Blind Date

When we walked through the park that May
            I began to think that we would
talk about the weather and say
the shallow things we thought we should
                        instead of the feelings we had.
The inane talk driving me mad;
in my head, I should have been glad.
      Long was the distance between us,
            as long as from Earth to Venus.
                        I did not want to cause a fuss
but I felt I was kept at bay
            and thought of home and if I could
leave your dire company, darkly sad,
            and write off this date as a muss.

NB: Fragmented Rhyme – created by Constance La France.
Copyright © | Year Posted 2023

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Volumes Avatar
February 20, 2023 at 7:52 PM
LOL I am sure many blind dates end this way. Excellent write for the contest & I bet you put the lines on the left margin first time!! Best of luck Linda.
Fowler Avatar
February 21, 2023 at 6:34 AM
LOL This was my first attempt and not very pretty. :0 I'm not a fan of multiple indents, although I love the challenge ;);) The second one (My Perfect Day - the one I entered) is barely a step up. Ha!
Buhagiar Avatar
February 20, 2023 at 1:54 AM
Dear Linda, your fragmented verse is wonderful. A poem with great insight.
Fowler Avatar
February 20, 2023 at 6:18 AM
Hi dear Victor. You are so kind, as always, with your words. Thank you! :)
Nuwas Avatar
February 19, 2023 at 11:09 PM
This sure brought me a smile! :)
Fowler Avatar
February 20, 2023 at 6:18 AM
I'm so glad to see you smile Aysha! Thank you and welcome to the soup :)
Kiser Avatar
February 19, 2023 at 3:55 PM
Powerful feelings in these lines, well done and good luck in the contest.
Fowler Avatar
February 19, 2023 at 4:05 PM
Thanks ML. This was a first try. I'm not too fond of it. I entered a different one in the contest. :)
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