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BLACKER THAN BLACK RAIN

BEGINNING… xxxxxxxxxxx gray moon eating black, sparrows flush red coughing rain slums of streets decay CONTINUING… xxxxxxxxxxx drenched women bleeding broken spills of spines, alms… alms devil torrent tears ENDING… xxxxxxxxxxx spikes of bones splattered drowned by screeching sounds silenced… rain begets mud tombs xxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxx (( for SKAT's "Dark Rain" Contest" --Haiku ))

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Date: 11/16/2013 4:36:00 PM
This write is a sad but a black under tone of the future as some people might see it. but i see aot in these lines yet to be said. i hope it is a very different future for mankind. cheri
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Date: 6/29/2013 12:13:00 PM
Alfred Hitchcock could do no better with a dark Haiku Nette. Congrats on your well deserved win. Anne
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Date: 8/6/2012 4:24:00 AM
I've haven't come across a Haiku so deeply written like this...I see that this is also a winner...Congrats!!! :)
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Date: 2/6/2011 4:28:00 PM
Congratulations on your win..Sara
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Date: 2/4/2011 11:05:00 PM
Congratulations on your win with this very fine trio of haiku poems. They just may be too darkly descriptive for my taste.
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Date: 1/24/2011 6:07:00 AM
Hi Nette - Wow! A chilling haiku. Congratulations on your WIN in the "Dark Rain" contest. Best wishes, KC
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Date: 1/20/2011 2:41:00 PM
awful imagery my sweetie and very free verse like strong! short verse. Congrad's on your win Light & Love
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Date: 1/18/2011 1:12:00 PM
Very nice Haiku Nette. Congratulations on your win with this wonderful write. Caryl
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Date: 1/17/2011 11:35:00 PM
these are so profound, Nette, excellent read. Harry
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Date: 1/17/2011 7:49:00 PM
Many warm congratulations for this super win Nette. A terrific job with these smashing haikus.
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Date: 1/17/2011 7:18:00 PM
Heavy, Nette!! And GOOD!!! A 7!! Luv, Andrea
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Date: 1/17/2011 2:16:00 PM
Congratulations on the well deserved win in the contest, nette
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Date: 1/17/2011 12:06:00 PM
Reads like lost souls who have experienced natures rains, leading to the wrath of her mudslides. Many congrats on your win Nette....:)
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Date: 1/17/2011 11:04:00 AM
Congratulations on your wonderful win in the contest, Nette!! Love, Annalise
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Date: 1/17/2011 5:42:00 AM
Congrats Nette my friend on another stunning win in the Dark Rain contest with this vibrant entry full of imagery luv.. enjoy another top tenner today for your great poetry ...
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Date: 1/17/2011 5:34:00 AM
Congratulations for your win in the "Dark Rain" contest Nette, sponsored by S K A T*. Love, Carol
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Date: 1/17/2011 3:59:00 AM
This is such a good array of Haiku's... well deserved win!!!
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Date: 1/17/2011 3:42:00 AM
Nette, congratulations on your win in Irma's contest :) Wilma
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Date: 1/17/2011 2:39:00 AM
Continuing-Continuing-Never ending.......Your WIN!!!--wonderful !Congrats!
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Date: 1/16/2011 9:42:00 PM
Very black indeed nette. congratulations on your win. Love, Joyce
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Date: 1/16/2011 9:26:00 PM
Congratulations, Nette !thank you so much for your Haiku. I had fun reading every dark rain entry~luv~SKAT
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Date: 1/16/2011 1:47:00 PM
Oh such a terrific haiku.Thanks for your very kind comment.~LUV~Teresa
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Date: 1/15/2011 3:38:00 PM
Interesting work..Your presence at my work was uplifting..Sara
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Date: 1/15/2011 2:19:00 PM
Whoa Nette... this is awesome luv.. great imagination and thought went into these sets for the contest.. great energy to each of them...luv luv luv.. them all..good luck my dear friend..with luv..
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Date: 1/15/2011 1:42:00 PM
hey, yours is dark like mine. VERY dark. It's really good, Nette. Sure to score high! Luv, Andrea
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