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Blade of Pain

When city lights fade, red to kohl

Sullen this dusk rising to cajole,

Pain beckons its shades

As flickering dreams sail on flights;

To unearth memoirs that recite

Wails stabbed like a blade.
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 The Blues- in tail rhyme<

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Poet Destroyer A

Date: 3/30/2014 5:09:00 PM

NETTE, Congratulations, enjoyed the win... Love ~Linda

Debbie Guzzi

Date: 3/27/2014 4:56:00 PM

Congrad's on your win. Light & Love

Dr.Ram Mehta

Date: 3/25/2014 12:54:00 AM

Very lovely poem. Congratulations on a fine win, nette

Joyce Johnson

Date: 3/24/2014 7:33:00 PM

Congratulations. This is great.. Glad I wasn't having to judge these. Love, Joyce

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 3/24/2014 5:49:00 PM

the title is very descriptive of this one and that final awesome line. Congrats in the contest, Nette.

Robert Johnson

Date: 3/24/2014 3:28:00 PM

The cold ice stare into the night. Is all we see of their last flight. Congrats Nette.

Rick Richardson

Date: 3/19/2014 6:17:00 AM

Love the red to kohl. Sets the tone well. Rick

Demetrios Trifiatis

Date: 3/11/2014 8:21:00 AM

Inspiring verse reverberating the heart!

Monterey Sirak

Date: 3/11/2014 7:11:00 AM

I love the gentle motion of the words, 'fading, rising, beckoning, flickering, stabbing' It recreates the feeling of floating helplessly on waves of pain. You are amazing, Nette!

Russell Sivey

Date: 3/10/2014 10:52:00 PM

Wow, this is quite the depressing write my friend! You have enthralled me by the splendor of this wondrous poem this evening! What a fantastic piece! What a line this is, "Wails stabbed like a blade." a very good conclusion and wrap-up of your poem, Great Work!!

Ken Carroll

Date: 3/10/2014 3:19:00 PM

Lovely in the moment write Nette!

Sara Kendrick

Date: 3/10/2014 2:46:00 PM

Way to go with this unique contest entry..Winner for sure in my book..Thanksf for the visits..Sara

Tim Smith

Date: 3/10/2014 1:20:00 PM

I can feel your emotions nette ....You wail out you pain. I love listening to the Blues and I get to see many great musicians here in Chicago...Tim

Kim Van Breda

Date: 3/10/2014 1:17:00 PM

PHEW.. read this a couple of times because of the impact of the words. Really awesome poem Nette Xx~Xx

Anne-Lise Andresen

Date: 3/10/2014 12:34:00 PM

- You're beautiful in your words even though it is sad - Luck in contest !!! - oxox // Anne-Lise :)

Eileen Manassian

Date: 3/10/2014 12:00:00 PM

I LOVE the feel of this one, Nette! I agree with Richard. You Rock this form. Love the word cajole....To unearth memories that recite...WOW! This one is just so eloquently beautiful! About the contest.....I will go have a look. Hugs