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Brain Drain

I took a visit inside my brain today To check what was happening It has been a little sluggish of late Like a cloudy day not a clear day in spring! It was dim on entering So l turned on my lamp It was really quite foggy Felt a little damp The memory section caught my eye As there were countless empty spots A bundle of wires nearby All tied up in knots The vision section was labelled Though extremely hard to see From a distance I think it read: h E L p M e The emotional section was out of control Eratic movements up and down Huge highs , deep lows Overstressed and unwound My brain it seems is in great need Of an overhaul and mending Overwhelmed , l swiftly exited my brain Service and repairs left pending

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Date: 1/3/2025 2:29:00 PM
What a great idea and excellent execution of it! It was engaging, interesting and clever! Great job Deb! A fav for me!
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Date: 1/3/2025 2:33:00 PM
Awww thanks karen…..every fave to me is so very special….so thankyou so much my friend! Very appreciated!!Deb x
Date: 12/26/2024 1:26:00 AM
This made me smile, but I am afraid I win, I am sure mine is more empty! :)
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Date: 1/2/2025 2:10:00 PM
You always make me laugh Arthur…..l reckon it would be a battle as to who’s brain was emptier HA! Debx
Date: 12/25/2024 9:58:00 AM
This is clever, yet meaningful to most of us. My brain and I went into retirement on the same day. I very much enjoyed your poem.
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Date: 1/2/2025 2:22:00 PM
Thats funny Hilda….it made me smile!! Belated thanks my friend!! Debx
Date: 12/24/2024 2:02:00 PM
Nothing some meths and salvital; strongly stirred won't remedy Deb..I have a whole inventory ( sheep dip ) if The former fails or raw spinefex from an Out back trail.' Administerd with real Aussie love And a bit of interest specially if you do the big Three.' See ya Later.)
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Date: 1/2/2025 2:24:00 PM
Hey Joe….that all sounds a wee bit gross so l will pass on that hehe!! Thanks for the suggestion though….l will take the real aussie love only Ha…..see ya later mate! Debx
Date: 12/20/2024 10:36:00 PM
A very deep and clever write Deb. Wish you brain fog free Happy Christmas - Maria
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Date: 1/2/2025 2:38:00 PM
Belated thanks Maria….l really appreciate your thoughts and comment! Hope too had a fog free brain Chrissy Ha! Debx
Date: 12/19/2024 12:01:00 PM
You keep a pretty tidy brain there, Deb. If I looked in mine there’d be weirdos by the score. Seriously, though, an intriguing depiction of the grey space that many of us probably recognise. Terry
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Date: 1/2/2025 2:29:00 PM
Weirdos l must say l do believe that my FF! Seriously though….l thank you Terry as always….Debx
Date: 12/19/2024 3:53:00 AM
Boy, you nailed it Dab!! I've taken that journey ! You've described perfectly and such a poetic way!! Happy Thursday xxoo
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Date: 1/2/2025 2:25:00 PM
You just get me Mike…great minds eh haha!! Belated thanks my friend! Debx
Date: 12/17/2024 11:26:00 AM
Debbie, I think i would join you for a service and repair, overhaul and mending. I think this poem is so extremely clever, also so funny. So well penned Deb. Blessings and hugs Jen.
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Date: 1/2/2025 2:36:00 PM
Jen…l have never considered myself clever so l consider you saying my poem is extremely clever as a huge compliment so thankyou so much my lovely friend! Debx
Date: 12/17/2024 10:42:00 AM
Hi Deb, my brain went down the drain years ago, enjoyed reading your wonderful poem God bless you. xx
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Date: 1/2/2025 2:27:00 PM
Hehe l think with many others also John!! Belated thanks….Debx
Date: 12/17/2024 5:32:00 AM
The humorous approach makes the poem relatable to whole new levels! Loved it!
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Date: 1/2/2025 2:30:00 PM
Belated thanks CF ….l really do appreciate your comment….Debx
Date: 12/17/2024 1:36:00 AM
- Just needs a little dusting and everything will feel much better, Deb :))) - hugs
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Date: 1/2/2025 2:30:00 PM
You are so sweet Sunshine but l think l need more than a dust off hehe!! Debx
Date: 12/16/2024 7:19:00 PM
I really liked this very relatable and whimsical :)
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Date: 12/16/2024 10:41:00 PM
Thankyou so much Joseph....l appreciate your comment and l am happy you liked it! Debx
Date: 12/16/2024 3:27:00 PM
Lol I enjoyed reading this Deb, thanks for the smile mine needs some service also. Have a great day...
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Date: 12/16/2024 10:42:00 PM
You are welcome my friend! Thanks Michael! Debx

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