Booze In My Pen

are you with me, you drowsy pen?…this world is a
freakin’  distorted place. we are  scribbling 
like mites in pillow fights:  dirty nails we have become ,
 contagious  as micro germs trying to make
sense of all the fake reality clinging to sleek fuzz,
pizzaz and all that jazz… ‘cmon, we are all  fragile.
we’re all gonna die. so why be drugged by 
penning  a Lindsay Lohan kind of intoxication? 
look at you, ink! swiveling like whims of  tipsy lines.

far too many blots on your made-up tip…
geez, those  pop culture digs scanning  cosmo hours
 with whisky gulps of idle entertainment, you know, 
 the scratch of feeble hands sucking  materialistic
greed. do you think you’re  rotten smart  in hurried
thoughts of instant gratification? this is for real, for real.

and listen up: have you written about the will of
a spirit for true love of self,  of flowers and others?
nope, not the kind you feel when  intoxicated phrases
are riddled with booze shots… life goes on, every second, 
every written word.  there's something 
unspeakably beautiful about it all...if only you and i 
can share the flow of some kind of wonder  without  greed.

 you’re wasted! pik-bam-boom, take my alcoholic
breaths to the top; see that there is no before or after. 
just one rare, pure “ now” moment:  damn it’s for real, for real… 
our lives are a good freakin’ thing, isn’t it? hey, you’re dozing off !


       ©

by nette onclaud
for Elliott Bowe’s Drink Drunken Pen
Copyright © | Year Posted 2012


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Date: 6/3/2012 7:22:00 PM
NETTE, CONGRATS ;-) WITH YOUR DRUNKEN ENTRY...XOX~PD
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Date: 6/1/2012 7:33:00 PM
A belated congrats on your win Nette and congrats to your drunken pen! I hope he was able to sleep it off. Love and Blessings, Rhonda
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Date: 5/31/2012 12:03:00 PM
Congratulations on your win in the "Drunken Pen" contest Nette. Love, Carol
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Date: 5/30/2012 1:13:00 PM
Nette congrats on your win...David
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Date: 5/30/2012 12:30:00 PM
Thank you for supporting my contest with this amazing drunkenpen!!CONGRATULATIONS!!!
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Date: 5/23/2012 1:28:00 AM
Aha...Lindsay Lohan....;) great intoxicating.Hahaha...Enjoyed this drunken pen write Nette.I have to try with one peg of........:)
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Date: 5/22/2012 1:42:00 PM
A great drunken pen!!! I think you hit the mark.
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Date: 5/22/2012 1:05:00 PM
Wonderful Nette.... good luck in the contest...pd
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Date: 5/22/2012 12:28:00 PM
Reads like a drunken pen win..Goooood luck in the contest..Thanks for stopping by "Moonlight And Dragonflies"...I appreciate the unique review..Sara
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Date: 5/22/2012 11:56:00 AM
Amazing what will drip off the pen when one has a large bottle of some sort of booze on the table and something inflammatory on the hi-fi. Everything makes sense, and no sense, comes out kinda Charles Bukowski. Been a long time dry, but there was a day. Loved your, hic, fine poem. Love, daver
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Date: 5/22/2012 10:56:00 AM
This is a fabulous and very inebriated write my dear friend! I really enjoyed this fine poem that is over and beyond excellence! I love how you spilled from one line to another, sometimes three or four! Killer write Nette! Great Work!!
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