Nette Onclaud Poet Haiku

Blacker Than Black Rain

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gray moon eating black,
sparrows flush red coughing rain
slums of streets decay

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drenched women bleeding
broken spills of spines, alms… alms
devil torrent tears

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spikes of bones splattered
drowned by screeching sounds silenced…
rain begets mud tombs


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(( for SKAT's  "Dark Rain" Contest" --Haiku ))

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Cherl Dunn November 16, 2013 at 4:36 PM This write is a sad but a black under tone of the future as some people might see it. but i see aot in these lines yet to be said. i hope it is a very different future for mankind. cheri

Anne Rutherford June 29, 2013 at 12:13 PM Alfred Hitchcock could do no better with a dark Haiku Nette. Congrats on your well deserved win. Anne

Pace Ink-U-Script August 6, 2012 at 4:24 AM I've haven't come across a Haiku so deeply written like this...I see that this is also a winner...Congrats!!! :)

Sara Kendrick February 6, 2011 at 4:28 PM Congratulations on your win..Sara

Robert Pettit February 4, 2011 at 11:05 PM Congratulations on your win with this very fine trio of haiku poems. They just may be too darkly descriptive for my taste.

Kory Calhoun January 24, 2011 at 6:07 AM Hi Nette - Wow! A chilling haiku. Congratulations on your WIN in the "Dark Rain" contest. Best wishes, KC

Debbie Guzzi January 20, 2011 at 2:41 PM awful imagery my sweetie and very free verse like strong! short verse. Congrad's on your win Light & Love

Caryl Muzzey January 18, 2011 at 1:12 PM Very nice Haiku Nette. Congratulations on your win with this wonderful write. Caryl

Harry Horsman January 17, 2011 at 11:35 PM these are so profound, Nette, excellent read. Harry

Tahera Mannan January 17, 2011 at 7:49 PM Many warm congratulations for this super win Nette. A terrific job with these smashing haikus.

Andrea Dietrich January 17, 2011 at 7:18 PM Heavy, Nette!! And GOOD!!! A 7!! Luv, Andrea

Dr.Ram Mehta January 17, 2011 at 2:16 PM Congratulations on the well deserved win in the contest, nette

James Fraser January 17, 2011 at 12:06 PM Reads like lost souls who have experienced natures rains, leading to the wrath of her mudslides. Many congrats on your win Nette....:)

Audrey Haick January 17, 2011 at 11:04 AM Congratulations on your wonderful win in the contest, Nette!! Love, Annalise

Linda-Marie Sweetheart January 17, 2011 at 5:42 AM Congrats Nette my friend on another stunning win in the Dark Rain contest with this vibrant entry full of imagery luv.. enjoy another top tenner today for your great poetry ...

Carol Sunshine Brown January 17, 2011 at 5:34 AM Congratulations for your win in the "Dark Rain" contest Nette, sponsored by S K A T*. Love, Carol

Michael J. Falotico January 17, 2011 at 3:59 AM This is such a good array of Haiku's... well deserved win!!!

Wilma Neels January 17, 2011 at 3:42 AM Nette, congratulations on your win in Irma's contest :) Wilma

Kash Poet January 17, 2011 at 2:39 AM Continuing-Continuing-Never ending.......Your WIN!!!--wonderful !Congrats!

Joyce Johnson January 16, 2011 at 9:42 PM Very black indeed nette. congratulations on your win. Love, Joyce

Skat A January 16, 2011 at 9:26 PM Congratulations, Nette !thank you so much for your Haiku. I had fun reading every dark rain entry~luv~SKAT

T.A. Skyles-Theoklapoet January 16, 2011 at 1:47 PM Oh such a terrific haiku.Thanks for your very kind comment.~LUV~Teresa

Sara Kendrick January 15, 2011 at 3:38 PM Interesting work..Your presence at my work was uplifting..Sara

Linda-Marie Sweetheart January 15, 2011 at 2:19 PM Whoa Nette... this is awesome luv.. great imagination and thought went into these sets for the contest.. great energy to each of them...luv luv luv.. them all..good luck my dear friend..with luv..

Andrea Dietrich January 15, 2011 at 1:42 PM Again, so many cool visual lines!

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