing!...
We are losing him! Quickly flush with at least 20ml of 0.9% sodium chloride…

“Abigail my dearest…I can see you…so beautiful you are…come to me
My love…come closer...let us start anew.”

Nurse, prepare him for surgery…there is a good chance we may save him…”yes Doctor.”

“Abigail! Abigail! ...I’m losing you, my love…come back, come bac, com…”

He’ll be OK now…we saved him, but sadly he will still be enslaved by love…




Oct.04.2018
Brainstorm Poetry
Sponsored by: John Hamilton


Placed 2'nd [1'st of 8]

Copyright © | Year Posted 2018



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Date: 10/26/2018 11:18:00 AM
Great stuff. Congratulations on your win. Am I missing something or is there a transgender element underlying the rescue? Kind wishes, Kai
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Date: 10/25/2018 1:57:00 PM
Congratulations on this win. This beautiful and haunting, all at the same time. ~ Brandy
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Date: 10/25/2018 1:51:00 PM
- A wonderful poem, W.W. ... in pain of body and mind - Congratulations :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)
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Date: 10/25/2018 12:43:00 PM
Great write WW, very compelling and realistic I felt for the poor guy...congrats on a great win!
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Date: 10/10/2018 12:54:00 PM
Fascinating write! Best of luck in the contest! ~ gw
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Date: 10/9/2018 9:23:00 PM
Hi John, good luck in the contest, I hope this piece does well. Again your poetic excellence shines through in this wonderful free verse write. Free verse seems to have been made for your writing style. It is always a pleasure and an honour to visit your poetry. You know how to tell a story my friend. A wonderful read. Another fave my friend. Have a Wonderful Wednesday. Your friend always....Mike.
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Date: 10/6/2018 7:35:00 PM
What a great write , ^WW^, a perfect scene of near death experience. Good luck in the contest ...
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Date: 10/5/2018 4:09:00 AM
I feel for him; his longing and pain. Beautiful poem.
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Date: 10/4/2018 10:33:00 PM
An emotional journey you have taken me on, and I am still lost in these moments- the ones you so tenderly express. Deep sigh. Love & Heartbeats. ~ Brandy
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Date: 10/4/2018 4:37:00 PM
Great story telling WW.. So are you a right winged or left winged warrior? Lol
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Date: 10/4/2018 2:55:00 PM
beguiled by this remarkable piece; well i hope this is not co-dependency, but then again, the progression of suspense hit me, WW... huggs
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Date: 10/4/2018 7:37:00 AM
Wow!! two strong contenders I see, both on a somewhat similar trend. Dramatic and suspense rolled in. WW, I loved it from beginning to end, however good luck my dear friend....Maria hugs
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Date: 10/4/2018 7:31:00 AM
Very beautifully done dear friend, WW! Wish you good luck!
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Date: 10/4/2018 6:53:00 AM
Great one WW! Each line a suspense to the next. Well done :)
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Date: 10/4/2018 2:10:00 AM
With entries like yours and Victors it will be a tough one to judge. Love the imagery. Tom
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Date: 10/4/2018 12:53:00 AM
wow excellent expression of devotion- He’ll be OK now…we saved him, but sadly he will still be enslaved by love…
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