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Brain Drain

I took a visit inside my brain today
To check what was happening
It has been a little sluggish of late
Like a cloudy day not a clear day in spring!

It was dim on entering
So l turned on my lamp  
It was really quite foggy 
Felt a little damp

The memory section caught my eye
As there were countless empty spots
A bundle of wires nearby 
All tied up in knots

The vision section was labelled
Though extremely hard to see
From a distance
I think it read:

h E L p M e

The emotional section was out of control
Eratic movements up and down
Huge highs , deep lows
Overstressed and unwound

My brain it seems is in great need
Of an overhaul and mending
Overwhelmed , l swiftly exited my brain
Service and repairs left pending

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Karen Jones

Date: 1/3/2025 2:29:00 PM

What a great idea and excellent execution of it! It was engaging, interesting and clever! Great job Deb! A fav for me!

Deb M
Date: 1/3/2025 2:33:00 PM

Awww thanks karen…..every fave to me is so very special….so thankyou so much my friend! Very appreciated!!Deb x

Arthur Vaso

Date: 12/26/2024 1:26:00 AM

This made me smile, but I am afraid I win, I am sure mine is more empty! :)

Deb M
Date: 1/2/2025 2:10:00 PM

You always make me laugh Arthur…..l reckon it would be a battle as to who’s brain was emptier HA! Debx

Hilda Greenhough

Date: 12/25/2024 9:58:00 AM

This is clever, yet meaningful to most of us. My brain and I went into retirement on the same day. I very much enjoyed your poem.

Deb M
Date: 1/2/2025 2:22:00 PM

Thats funny Hilda….it made me smile!! Belated thanks my friend!! Debx

Joe Maverick

Date: 12/24/2024 2:02:00 PM

Nothing some meths and salvital; strongly stirred won't remedy Deb..I have a whole inventory ( sheep dip ) if The former fails or raw spinefex from an Out back trail.' Administerd with real Aussie love And a bit of interest specially if you do the big Three.' See ya Later.)

Deb M
Date: 1/2/2025 2:24:00 PM

Hey Joe….that all sounds a wee bit gross so l will pass on that hehe!! Thanks for the suggestion though….l will take the real aussie love only Ha…..see ya later mate! Debx

Maria Williams

Date: 12/20/2024 10:36:00 PM

A very deep and clever write Deb. Wish you brain fog free Happy Christmas - Maria

Deb M
Date: 1/2/2025 2:38:00 PM

Belated thanks Maria….l really appreciate your thoughts and comment! Hope too had a fog free brain Chrissy Ha! Debx

Terry Flood

Date: 12/19/2024 12:01:00 PM

You keep a pretty tidy brain there, Deb. If I looked in mine there’d be weirdos by the score. Seriously, though, an intriguing depiction of the grey space that many of us probably recognise. Terry

Deb M
Date: 1/2/2025 2:29:00 PM

Weirdos l must say l do believe that my FF! Seriously though….l thank you Terry as always….Debx

Mike Gentile

Date: 12/19/2024 3:53:00 AM

Boy, you nailed it Dab!! I've taken that journey ! You've described perfectly and such a poetic way!! Happy Thursday xxoo

Deb M
Date: 1/2/2025 2:25:00 PM

You just get me Mike…great minds eh haha!! Belated thanks my friend! Debx

Jennifer Proxenos

Date: 12/17/2024 11:26:00 AM

Debbie, I think i would join you for a service and repair, overhaul and mending. I think this poem is so extremely clever, also so funny. So well penned Deb. Blessings and hugs Jen.

Deb M
Date: 1/2/2025 2:36:00 PM

Jen…l have never considered myself clever so l consider you saying my poem is extremely clever as a huge compliment so thankyou so much my lovely friend! Debx