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Bottom of Bottle

At bottom of a glass of wine, finds truth If he has a second, becomes uncouth, If he has a third, he spits as he talks Finally by 4th he wobbles as walks, By the fifth can hardly stand, it’s his call Just a drop left, let me finish it all, The whore that is with him is just as bad, Why do this, are they both insane, quite mad, He has hit rock bottom, where to from now, He feels himself slipping, and wipes his brow. Submitting: To contest " Rhyming Couplets Poetry Contest" Sponsor : Janice Canerdy Date: 10/04/2021

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Lisa Ricci

Date: 5/29/2021 10:52:00 AM

Hello Jennifer - The reader can see the progression and the analogy. Your thoughts were well stated. Thank you for sharing. Enjoy poetry soup.

Jennifer Proxenos

Date: 5/13/2021 12:43:00 AM

I thank you all dear friends for my wonderful comments. Please accept my apologies if I don't answer you all individually but I have not got the time available, however, I will be visiting all your sites.. Love and hugs, Jennifer.

Regina Mcintosh

Date: 5/8/2021 8:15:00 AM

So sad... the bottle is no place to visit much less live in. God bless you friend. love, Gina

Michelle Faulkner

Date: 5/7/2021 10:21:00 AM

The danger of the bottle, so starkly expressed here, a very intriguing poem, best wishes for the contest!

Christuraj Alex

Date: 5/5/2021 4:34:00 AM

Very Beautiful!

Paghunda Zahid

Date: 4/30/2021 2:47:00 PM

A cute one... One should drink that much lol... Was it placed in the contest? This really is cute

John Gondolf

Date: 4/18/2021 7:56:00 AM

I enjoyed this cute little poem, Jenn, I usually stop at uncouth :) Best of luck in the contest. Hugs, John

Gershon Wolf

Date: 4/16/2021 4:46:00 PM

Came back to finish the bottle. lol. ~ Haven't seen any whores though. lol. :) gw

Judy Ball

Date: 4/15/2021 1:16:00 PM

They say a bit of wine is good for the digestion but too much isn't good for anything. Well done Jennifer. God Bless, JB

Paula Goldsmith

Date: 4/14/2021 8:38:00 AM

A wonderful write and so very true. Why drink so much??????? Good Luck. Have a blessed day...........

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 4/12/2021 2:25:00 PM

really good stuff, Jennifer. A fave for me!

Anne-Lise Andresen

Date: 4/12/2021 11:52:00 AM

- He's drunk too much ... he should find his bed ... or maybe he should vomit first ... some people always have to see the bottom of a bottle ... - Best wishes in the contest, dear Jenny :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)

Alexis Y.

Date: 4/11/2021 1:27:00 PM

WoW! Jennifer, This is a good entry for the contest. You described one suffering for alcohol addiction very well. Best wishes in the contest. Have a great day:-) Alexis

Victor Buhagiar

Date: 4/11/2021 10:25:00 AM

Today we were drinking a white Verdicchio. Good thing I kept alert, I almost hit a post.

Gordon Mcconnell

Date: 4/11/2021 8:28:00 AM

Fine write Jenny telling well a few home truths showing how foolish some people are. Trust you're well over in SA, BLessings always, Gordon

Paul Callus

Date: 4/11/2021 5:15:00 AM

You describe the unenviable behaviour of a tipsy / drunk person extremely well, Jenny. Time for a cold shower, I would say!! GL in the contest, my friend. ~ Warm regards & Hugs // paul

Gershon Wolf

Date: 4/10/2021 7:49:00 PM

Grim tidings -- well depicted, Jennifer. Very impactful. Puts a knot in my stomach to read your couplets. Here's to H2O on the rocks! :) gw

Darlene De Beaulieu

Date: 4/10/2021 12:26:00 PM

Hello Alexis Y., this guy needs AAA. and the person with him. enjoy your day my friend. Blessings.

Michelle Faulkner

Date: 4/10/2021 10:43:00 AM

Very astute on the poisoning effect of alcohol, I to do not understand the urge to drink until you drop, so to speak, best wishes for the contest~

Tom Cunningham

Date: 4/10/2021 7:40:00 AM

They say alcohol is the root of all evil. Good luck Hope you're well Jennifer. Tom

Silent One

Date: 4/10/2021 5:57:00 AM

Hello my friend.. i hope you are well.. this is a sad one, but one that many people will have gone through or are going through.. so nice to ready you after so long...

Jennifer Proxenos
Date: 5/13/2021 12:39:00 AM

Silent One, where are you, we miss you, you came and have gone again, your poems are amazing and have reached fantastic viewing numbers. You and Arthur are the Kings of poetry at Poetry soup, please come back! Hugs, Jennifer.

Caren Krutsinger

Date: 4/10/2021 4:20:00 AM

I wish you could really tell us how you feel Jennifer " The whore that is with him is just as bad, Why do this, are they both insane, quite mad," snicker. snicker.

Jennifer Proxenos
Date: 5/13/2021 12:36:00 AM

Hi Caren, I love receiving comments from you, forgive me if mine are a little erratic, but blame our business, Proto Personnel, part of but not me entirely! Hugs Jennifer.