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Blind Date

When we walked through the park that May I began to think that we would talk about the weather and say the shallow things we thought we should instead of the feelings we had. The inane talk driving me mad; in my head, I should have been glad. Long was the distance between us, as long as from Earth to Venus. I did not want to cause a fuss but I felt I was kept at bay and thought of home and if I could leave your dire company, darkly sad, and write off this date as a muss. NB: Fragmented Rhyme – created by Constance La France.

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Date: 2/20/2023 7:52:00 PM
LOL I am sure many blind dates end this way. Excellent write for the contest & I bet you put the lines on the left margin first time!! Best of luck Linda.
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Linda Alice Fowler
Date: 2/21/2023 6:34:00 AM
LOL This was my first attempt and not very pretty. :0 I'm not a fan of multiple indents, although I love the challenge ;);) The second one (My Perfect Day - the one I entered) is barely a step up. Ha!
Date: 2/20/2023 1:54:00 AM
Dear Linda, your fragmented verse is wonderful. A poem with great insight.
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Linda Alice Fowler
Date: 2/20/2023 6:18:00 AM
Hi dear Victor. You are so kind, as always, with your words. Thank you! :)
Date: 2/19/2023 11:09:00 PM
This sure brought me a smile! :)
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Linda Alice Fowler
Date: 2/20/2023 6:18:00 AM
I'm so glad to see you smile Aysha! Thank you and welcome to the soup :)
Date: 2/19/2023 3:55:00 PM
Powerful feelings in these lines, well done and good luck in the contest.
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Linda Alice Fowler
Date: 2/19/2023 4:05:00 PM
Thanks ML. This was a first try. I'm not too fond of it. I entered a different one in the contest. :)

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