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Black Sky

How somber the sky without stars once filled with the reverie of tomorrow removed by the drift of pain...that lingers before falling down the face of sorrow never to return...trails, left fading dispersed by shadowed times when paradise turned a world to gray and death's hands clutched the throat of life entering unannounced offering a game of melancholy to the grieving clinging to hope, unsustained, only borrowed when moments spun and spun in a dizzying form, melting, falling, tumbling into a slow ebb of vanishing breath washed away by welling orbs...drowning from death's painful point of pain when I knew my love was dying and my heart lay on the banks of hell as anguish claimed its victim dragging me into the dim-lit realm of suffering when her eyes closed and tears poured and poured from the weight of a lonely world circling the feet of my despair where I saw a reflection of a black sky where stars once shined 3/3/18 contest Free verse on sadness

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Date: 3/7/2018 9:23:00 PM
Congratulations on your win, Frederic! Hugs Eve ~`*
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Date: 3/6/2018 8:15:00 PM
Frederic this choked me up. Beautiful is not suitable enough to describe this.
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Date: 3/5/2018 6:59:00 PM
This is a bitterly touching poem. I absolutely relate, and love this. Thank you. Love, Juli-Michelle
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Date: 3/5/2018 8:58:00 AM
Great imagery and personification Frederic, congrats on another win!
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Date: 3/5/2018 8:55:00 AM
This is truly brilliant writing Frederic! This poem struck chords of sadness in my soul. So beautifully written ... amaaaaaazing imagery! Congratuations on your win! ~ Judy
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Date: 3/5/2018 5:56:00 AM
What is it about your words that always touch me so deeply Frederic? Beautiful, yet sad....loved every word. thank you and congratulations on your placement :)-luloo
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Date: 3/4/2018 9:44:00 PM
Darkly beautiful, sophisticated and urbane. So love this..."and my heart lay on the banks of hell as anguish claimed its victim" - if this doesn't place in the contest, no lower than No. 1, the Broth has gone to Hell.
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Date: 3/4/2018 1:42:00 PM
Wow, Frederic! Here I am in the depths of sadness right now and here is your poem describing exactly how I feel. :(
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Date: 3/4/2018 12:12:00 PM
Such a deep and emotive poem full of sad imagery.
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Date: 3/4/2018 8:16:00 AM
Outstanding! This poem is so well descriptive and expressed. Perfect for the contest :)
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Date: 3/3/2018 11:01:00 PM
I want to say Wow too! One of my favourite lines is "death's hands clutched the throat of life". Very well done, Frederic.
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Date: 3/3/2018 10:35:00 PM
Wow Incredible creativity!! Melancholy and expressive.. Bravo!! All the best!!
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