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Blacker Than Black Rain

BEGINNING…
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gray moon eating black,
sparrows flush red coughing rain
slums of streets decay

CONTINUING…
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drenched women bleeding
broken spills of spines, alms… alms
devil torrent tears

ENDING…
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spikes of bones splattered
drowned by screeching sounds silenced…
rain begets mud tombs


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(( for SKAT's  "Dark Rain" Contest" --Haiku ))

Copyright © Nette Onclaud | Year Posted 2011

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Cherl Dunn Date: 11/16/2013 4:36:00 PM This write is a sad but a black under tone of the future as some people might see it. but i see aot in these lines yet to be said. i hope it is a very different future for mankind. cheri Login to Reply

Anne Rutherford Date: 6/29/2013 12:13:00 PM Alfred Hitchcock could do no better with a dark Haiku Nette. Congrats on your well deserved win. Anne Login to Reply

Pace Ink-U-Script Date: 8/6/2012 4:24:00 AM I've haven't come across a Haiku so deeply written like this...I see that this is also a winner...Congrats!!! :) Login to Reply

Sara Kendrick Date: 2/6/2011 4:28:00 PM Congratulations on your win..Sara Login to Reply

Robert Pettit Date: 2/4/2011 11:05:00 PM Congratulations on your win with this very fine trio of haiku poems. They just may be too darkly descriptive for my taste. Login to Reply

Kory Calhoun Date: 1/24/2011 6:07:00 AM Hi Nette - Wow! A chilling haiku. Congratulations on your WIN in the "Dark Rain" contest. Best wishes, KC Login to Reply

Debbie Guzzi Date: 1/20/2011 2:41:00 PM awful imagery my sweetie and very free verse like strong! short verse. Congrad's on your win Light & Love Login to Reply

Caryl Muzzey Date: 1/18/2011 1:12:00 PM Very nice Haiku Nette. Congratulations on your win with this wonderful write. Caryl Login to Reply

Harry Horsman Date: 1/17/2011 11:35:00 PM these are so profound, Nette, excellent read. Harry Login to Reply

Tahera Mannan Date: 1/17/2011 7:49:00 PM Many warm congratulations for this super win Nette. A terrific job with these smashing haikus. Login to Reply

Andrea Dietrich Date: 1/17/2011 7:18:00 PM Heavy, Nette!! And GOOD!!! A 7!! Luv, Andrea Login to Reply

Dr.Ram Mehta Date: 1/17/2011 2:16:00 PM Congratulations on the well deserved win in the contest, nette Login to Reply

James Fraser Date: 1/17/2011 12:06:00 PM Reads like lost souls who have experienced natures rains, leading to the wrath of her mudslides. Many congrats on your win Nette....:) Login to Reply

Audrey Haick Date: 1/17/2011 11:04:00 AM Congratulations on your wonderful win in the contest, Nette!! Love, Annalise Login to Reply

Linda-Marie Sweetheart Date: 1/17/2011 5:42:00 AM Congrats Nette my friend on another stunning win in the Dark Rain contest with this vibrant entry full of imagery luv.. enjoy another top tenner today for your great poetry ... Login to Reply

Carol Sunshine Brown Date: 1/17/2011 5:34:00 AM Congratulations for your win in the "Dark Rain" contest Nette, sponsored by S K A T*. Love, Carol Login to Reply

Michael J. Falotico Date: 1/17/2011 3:59:00 AM This is such a good array of Haiku's... well deserved win!!! Login to Reply

Wilma Neels Date: 1/17/2011 3:42:00 AM Nette, congratulations on your win in Irma's contest :) Wilma Login to Reply

Kash Poet Date: 1/17/2011 2:39:00 AM Continuing-Continuing-Never ending.......Your WIN!!!--wonderful !Congrats! Login to Reply

Joyce Johnson Date: 1/16/2011 9:42:00 PM Very black indeed nette. congratulations on your win. Love, Joyce Login to Reply

Skat A Date: 1/16/2011 9:26:00 PM Congratulations, Nette !thank you so much for your Haiku. I had fun reading every dark rain entry~luv~SKAT Login to Reply

T.A. Skyles-Theoklapoet Date: 1/16/2011 1:47:00 PM Oh such a terrific haiku.Thanks for your very kind comment.~LUV~Teresa Login to Reply

Sara Kendrick Date: 1/15/2011 3:38:00 PM Interesting work..Your presence at my work was uplifting..Sara Login to Reply

Linda-Marie Sweetheart Date: 1/15/2011 2:19:00 PM Whoa Nette... this is awesome luv.. great imagination and thought went into these sets for the contest.. great energy to each of them...luv luv luv.. them all..good luck my dear friend..with luv.. Login to Reply

Andrea Dietrich Date: 1/15/2011 1:42:00 PM hey, yours is dark like mine. VERY dark. It's really good, Nette. Sure to score high! Luv, Andrea Login to Reply

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