Jan Allison | + Follow Poet |
Acrostic | + Fav Poem | Comment | Email | Print |

Born Sleeping - For Sharon's Contest

Ten perfect tiny fingers and toes
Only you were born sleeping
Uncontrollable tears flow from my eyes
Caressing your beautiful face
Heartbroken parents are grief stricken

Touch me with words contest
Sponsored by Sharon Gulley

06-26-17

Please Login to post a comment

Poetically Numb Date: 6/30/2017 8:58:00 PM This is so real... beautifully and respectfully written. Love it. Good luck, friend. Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 7/1/2017 2:04:00 AM Thanks Alexis it must be so heartbreaking losing a child of any age:-( hugs jan x

Roy Pett Date: 6/29/2017 12:03:00 PM This is wonderfull though so sad Jan, it certainly touched me, good luck in contest. :( Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 7/1/2017 2:04:00 AM Thanks Roy it is a very sad poem:-( hugs Jan xx

Eve Roper Date: 6/27/2017 6:43:00 PM this is very nicely done, Jan, a winning write ~* Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 6/27/2017 6:49:00 PM Thanks Eve I enjoyed the challenge I have not written this form often:-) hugs Jan xx

Robert Lindley Date: 6/27/2017 2:48:00 PM Deeply touching and sad my friend. A definite winner methinks. Good luck in the new contest.. You always write so marvelously.. Having had two such babies born many decades ago(my first son and three years later my first daughter), I felt this deeply... Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 6/27/2017 2:52:00 PM Oh Robert I am so so so sorry you can relate to this on a personal level, I can't think of anything more painful that the death of a child at any age:-(As a total novice to poetry I have learned so so much since I joined soup in Feb 2014 and have written over 1400 poems in a relatively short time - I think I'm making up for lost time lol:-) Hugs Jan xx

John Hamilton Date: 6/27/2017 1:10:00 PM Wow Jan, I was going to try this one, but obvious winner here! Sad but soo touching!! Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 6/27/2017 1:27:00 PM Hey John I am sure you will come up with a beauty!:-) hugs Jan xx

Probir Gupta Date: 6/27/2017 6:16:00 AM Tragic ... You make the readers feel ... Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 6/27/2017 6:27:00 AM Thanks Probir it is a very emotive poem:-( hugs Jan xx

Demetrios Trifiatis Date: 6/27/2017 5:37:00 AM This is not just touching this is an earthquake of words! Marvelous and moving to tears dear Jan! I am certain it will be on the top! Good luck! Hugs xx Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 6/27/2017 5:50:00 AM aww thank you so much Demetrios, as you know I enjoy writing humourous poems but I think I surprise people when I come out with a more serious poem:-) hugs Jan xx

Joanna Daniel Date: 6/26/2017 11:15:00 PM This is a really touching poem, Jan, can't quell this grief:( Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 6/27/2017 3:22:00 AM Thanks Jo it is a heartbreaking poem:-( hugs jan xx

Carole Duet Date: 6/26/2017 10:05:00 PM Amazing...now my heart is bleeding though. Tears.... Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 6/27/2017 3:21:00 AM Thanks Carole it is a very sad scenario which tragically happened to someone I knew when I was training to do my nursery nursing:-( hugs Jan xx

Andrea Dietrich Date: 6/26/2017 9:34:00 PM wow, very touching indeed , Jan. She will love it!! Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 6/27/2017 3:20:00 AM Thanks Andrea I can write the occasional serious poem. Thanks for dropping by I know you are very busy:-) hugs Jan xx

Lin Lane Date: 6/26/2017 6:54:00 PM You told me it would be sad and it is. Touching. Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 6/26/2017 6:57:00 PM Thanks Lin it is a very sad poem I hope I have interpreted the 'touch' them accurately and Sharon likes my poem:-) hugs Jan xx

Daniel Turner Date: 6/26/2017 6:47:00 PM It is very sad, Jan. A very hard tug at the heart:( Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 6/26/2017 6:50:00 PM Thanks Daniel it is a very sad topic:-( hugs Jan xx

White Wolf Date: 6/26/2017 6:03:00 PM If this doesn't TOUCH the sponsor nothing will! Very sad write, Jan! Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 6/26/2017 6:12:00 PM I hope she likes it White Wolf, its a very sad situation. I can't imagine the pain of losing a child of any age:-( hugs Jan xx

Joseph May Date: 6/26/2017 5:50:00 PM So much pain and sadness in these few lines...A moving write Jan Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 6/26/2017 5:57:00 PM Thanks Joseph - I hope I have got the acrostic right for Sharon I wonder if my interpretation of 'touch' is what she is looking for:-) hugs jan xx

Tim Smith Date: 6/26/2017 2:39:00 PM Every parents nightmare...so sad Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 6/26/2017 3:00:00 PM It is Tim and so so heartbreaking when it happens:-( hugs Jan xx

Chris Green Date: 6/26/2017 1:39:00 PM If this doesn't touch the sponsor in some way, I'm not sure what will. Damn this was sad and heartbreaking. Best wishes in the contest Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 6/26/2017 6:11:00 PM Thanks Chris it is based on the experience of a friend when I was 16 and she had a mental breakdown as a result of losing her baby, it's something that will always be with me:-( hugs Jan xx

Heidi Sands Date: 6/26/2017 1:00:00 PM Oh Jan this is so deeply moving and sad! Very well written!! Good luck in the contest! Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 6/26/2017 1:03:00 PM Thanks Heidi I'm not sure what Sharon is after but I hope she finds my theme touching it is oh so sad:-( hugs Jan xx