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Becoming Invisible

Painted in twilight grey,
 the stars dangle low 
over a far vallev where willows bend
 in a lone shade, 
creating lines of a face 
disappearing from hazy blur...

Upon stars, a wish holds this sigh
 with yearning that you'll be here 
to raise my eyes warm as sprinatime 
through your warmest afterglow;

Now I yearn for time shimmering 
when the pond was our ripple of ardor
and how the waves would tremble 
while I held the arms waxing the night.--
You never said your heart grew frail
as we ruffled through leaves of byways
 mimicking voices on the radio
 till lonely tunes stab me, dying along with you.


11/10/2017
Contest of  Craig Hawkins: 
Depression and Sadness
Copyright © | Year Posted 2016

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Inman Avatar
November 21, 2017 at 3:33 AM
Really lovely Nette.
Krampe Avatar
November 17, 2017 at 8:16 AM
Congrats on your win, nette.
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November 14, 2017 at 12:37 AM
Congratulations, nette on your great win.
La France Avatar
May 9, 2016 at 4:30 PM
nette, congrats on your win with this beautifully penned poem
Makama Avatar
May 9, 2016 at 1:31 PM
Excellent. This is great and awesome. A definite 7
A   Avatar
May 8, 2016 at 6:47 PM
nette, Congratulations on your win. Always ~LINDA~
A  Avatar
May 8, 2016 at 5:04 PM
Nette, Congratulations on your awesome win. Stop by and enjoy my latest blog, "American Dream." if you'd like. Hope you are enjoying your day. Happy Mother's Day **SKAT**
Vaso Avatar
April 30, 2016 at 1:37 AM
now this, I could feel every word as if it was my own! :)
Godwin Avatar
April 29, 2016 at 3:03 PM
Absolutely related to this, completely fell into the write where I recognized personal meaning in each line. I'm gonna have to Fav this so I need my memory to kick in. This poem needs no contest to be a winner ... CayCay
Andresen Avatar
April 29, 2016 at 7:35 AM
- Invisible or visible ........ I will always see you my friend Nette :) - Good luck in the contest - hugs // Sun :)
Marcum Wong Avatar
April 29, 2016 at 12:24 AM
Dear Nette, I feel that your right brain and left brain are so perfectly balanced that your poetry has androgynous qualities which in itself is unusual. Most poets lean one way or the other when writing. That is one of the reasons you are such a great poet. I love your style and the way your intellect always inspires. This is wonderful! You are wrong about your poem Nette, yours blows mine out of the water! #7 : )
Dietrich Avatar
April 28, 2016 at 9:13 PM
Great imagery . this is sure to rate high with Skat!!! I am hoping my re-entry makes it (fingers double crossed, haha)
Ashe Avatar
April 28, 2016 at 6:52 PM
With this write your visibility is made all the more apparent! The best to you in this contest Nette! :-)
Callus Avatar
April 28, 2016 at 5:42 PM
Isolation and desolation ... a burden that an 'invisible' person has to carry. Neither wind nor rain are strong enough to erase the feelings of pain and helplessness. If only someone were to offer an ear or a helping hand! ~ Once again, your poem does you proud, Nette! ~ hugs // paul
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