Before I Rise

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If you should leave Before I rise, And the sun Yawns her first signs Of willingness, While the earth grinds And tilts to greet her, Pay my morning respects To her brilliance. And as we revolve Around her wondrous Love, Blow a kiss to her For shining on our Existence, Feel her warmth Caress your heart Her rays like fingers Massage your soul Know what it is To be loved Her beauty to be Extolled. Watch her bloom Like a rose in heavens Garden, And set in the Vapourous Trail of Love's Vermilion glow

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Sara Etgen-Baker

Date: 4/11/2024 5:10:00 PM

a soft and graceful love poem for the sun. I especially liked "While the earth grinds And tilts to greet her, Pay my morning respects To her brilliance" Only a mindful person would be able to show such respect and admiration. Your poem is worthy of POTD. Am faving, therefore. Have a pleasant evening, Sara

Hilda Greenhough

Date: 4/11/2024 9:30:00 AM

This is a notable poem. This genuine perfection of thoughts starts softly and whisper to a solitary conclusion. I appreciate your genius and enjoy your poems.

Daniel Caplin
Date: 4/11/2024 2:54:00 PM

Good Evening Hilda , I'm so pleased you enjoyed this poem , and for your lovely comments regards my poetry , they are always gratefully appreciated . Have a pleasant Evening . Daniel

Sara Kendrick

Date: 4/11/2024 4:28:00 AM

Creative lines and very descriptive. Thanks for sharing it with us. Sara K

Daniel Caplin
Date: 4/11/2024 4:33:00 AM

Hi Sara K thank you so much for your kind words they are much appreciated , Daniel