Big Spoiled Child

BIG    SPOILED    CHILD

Weather  feels close  tonight
The elements  are furious.  I feel  their  rage  dire,
Hair on end,  air crackles, tantrum time -
Zeus’s wrath of heaven :  his approaching  ire.

He’s angrily  abandoned  Olympus  again  -
Storming out, tumbling the Gods’  furniture  around.
Initial rumbling grumble  in far-off sky,   
Clouds frowning shouting  out loud sounds.   

His flushed black face  -  a  threat of violence
And danger from his flash of anger  welling, 
Yielding  sudden  giant  teardrops pouring
From the truant  Titan son’s  yelling.
 
Zeus’s  right-hand thunderbolt
With traced, crazed,  forked path,              
Clutching the ground with crooked claw,
Snatching at the land with his fierce wrath,

And striking  aimlessly at mother earth,		
Till  his choleric temper   has evaporated; 
And she  absorbing all till he’s  calmed,
His passion and displeasure dissipated.

Building his strength for another fit of rage,
Now he sleeps  quiet in his Olympian bed:
And all await his next  vexed paroxysm 
Of uncontrolled  violence  and dread.

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( Written for the category of  SURREAL )

Copyright © | Year Posted 2011



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Date: 4/22/2011 5:57:00 PM
Wow, this sure is a gripping write, Sydney! Totally enjoyed reading this unique take on the challenge! Super congrats on your win :)
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Date: 4/21/2011 4:26:00 PM
Way to go Sydney, Congratulations on your success in the winner circle. Agape, Moses
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Date: 4/21/2011 2:55:00 PM
You have me shaking with dread.....such temper is to be feared!! Great writing, and great power and emotion, Syd! Congratulations on your winning the Surreal part of Debbie's contest!! ..Carrie
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Date: 4/21/2011 12:59:00 PM
Congratulations on the third place win in the contest, Sydney
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Date: 4/21/2011 12:04:00 PM
SENSATIONAL IMAGISM, SYDNEY. MANY CONGRATS ON YOUR BIG WIN. Lainie
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Date: 4/21/2011 11:27:00 AM
Congratulations on your win in the contest Syd. Love, Carol
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Date: 4/17/2011 1:45:00 PM
Oh much better! Last suggestion WITH dread. HUGS Light & Love
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Date: 4/17/2011 8:32:00 AM
OK I must tell you something & you can't laugh or get mad, those double titles are driving me NUTS [duck] boy was I rolling with this storm and then last line you threw cold water over my head or I stepped off a cliff, trasition more gradually or expand the idea after the word "absorbed" [of course i like it Syd, yet you can do a wee bit more?] Light & Love
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Date: 3/30/2011 2:37:00 PM
syd, that was the ultimate laughing trip, the comment you sent my way!! lol, you're so rigid now.. nopey, not you...anyway, this piece you created is so wickedly charming! what page of my archive did you " lift" this, oh oh...kidding again! :) brilliant! huggs, nette
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Date: 3/25/2011 2:42:00 PM
oh, wow, this is just great. Doing it like those ancient Greeks and Romans, visualizing the calamities on earth by the gods!!
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