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BORN SLEEPING - FOR SHARON'S CONTEST

Ten perfect tiny fingers and toes
Only you were born sleeping
Uncontrollable tears flow from my eyes
Caressing your beautiful face
Heartbroken parents are grief stricken

Touch me with words contest
Sponsored by Sharon Gulley

06-26-17

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Date: 6/30/2017 8:58:00 PM
This is so real... beautifully and respectfully written. Love it. Good luck, friend.
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JAN ALLISON
Date: 7/1/2017 2:04:00 AM
Thanks Alexis it must be so heartbreaking losing a child of any age:-( hugs jan x
Date: 6/29/2017 12:03:00 PM
This is wonderfull though so sad Jan, it certainly touched me, good luck in contest. :(
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JAN ALLISON
Date: 7/1/2017 2:04:00 AM
Thanks Roy it is a very sad poem:-( hugs Jan xx
Date: 6/27/2017 6:43:00 PM
this is very nicely done, Jan, a winning write ~*
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JAN ALLISON
Date: 6/27/2017 6:49:00 PM
Thanks Eve I enjoyed the challenge I have not written this form often:-) hugs Jan xx
Date: 6/27/2017 2:48:00 PM
Deeply touching and sad my friend. A definite winner methinks. Good luck in the new contest.. You always write so marvelously.. Having had two such babies born many decades ago(my first son and three years later my first daughter), I felt this deeply...
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JAN ALLISON
Date: 6/27/2017 2:52:00 PM
Oh Robert I am so so so sorry you can relate to this on a personal level, I can't think of anything more painful that the death of a child at any age:-(As a total novice to poetry I have learned so so much since I joined soup in Feb 2014 and have written over 1400 poems in a relatively short time - I think I'm making up for lost time lol:-) Hugs Jan xx
Date: 6/27/2017 1:10:00 PM
Wow Jan, I was going to try this one, but obvious winner here! Sad but soo touching!!
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JAN ALLISON
Date: 6/27/2017 1:27:00 PM
Hey John I am sure you will come up with a beauty!:-) hugs Jan xx
Date: 6/27/2017 6:16:00 AM
Tragic ... You make the readers feel ...
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JAN ALLISON
Date: 6/27/2017 6:27:00 AM
Thanks Probir it is a very emotive poem:-( hugs Jan xx
Date: 6/27/2017 5:37:00 AM
This is not just touching this is an earthquake of words! Marvelous and moving to tears dear Jan! I am certain it will be on the top! Good luck! Hugs xx
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JAN ALLISON
Date: 6/27/2017 5:50:00 AM
aww thank you so much Demetrios, as you know I enjoy writing humourous poems but I think I surprise people when I come out with a more serious poem:-) hugs Jan xx
Date: 6/26/2017 11:15:00 PM
This is a really touching poem, Jan, can't quell this grief:(
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JAN ALLISON
Date: 6/27/2017 3:22:00 AM
Thanks Jo it is a heartbreaking poem:-( hugs jan xx
Date: 6/26/2017 10:05:00 PM
Amazing...now my heart is bleeding though. Tears....
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JAN ALLISON
Date: 6/27/2017 3:21:00 AM
Thanks Carole it is a very sad scenario which tragically happened to someone I knew when I was training to do my nursery nursing:-( hugs Jan xx
Date: 6/26/2017 9:34:00 PM
wow, very touching indeed , Jan. She will love it!!
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JAN ALLISON
Date: 6/27/2017 3:20:00 AM
Thanks Andrea I can write the occasional serious poem. Thanks for dropping by I know you are very busy:-) hugs Jan xx
Date: 6/26/2017 8:58:00 PM
This reminds of when my daughter was about 4 months old. I was worried about SIDS during the first year of her life. She was my alarm clock, but one day I woke before she did, at 11 am. She had gone to sleep 11 pm the night before. I ran to her crib certain she was gone, but it just turned out to be her first 12 hour sleep. GL in the contest, I liked your poem.
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JAN ALLISON
Date: 6/27/2017 3:19:00 AM
Oh gosh Rob you must have been so relieved, I think many parents are anxious about SIDS. I remember having a baby monitor so we could hear my son when he woke but to find your child had passed away when they were sleeping is heartbreaking:-( hugs Jan x
Date: 6/26/2017 6:54:00 PM
You told me it would be sad and it is. Touching.
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JAN ALLISON
Date: 6/26/2017 6:57:00 PM
Thanks Lin it is a very sad poem I hope I have interpreted the 'touch' them accurately and Sharon likes my poem:-) hugs Jan xx
Date: 6/26/2017 6:03:00 PM
If this doesn't TOUCH the sponsor nothing will! Very sad write, Jan!
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JAN ALLISON
Date: 6/26/2017 6:12:00 PM
I hope she likes it White Wolf, its a very sad situation. I can't imagine the pain of losing a child of any age:-( hugs Jan xx
Date: 6/26/2017 5:50:00 PM
So much pain and sadness in these few lines...A moving write Jan
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JAN ALLISON
Date: 6/26/2017 5:57:00 PM
Thanks Joseph - I hope I have got the acrostic right for Sharon I wonder if my interpretation of 'touch' is what she is looking for:-) hugs jan xx
Date: 6/26/2017 2:39:00 PM
Every parents nightmare...so sad
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JAN ALLISON
Date: 6/26/2017 3:00:00 PM
It is Tim and so so heartbreaking when it happens:-( hugs Jan xx
Date: 6/26/2017 1:40:00 PM
Hi Jan , very deep emotional sad write , penned in a very soft caring way :( hugs
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JAN ALLISON
Date: 6/26/2017 1:44:00 PM
Thanks Niall it is a very sad poem:-( hugs Jan xx
Date: 6/26/2017 1:39:00 PM
If this doesn't touch the sponsor in some way, I'm not sure what will. Damn this was sad and heartbreaking. Best wishes in the contest
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JAN ALLISON
Date: 6/26/2017 6:11:00 PM
Thanks Chris it is based on the experience of a friend when I was 16 and she had a mental breakdown as a result of losing her baby, it's something that will always be with me:-( hugs Jan xx
Date: 6/26/2017 1:00:00 PM
Oh Jan this is so deeply moving and sad! Very well written!! Good luck in the contest!
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JAN ALLISON
Date: 6/26/2017 1:03:00 PM
Thanks Heidi I'm not sure what Sharon is after but I hope she finds my theme touching it is oh so sad:-( hugs Jan xx