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Blue

Laying in the sea
the water rises up high
left with one last breath
my chin touches the blue chill
the sun sinks away swiftly




"The Blue Contest" by Francine Roberts
written by Michael J. Falotico

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James Fraser

February 12, 2011 at 10:13 AM

Wonderful capture of the blue reflected waters Michael....:)

Poet Destroyer A

February 12, 2011 at 9:47 AM

This is me... I love the sea... and the blue feelings... but not the one u described.. well I think the sinking is my phase right now... love it... and thanks for sharing... have a nice one and good luck in the contest...p.d.

Linda-Marie Sweetheart

February 11, 2011 at 12:20 PM

Guess we both 'tanked' on this contest but your lovely words are super impressive my friend... kudos on a great write .. with luv always and forever .. your Jersey Girl with luv..

Elizabeth Bark

February 10, 2011 at 1:50 PM

soup mail=)

Kabuteng P.Ink K.

February 10, 2011 at 10:29 AM

I find this quite a relaxing piece, Michael-- could imagine lying in the sea, enjoying the sun and water--to have that last breath near the sea would be bliss I think-- :)

John Freeman

February 10, 2011 at 9:44 AM

Beautiful notion Michael for the blues contest. Good luck, Agape, Moses

Dana Smith

February 9, 2011 at 2:51 PM

ooh love this

Wilma Neels

February 9, 2011 at 12:34 PM

This one has a floating feel to it Michael, good luck for Francine's contest hun.. Love W

Kash Poet

February 9, 2011 at 7:42 AM

That must be a wonderful feeling Michael! Enjoyed your poem----kashinath

C.C Bloomsfield

February 9, 2011 at 6:23 AM

Very blue :)

Andrea Dietrich

February 8, 2011 at 10:53 PM

I read someone say "sad" down here, but maybe you are just lying there feeling the immersion. In any event, It's a very cool Tanka. Good luck in the contest and thanks again for my haiku win. LUv, Andrea PS just love that final line here!

Barbara Gorelick

February 8, 2011 at 8:14 PM

A lovely poem..I can see you there in the surf...BG

Robert Pettit

February 8, 2011 at 8:00 PM

Looks like a good candidate for Francine's contest.

Dr.Ram Mehta

February 8, 2011 at 5:50 PM

Nice entry to the contest, Michael

Sara Kendrick

February 8, 2011 at 4:28 PM

Good luck in the contest..I have been work on one but I can't get it to say what I want to say..This reads like winners' circle..Thanks for stopping by, reading and commenting on my Ice Cyrstal Chandelier..Sara

Carolyn Devonshire

February 8, 2011 at 3:53 PM

Very nice description, Michael! You allow us to see the wave approaching and blocking the sun as you take a deep breath and prepare for it to wash over you. Best wishes in Francine's contest! Love, Carolyn

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