Elaine George Poet Alliteration

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Alliteration poem

Contest Judged:  4/1/2018 3:16:00 PM
Sponsored by: Silent One |

 

AWARDED:  SECOND PLACE

Blinded By the Light

I stood upon  a brine soaked bow
Aboard a  schooner  lost  at sea
Where balls of hail tore through the sails
And broke the masts of three
When karma came to pay me back
For all my dirty deeds
When I laid upon a swan-like girl
Of grace and purity

I stole  her mind..her heart and soul
Her pride and dignity
When I wrapped her in a web of lies
Proclaiming love eternally
As I sealed her fate and destiny 
With my host of  wayward seeds
That would one day bear a bastard child
Bathed in humility  

For...when her eyes were closed in sleep
 I tiptoed out the door
A blaggard with a heart of stone
 I left  her lying there alone
To face the morning after
With  echo's of my laughter
Resounding through the rafters
As she gazed upon my footprints 
On the floor  

Many more...I scored before
Upon those many shores
Virgins by the dozens
And the broken town-hall whores
But, nary a thought 
Crossed through my mind
That one day I would find
The wrath of God upon my brow
When lightning...stuck me blind

 

 Written:  March 28th, 2018
Author:  Elaine Cecelia George

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Al Juman August 16, 2018 at 2:56 AM Elaine this is a masterpiece Elaine George August 18, 2018 at 7:09 AM Thank you so much for your kind comments, Al...much appreciated. Elaine

Andrea Dietrich April 4, 2018 at 6:46 PM What will your novel be called? I wish I could even START mine! Elaine George April 7, 2018 at 3:02 AM Hi, Andrea. Thanks for stopping by. The novel I am currently writing is entitled, 'Out of the Darkness.' Thanks for asking.

Eve Roper April 3, 2018 at 9:55 PM Congratulations on your win, Elaine, excellent alliteration. Hugs Eve ~`* Elaine George April 7, 2018 at 3:02 AM Thanks for your comments, Eve. Elaine

Line Gauthier April 3, 2018 at 3:09 PM Beautiful and powerful poem. I love the rhythm and imagery, Elaine. Congrats on a most deserving win. Elaine George April 7, 2018 at 3:03 AM Thank you, Line...for your kind comments...much appreciated. Elaine

Abdul Malik Mandani April 3, 2018 at 10:21 AM A heart-rending and well-written story. Congrats. Enjoyed reading it.

Kai Michael Neumann April 3, 2018 at 3:35 AM This is very well written. Congratulations on your win. Just one comment on the title: I guess that you mean 'blinded and not binded? Many wishes, Kai Elaine George April 3, 2018 at 6:46 AM Thank you so much, Kai, for your comments and for seeing what no one else saw...including me. I have corrected.

Judith S April 2, 2018 at 7:35 PM This is like reading poetry of the great masters of yesteryear. So well written ... I bow to your talents. Congratulations on your win Elaine!! ~Judy

Carolyn Devonshire April 2, 2018 at 5:56 PM Wow! Very powerful poem, Lainie. Sometimes we fail to see the harm we cause others. Excellent reversal in the last line! Elaine George April 3, 2018 at 6:47 AM Hi, Carolyn, So nice to see you are still here at the soup. Thanks for your kind comments.

Kim Rodrigues April 2, 2018 at 8:30 AM Excellent, Elaine! Loved it! Congrats! Elaine George April 3, 2018 at 6:47 AM Thanks Kim.

Probir Gupta April 1, 2018 at 9:04 PM A profound poem with lively imagery, Elaine ... Congratulations on your nice win ... Elaine George April 3, 2018 at 6:48 AM Thank you for your kind comments, Probir.

Susan Ashley April 1, 2018 at 6:47 PM Such an enthralling poem, Elaine. Told with vibrant imagery and emotions that ride the wonderful rhythm of your poetic lines. Congratulations on your excellent win! Warmest wishes.. Elaine George April 3, 2018 at 6:48 AM Thank you for your kind comments, Susan.

Andrea Dietrich April 1, 2018 at 4:44 PM wow, what a guy!! What made you think to write in the character of this "blaggard"? I miss your writing and it's so good to see you at it again, Elaine. I see you are on the winners list. BIG congrats to you. And thanks for seeing my ppem the other day. Happy Easter. Elaine George April 1, 2018 at 8:28 PM Regarding the blaggard...I am a story teller at heart and being from the Atlantic Provinces of Canada I have heard many tales of the seamen who captained the Tall Ships...a time long since gone down in history. Elaine George April 1, 2018 at 6:21 PM Thank you, Andrea...its good to be back if only for a short time...I am still busy working on my novel, but sometimes need a break.

Anne-Lise Andresen April 1, 2018 at 3:23 PM - The winners are named and it was great to see your poem on the winning list - Congratulations, Elaine :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :) Elaine George April 1, 2018 at 6:22 PM Thank you so much for stopping by and for your comments. Much appreciated!

Silent One April 1, 2018 at 2:53 PM A really deep reflective poem Elaine, I just felt it could have used a bit more alliteration for the contest.. Congratulations on your placement in the contest... Elaine George April 1, 2018 at 6:20 PM Thank you for the inspiration. I am working on a knew one about the Blue Nose Schooner (also known as: The Atlantic Queen) This schooner is a Canadian Icon and on the back of the Canadian dime. I will post it when completed...it will also fall into the genre of personification.

Charlie Smith April 1, 2018 at 10:41 AM Terrific tale Elaine, well written with such a need to be told... Elaine George April 1, 2018 at 6:23 PM Thank you, Charlie...much appreciated.

Mark Peterson March 31, 2018 at 6:54 PM What a hideous transmogrification the sexual act has become. How sacred and pure it ought to be and our focus centered only on the one we have chosen instead of a wandering mind thinking only of pleasures that await. I have just written a poem called Treasure that considers this topic about which you have written so eloquently. Excellent work. Elaine George April 1, 2018 at 6:24 PM Thank you for your comments, Mark. I will read your poem, 'Treasure'.