Black Sky

How somber the sky without stars
once filled with the reverie of tomorrow
removed by the drift of pain...that lingers
before falling down the face of sorrow
never to return...trails, left fading
dispersed by shadowed times
when paradise turned a world to gray
and death's hands clutched the throat of life
entering unannounced
offering a game of melancholy to the grieving
clinging to hope, unsustained, only borrowed
when moments spun and spun
in a dizzying form, melting, falling, tumbling
into a slow ebb of vanishing breath
washed away by welling orbs...drowning
from death's painful point of pain
when I knew my love was dying
and my heart lay on the banks of hell
as anguish claimed its victim
dragging me into the dim-lit realm of suffering
when her eyes closed
and tears poured and poured
from the weight of a lonely world
circling the feet of my despair
where I saw a reflection of a black sky
where stars once shined


3/3/18 contest Free verse on sadness
Copyright © | Year Posted 2018

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Roper Avatar
March 7, 2018 at 9:23 PM
Congratulations on your win, Frederic! Hugs Eve ~`*
Thomas Avatar
March 6, 2018 at 8:15 PM
Frederic this choked me up. Beautiful is not suitable enough to describe this.
Michelle Avatar
March 5, 2018 at 6:59 PM
This is a bitterly touching poem. I absolutely relate, and love this. Thank you. Love, Juli-Michelle
Hamilton Avatar
March 5, 2018 at 8:58 AM
Great imagery and personification Frederic, congrats on another win!
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March 5, 2018 at 8:55 AM
This is truly brilliant writing Frederic! This poem struck chords of sadness in my soul. So beautifully written ... amaaaaaazing imagery! Congratuations on your win! ~ Judy
Scars Avatar
March 5, 2018 at 5:56 AM
What is it about your words that always touch me so deeply Frederic? Beautiful, yet sad....loved every word. thank you and congratulations on your placement :)-luloo
Lovejoy-Burton Avatar
March 4, 2018 at 9:44 PM
Darkly beautiful, sophisticated and urbane. So love this..."and my heart lay on the banks of hell as anguish claimed its victim" - if this doesn't place in the contest, no lower than No. 1, the Broth has gone to Hell.
Duet Avatar
March 4, 2018 at 1:42 PM
Wow, Frederic! Here I am in the depths of sadness right now and here is your poem describing exactly how I feel. :(
One Avatar
March 4, 2018 at 12:12 PM
Such a deep and emotive poem full of sad imagery.
Sands Avatar
March 4, 2018 at 8:16 AM
Outstanding! This poem is so well descriptive and expressed. Perfect for the contest :)
Gauthier Avatar
March 3, 2018 at 11:01 PM
I want to say Wow too! One of my favourite lines is "death's hands clutched the throat of life". Very well done, Frederic.
B. Avatar
March 3, 2018 at 10:35 PM
Wow Incredible creativity!! Melancholy and expressive.. Bravo!! All the best!!
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