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Beware the Mocking Jay

~ Monotetra form ~ No man's eyes will ever conceive the things another mind may weave If this counsel you don't believe You are naïve You are naïve What lies behind a masked facade is oft' unfit to praise and laud Tread lightly when sipping pernod Beware the fraud Beware the fraud One cannot brush away with paint the darkened soul that's ripe with taint With deceivers do not acquaint They ruse and feint They ruse and feint From mesmeric masks turn away Treacherous hearts tend to betray A friend becomes a mocking jay And you their prey And you their prey You cannot lift the wicked veil of the beast with forked tongue and tail Though legions have tried to assail To no avail To no avail

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Gershon Wolf

Date: 1/8/2020 2:55:00 PM

Love the way you did this with different refrains for each stanza. Your pen is quite the potent sword! :) gw

Lin Lane
Date: 1/9/2020 5:27:00 AM

I very humbly accept your kind words, Gershon. Thanks ever so much.

Fj Thomas

Date: 1/1/2020 3:34:00 PM

:O ...Lin such powerful raw bite! Amazing flow.

Lin Lane
Date: 1/5/2020 5:53:00 AM

Thanks, Flo. It's so nice to see you.

Indiana Shaw

Date: 12/30/2019 11:30:00 AM

Awesome, Lin, a poem worthy of poetic students to learn and study from here, I think, I just loved the moral darkness within . . . : )

Lin Lane
Date: 1/5/2020 5:53:00 AM

How very kind are your compliments, Indiana. They're greatly appreciated.

Robert Lindley

Date: 12/29/2019 8:34:00 PM

A fine poem that reveals the darker side of humanity. People that have no decency or anything even close to a Christian morality. Your verses paint the beast in its truest colors.. A fav....

Lin Lane
Date: 1/5/2020 5:52:00 AM

Thanks so very much, Robert.

Chris Green

Date: 12/23/2019 8:54:00 AM

Nice one and quite appropriate for the deceit that has found it's way in through the shadows, but it seem the sun has come out and this bird has flown the coop. Really cool my friend.

Lin Lane
Date: 12/24/2019 8:45:00 AM

It would seem so. Thanks for the 'nice one' comment, Chris.'

John Hamilton

Date: 12/22/2019 9:56:00 PM

Mono tetra never heard of it but I like it, I see it's a mono rhyme with 8 syllables, very appealing has a poe like feel to it kind of scary and ominous, fit well with the theme. Too bad deception exists even here on the soup, nice write Sis!

Lin Lane
Date: 12/23/2019 8:25:00 AM

I discovered the form in AP and it's quite fun. It is pretty ominous, but it fit the moment, especially with regard to the site. Thanks so much, J.D.

Sandra Adams

Date: 12/22/2019 7:00:00 PM

wow... this is powerful and it's a shame that some deceive those they break bred with( so to speak) and many of us would not be aware if someone did not lift the edges of the mask for us to see what lies beneath it...great form and excellent write :) hugs

Lin Lane
Date: 12/22/2019 7:11:00 PM

Thanks so very much. Many have been fooled by people who pretend to be what they are not. Sooner or later, the truth surfaces.

Tania Kitchin

Date: 12/22/2019 4:06:00 PM

Lin, I enjoyed this, love the form, very creative and oh so true!

Lin Lane
Date: 12/22/2019 4:20:00 PM

Thanks very much, Tania. It's very disappointing when people present themselves in one manner and it turns out to be a facade.

Jan Allison

Date: 12/22/2019 2:24:00 PM

BRAVO Lin, wish folk could see through the mask and the lies yet still they follow like blind sheep. Am so glad I decided to look at the contests on soup and pen a quick pen, been a month and my muse still not behaving! :-) hugs Jan xx

Lin Lane
Date: 12/22/2019 4:19:00 PM

and BRAVO to you for signing in today. You've been missed by many. People are still wearing masks, stealing poems off Pinterest and who knows where else. What a shame some thieves call themselves a "poet." Thanks for reading this one, chick.

Tom Cunningham

Date: 12/22/2019 1:34:00 PM

Quite a dark poeish verse Lin, never heard of that form though. Well written. Tom

Lin Lane
Date: 12/22/2019 4:16:00 PM

Thank you, Tom. It's a form I sometimes use on another site...kind of addictive.