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Behold the Sun of Gold

With wistful EYES I watched him RISE; the dawning sun Aloft, he TREAD, golden wings SPREAD, and day had begun Above the GLADE, he was robed in a SHADE of palest pink I wrote a RHYME before the drying TIME of my indigo ink My eyes SQUINTED to skies blue TINTED, I watched him soar Eager to ABSORB the heat of the ORB, he warmed every pore With my need SATED, I was ELATED and stood quietly in place Cheeks of peach BLUSH, the sun's BRUSH painted on my face Then he DISAPPEARED, and as I FEARED, grey clouds hovered I was FILLED with remorse, and CHILLED once he was covered I called to the WIND and he THINNED the dark overcast skies So I could BEHOLD the sun of GOLD before tears filled my eyes Call it a WHIM, but I must search for HIM throughout the day Across MEADOWS, I live in SHADOWS; my life in sad disarray until his vibrant LIGHT is within my SIGHT, I dwell in sadness But when his rays BEAM at me, I SEEM suffused with gladness As twilight BLOOMED, I was CONSUMED with apprehension I could not PREVENT the sun's DESCENT nor quell my tension Tonight I BELIEVE I will GRIEVE until he rises again at dawn When I will GREET his SWEET warmth, shining upon my lawn. I cannot EXPLAIN the depth of PAIN I feel when he is asleep It's a VAGUE mystery; but a PLAGUE that causes me to weep I CONFESSED that I'm OBSESSED; under a spell or incantation Tell me FRIEND, do I DEFEND or END my sunlight infatuation November 7, 2020 Joseph May's In Rhymes Sublime Contest

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Date: 11/27/2020 10:18:00 AM
Jenna, I loved reading your love song to the sun... I share many of these feelings. I really liked all your internal rhymes and how carefully your constructed this whole poem to flow so well. Belated congratulations on your win, my friend.
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Date: 11/20/2020 9:55:00 AM
Wonderful rhyming Jenna using many very original rhymes. A day without sunshine is a day without life. You have a good "sunlight infatuation!" Time to grab the sunglasses! Congratulations on your win!
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Date: 11/20/2020 9:30:00 AM
Congrats on this great winner. Sara
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Date: 11/19/2020 7:46:00 AM
This is a great one Jenna. A Sun child :) I enjoyed it! Congratulations on the win! Linda
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Jenna Logan
Date: 11/19/2020 11:47:00 AM
Hi Linda, and thank you so very much.
Date: 11/19/2020 6:06:00 AM
I love the warmth of your infatuation Jenna, Congrats on your win..
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Jenna Logan
Date: 11/19/2020 11:47:00 AM
Thank you very much, Joseph. I am truly honored.
Date: 11/10/2020 7:59:00 AM
Reads like a good contender. Way to go for the contest. Thanks for the visit to my page and taking time to comment. Sara
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Jenna Logan
Date: 11/10/2020 12:21:00 PM
Thank you, Sara, and you're welcome. I enjoyed reading you.
Date: 11/9/2020 6:21:00 PM
These are positively brilliant rhymes, Jenna! Superb. G.S. in the contest! (S = Skill!) Sunlight and Splendor, Gershon
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Jenna Logan
Date: 11/10/2020 3:37:00 AM
Thank you so very kindly for your accolades, GW. They're sincerely appreciated.
Date: 11/8/2020 1:05:00 AM
Brilliant Jenna, you've certainly rose to the challenge, Good luck. Tom. Decided a day off today, PAINT I AIN'T, well that's my first line lol.
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Jenna Logan
Date: 11/10/2020 3:37:00 AM
It was such a fun challenge, Tom. Thank you, and I hope your painting is over.
Date: 11/7/2020 11:42:00 AM
Great inspiring piece Jenna, super rhyme and insightful thought too with good expression. Hope all is well, blessings always,Gordon
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Jenna Logan
Date: 11/10/2020 3:36:00 AM
Thanks for the many kudos you've offered, Gordon, Thank you.
Date: 11/7/2020 11:13:00 AM
I love internal rhymes they're probably my fave style of rhyme, so...I loved this one Jenna, should do well in the contest!
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Jenna Logan
Date: 11/10/2020 3:36:00 AM
Hi John. Thank you for liking my internal rhyme poem. It was more fun than I thought it would be. Loved the contest theme.
Date: 11/7/2020 9:23:00 AM
Well written and nice rhyme! Great Job Jenna!
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Jenna Logan
Date: 11/7/2020 9:37:00 AM
Thank you so very much, Mark. Your comments are always encouraging.
Date: 11/7/2020 8:41:00 AM
I think you need to find a balance my friend... too much and too little, is never good enough
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Jenna Logan
Date: 11/7/2020 9:36:00 AM
Yes. No pasty white skin, nor sunburn. A natural tan is best...and a balance in all things is usually best.
Date: 11/7/2020 8:08:00 AM
This is a rhyme sublime, Jenna, good luck in the contest, it's a winner in my book. Have a great weekend. Hugs, John
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Jenna Logan
Date: 11/7/2020 9:35:00 AM
Hi John. It was lots of fun to write this one. I loved the challenge and win or not, I enjoyed the contest theme. Thanks for your ever present support.
Date: 11/7/2020 6:46:00 AM
I think you have a dilemma here...nice internal rhymes and theme to your poem...
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Jenna Logan
Date: 11/7/2020 7:07:00 AM
Do I defend or end? lol I can be a sunworshipper but not to this this extent! Thanks for leaving comments.

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