Blue Hole

I lie on the cold, damp grass,
alone;
staring reflectively 
at the hole 
in the tent above me.
I'm only here because I promised;
or rather, you made me promise.
The sky I see through the hole 
is dull and grey
and the music drifting heavily
from the stage in the distance 
is the darkest blue.

When we laid here in the grass
together;
Just last year;
the sky we saw through the hole
Above us
was bright, light blue,
and the music blared in dazzling colours:
of yellow, red, orange, 
and deep purple.

We laughed ourselves silly
about the hole.
The rain dripped in at night
collected in a pan;
the rhythmic drips 
keeping time with the music;
or so we convinced ourselves.

Today the rain drips
and makes a damp puddle 
on my chest;
next to my heart.
The blue hole is no longer.
The dull grey hole that replaced it;
is like the dead hole left inside me
now that you have gone.


Blue Hole Poetry Contest: Placed 3rd.
Sponsored by: Anthony Biaanco 
Date wrote: 24-05-2021
Copyright © | Year Posted 2021

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Sambourne Avatar
July 7, 2021 at 8:01 PM
Another winner with much deserved recognition for an imaginative piece! All the best, Brian
Miller Avatar
July 8, 2021 at 12:55 AM
Thank you Brian for your comments and encouragement.
Edmonds  Avatar
June 6, 2021 at 10:59 AM
An awesome write, the hole in the tent was bound to be blue, with nothing between the sky and you. Congratulations on a well deserved win… Belle
Miller Avatar
June 8, 2021 at 1:20 AM
Thank you so much for your kind comments.
Radice Avatar
June 5, 2021 at 10:14 AM
That was sheer brilliance. I'm off to read it again. Cheers - Gary
Miller Avatar
June 6, 2021 at 12:17 AM
Thank you for your kind comment, I am so glad you enjoyed my poem.
Alex Avatar
June 5, 2021 at 7:32 AM
Wonderful. Congratulations!
Miller Avatar
June 5, 2021 at 9:11 AM
Thank you so much I enjoyed writing it.
Eslinger Avatar
May 19, 2021 at 4:34 PM
You took me along in looking up through the hole. It took me from exhilarating Woodstockesque to backyard blues, longing for the blue hole again. An emotive well crafted journey. Could weep tears into hat pan. Be well!
Miller Avatar
May 20, 2021 at 2:54 AM
Thank you Sally for your kind words, I am so glad that you enjoyed my poem, I appreciate your comments. Stay well.
Hankins Avatar
May 16, 2021 at 9:33 AM
Wonderful poem with fine, fine writing, Terry. I enjoyed it thoroughly.
Miller Avatar
May 18, 2021 at 12:01 AM
Thank you so much for reading the poem and your kind comments.
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