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"BLACK The color black is all around Its reflected in the downcast eyes of every passerby Brooding, angry clouds display their rage in the rolling, rumbling dark Its in the grave while family members gather to pay respect Black: the color of death Its everywhere, yet never seen The people shove and fight it away And hide their deepest secrets in the pit of silence and dark Feel it upon you Yet look up, down, back, forward and you will not find it Such a common thing, this darkness, yet so few who truly understand But there are those who do And it is a terrible burden to bear indeed For the unlucky few who know the truth Those that realize its not only a color ...Its an emotion Some become consumed And soon they will know Not only does black describe But IT IS A physical presence Consuming, terrifying, destroying Suffocating And others still will welcome it with open arms And welcome it though they may Here they will find no comfort In the blackness they will find only pain and despair And in the end, no matter how they dealt with the black Those who ignored, those who recognized but chose to deny Those who understood and feared; those who welcomed all with open arms All, yes all, of these will fall And in the end, there is no hope Only the black Never will anyone avoid... THE BLACK" Just a free verse I wrote the other day. Wrote it basically out of random emotion. Just sat down and let it flow. My first real poem to speak of. Anyway, I thought it was pretty good for a first try, just wanted some feedback. Thanks

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Date: 11/18/2010 12:02:00 PM
really intresting, however life is not the end you know, anyway enjoyed this& looking forward to hearing some more from you.
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Date: 5/28/2010 5:39:00 PM
This theme in this poem is consistent with the title. Welcome to Poetry Soup and keep writing. Blessings, Joseph
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Date: 5/27/2010 8:15:00 PM
Welcome to the Soup Family.. so enjoyed reading your creative write tonight... luv black.. with luv from the "Sweetheart"
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Date: 5/27/2010 4:29:00 PM
I think white would be even better :) it'll probably make "black" look even better. Awesome job once again. You're writing has much meaning. Another one would be even better.
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Date: 5/27/2010 1:52:00 PM
thanks carol. and stephanie, im glad. i dont think i was trying to accomplish anything, just venting emotions. But evidently it turned out ok. Im thinking about writing a "sequel" called White. Whaddya think?
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Date: 5/27/2010 7:05:00 AM
Well Something That Flowed Very Well. It Was An Amazing Piece Of Poetry. I Fell In Love With Every Word Written. For The Dark Is Consuming, But This Brought Me Light, I No Longer Want To Be In The Dark. You Showed Me The Truth With Very Simple Words, Excellent Job - Stephanie Guaman. :)
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Date: 5/27/2010 5:37:00 AM
I would like to welcome you to PoetrySoup Seth. Wishing you the best in your writing endeavors. If you have questions please feel free to ask anyone here. We are all willing to help and if we don't know the answer we will find someone who does. Love, Carol
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