Beyond the Counterpane

With the gentle sound of rainy days
I do recall the games I played,
while home from school, and when fevers brewed
when I was sick, and clouds ensued
to turn my stay in bed for days

Hands soothed my brow, and beads of dew
grew pearls of moisture, in rainbow hues 
The window dripped, and I was sick,
but I didn't seem to mind a bit!

Sometimes I still can see it all... 
the tiny dolls, and toys were strewn
upon the bed, around the room
where I was mending from the flu
 
Dampness on a counterpane,
thermometers and sounds of rain
will take me there......back home again...

The memory of childhood, lie
beneath a quilt of prose
stirs longing for that healing grace,
that comes again upon the page...


A mother's touch with vapor-rub
   Some toasted bread, a tender face

A playground out beyond the dew..
    The lonely swing, a misty view..

A shadow was my childhood friend,
those afternoons of sick-bed games

Imagination flew so high, a carpet ride to magic lands
I could look beyond the counterpane
Watch the sun come after rain

A tattered book of childhood poems, still holds me by the hand


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My first introduction to poetry...Robert Louis Stevenson's Childhood Garden of 
Verses  "The Land Of Counterpane"
(A sick-bed keepsake that kept me company)
For the contest: "Prose vs Poetry" sponsored by Jerry T Curtis
Copyright © | Year Posted 2014

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Chutani Avatar
August 4, 2014 at 6:02 PM
Carrie, this was a lovely write on something that has guided you through thick and thin. Congrats for recounting it with beautiful emotions and winning as well. Mohan
Dietrich Avatar
July 30, 2014 at 3:33 PM
you know I am sure I have read this poem that you referenced, but now I can't remember how the other one was. anyway, this definitely captured its essence. Congrats in the contest, You did really well.
Callus Avatar
July 30, 2014 at 2:53 PM
I love your 'abridged' interpretation of the original, even though without rhyme. Congratulations on your deserved win. // paul
A. Sharma Avatar
July 30, 2014 at 12:15 AM
Great thoughtful splendid write Carrie! Loved much ,, congrats on big win!
Nance Avatar
July 29, 2014 at 10:14 PM
aww that is the right way to have a sick day! grats on your winner, you did fabulous!! :)
Ryerson Avatar
July 29, 2014 at 8:06 PM
Oh my Carrie, your verse rivals the first and that's no lie! I can't count the times a 'faked sick' to stay out of school (shame on me) I listened to my pop's radio station all day and Uncle Remus often came on...There was a gentleman who was a genius voice imitator and he told the stories...when brer crow was disgusted he always said "Caw-caw-CAW-caw-caw"...Hilarious! And how the heck did I get off the subject? Anyway, congrats...
A   Avatar
July 29, 2014 at 6:08 PM
That is deep Carrie,,, congrats..PD
Allison Avatar
July 3, 2014 at 5:38 PM
wonderful imagery Carrie this is a delightful poem. I hope this does really well in the contest - good luck:-) Hugs Jan xxx
Parker Avatar
July 3, 2014 at 5:08 PM
I had to go read the original and found you nailed the spirit of his poem with a worthy one of your own...well done
Bauer Avatar
July 3, 2014 at 4:49 PM
beautifully written, carrie - the vapor-rub is what nailed it for me!
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