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Black Powder Rain

Likened to a beast of burden I groan with back breaking strain weary laden and fraught with pain working mightily in vain under this black powder rain. ‘Tween strife, sweat and stain I pour out my waning strength time drags on for hours at length while black powder keeps a'raining down on me. For lo’ my weary, calloused hands are ever searching for black gold a toilsome task to mine and claim dark riches from hardened veins as I labor under black powder rain. Buried in a pit of purgatory I hear the clangs and cries picks and axes, unrelenting grit and odors, foul, stagnanting low bending, beneath this ominous black powder rain. As I suffocate in darkness I hear sorrow's sad refrain ringing loud and all around me as I beat earth's unyielding crust trapped in god forsaken dust slowly drowning, underneath this black powder rain. Written on 11/8/2018

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Date: 12/2/2018 8:42:00 PM
Hello Laura, I do hope that this poem wins the contest. have a nice evening my friend.
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Laura Leiser
Date: 12/2/2018 11:44:00 PM
It won third place. Thanks for commenting, Darlene!
Date: 11/28/2018 9:44:00 AM
Laura, beautifully penned for the contest theme, and a big congratulations on your win with this awesome write, well done ~
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Laura Leiser
Date: 11/28/2018 10:29:00 AM
Thank you, Constance! :)
Date: 11/23/2018 7:18:00 PM
Wonderful write, Laura, love the poem. Congratulations on your win
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Laura Leiser
Date: 11/23/2018 8:51:00 PM
Thank you, Eve! I really appreciate it! So glad you liked my poem. :)
Date: 11/23/2018 12:30:00 PM
This is such a stunning interpretation of the prompt Laura. Stunning imagery. Congratulations.
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Laura Leiser
Date: 11/23/2018 8:48:00 PM
Thanks so much, Nina! I’m very happy you liked it! :)
Date: 11/23/2018 6:31:00 AM
Congrats on your well deserved podium finish, Laura.
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Laura Leiser
Date: 11/23/2018 8:48:00 PM
Thank you, Line! :)
Date: 11/10/2018 12:36:00 AM
So many lives have been lost to the black lung hell. You have portrayed it well Laura. Best luck for the contest. : )
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Laura Leiser
Date: 11/10/2018 8:50:00 AM
Thank you, Connie! :)
Date: 11/8/2018 4:42:00 PM
I love this very dark poetry my great friend! You tapped into the pain, sorrow and epic darkness that this world oft heaps upon a person.. A fav.. a gem too.
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Laura Leiser
Date: 11/8/2018 7:49:00 PM
Thanks so much, Robert, for your kind and encouraging comments!