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Midnight groans so quietly From a tower far below, Stars within the pathway Give off a charcoal tinge, And darkness roves, alone Farther than my throbbing glance And moves back into a shade Like the deepening of these eyes Where the pale glimmer withers Past ghastly streaks of mourning Like ashes, through the night Setting the sun, to be gone Constellations peacefully gather, like an acrobat, falling to sadness The moon peruses, a small light, overseeing time's twisting fate Night slowly fades into another gem Alone, pierced by stars. 11/10/2017 Contest of Craig Hawkins: Depression and Sadness

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Date: 11/21/2017 3:33:00 AM
Really lovely Nette.
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Date: 11/17/2017 8:16:00 AM
Congrats on your win, nette.
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Date: 11/14/2017 12:37:00 AM
Congratulations, nette on your great win.
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Date: 5/9/2016 4:30:00 PM
nette, congrats on your win with this beautifully penned poem
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Date: 5/9/2016 1:31:00 PM
Excellent. This is great and awesome. A definite 7
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Date: 5/8/2016 6:47:00 PM
nette, Congratulations on your win. Always ~LINDA~
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Date: 5/8/2016 5:04:00 PM
Nette, Congratulations on your awesome win. Stop by and enjoy my latest blog, "American Dream." if you'd like. Hope you are enjoying your day. Happy Mother's Day **SKAT**
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Date: 4/30/2016 1:37:00 AM
now this, I could feel every word as if it was my own! :)
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Date: 4/29/2016 3:03:00 PM
Absolutely related to this, completely fell into the write where I recognized personal meaning in each line. I'm gonna have to Fav this so I need my memory to kick in. This poem needs no contest to be a winner ... CayCay
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Date: 4/29/2016 7:35:00 AM
- Invisible or visible ........ I will always see you my friend Nette :) - Good luck in the contest - hugs // Sun :)
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Date: 4/29/2016 12:24:00 AM
Dear Nette, I feel that your right brain and left brain are so perfectly balanced that your poetry has androgynous qualities which in itself is unusual. Most poets lean one way or the other when writing. That is one of the reasons you are such a great poet. I love your style and the way your intellect always inspires. This is wonderful! You are wrong about your poem Nette, yours blows mine out of the water! #7 : )
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Date: 4/28/2016 9:13:00 PM
Great imagery . this is sure to rate high with Skat!!! I am hoping my re-entry makes it (fingers double crossed, haha)
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Date: 4/28/2016 6:52:00 PM
With this write your visibility is made all the more apparent! The best to you in this contest Nette! :-)
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Date: 4/28/2016 5:42:00 PM
Isolation and desolation ... a burden that an 'invisible' person has to carry. Neither wind nor rain are strong enough to erase the feelings of pain and helplessness. If only someone were to offer an ear or a helping hand! ~ Once again, your poem does you proud, Nette! ~ hugs // paul
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Date: 4/28/2016 5:13:00 PM
Desolate experience, the things that have stuck to the soul in the form of unheard pining. Outstanding, disturbing poetry indelibly marked!
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