Beautiful Scars

She sometimes hears him moaning in his sleep,
and if he wakens, often he shows shame
to have his woman hear him softly weep,
“I should have died instead, for I’m to blame.”

He coughs (from scars inside him). His wife aches
To know her husband carries in his heart
a pain as deep as that large scar that makes
folks stare at him!  Oh, guilt and pain depart! -
She screams inside her brain, but they do not.

She cradles him, this great big brawny guy,
a hero fireman who so bravely fought
as ashes filled a blue September sky.
Oh, how she wishes she could make him see
how beautiful, with scars and all, is he!
Copyright © | Year Posted 2015

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Carter Avatar
January 14, 2016 at 10:04 PM
I like the storied nature of this one. Easy to follow along with the visuals and the emotions as well. Well done
Lindley Avatar
December 16, 2015 at 8:19 AM
Just now found this truly wonderful sonnet my friend! I've never seen a sonnet in this form ,with two five verse ending stanza's like that but nothing could take away from this piece as its message, flow, rhyme and heart excels that much . Definitely a super 10 in my book.
Fisher Avatar
December 1, 2015 at 7:45 PM
This is such a well written sonnet on an emotional subject...love the flow and rhythm.
Kendrick Avatar
November 30, 2015 at 4:34 PM
Ahh!! Sad one..That would be hard on a person and on their loved ones as well..Heroes don't nessarily come away unscathed all times..Enjoyed your work must be a contest entry for I have seen several sonnets around..Thanks for stopping by..The skunk is spraying somewhere around and it has been happening for a good long while with maybe a few months inbetween the spraying but this morning it must have sprayed about time the Heat Pump can on and it got all in my house..It is better now..Sara
Kendrick Avatar
November 30, 2015 at 4:35 PM
Gives a new meaning to being skunked..Sara
Thirtyseven Avatar
November 30, 2015 at 6:34 AM
An aptly timed poem for me to read. The lady who was teaching me to take x-rays last week, her fields burnt during our first day. A day in which another part of my state burnt on a deadly front. My teacher's crops burnt, as did many of her fences. But not her home, stock, or family. Thanks to many brave firefighters. Interesting form of Sonnet too.
Austin Avatar
November 29, 2015 at 1:12 PM
Love the hero and his scars. Love the poem too. Love, daver
Austin Avatar
November 29, 2015 at 12:54 PM
Such crust! This south side of a jackass going north has belittled one of my favorite poets. Give me his name and he's dog food. Funning too. LOve, daver
Austin Avatar
November 29, 2015 at 1:13 PM
Something is screwed uip. This was meant for another poem. Love, daver
Lamoureux Avatar
November 29, 2015 at 9:47 AM
Definitely worthy of further contemplation. Food morning Andrea. Have you read Freddie's blog?
Sathasivam Avatar
November 29, 2015 at 1:58 AM
Excellent and very touching write my friend. Enjoyed reading it. Thanks for sharing it.
A  Avatar
November 28, 2015 at 2:21 PM
Andrea, Congratulations on your well-deserved win. Love SKAT
Anish Avatar
November 27, 2015 at 11:27 PM
Love overcomes pain as you show in this work. 9/11 will remain in our hearts for ages. Peace & Love Matthew Anish
Martin Avatar
November 27, 2015 at 11:36 AM
Sensitive expression of terrible event with wonderful last two lines. A 7 at least!
Wigley Avatar
November 26, 2015 at 9:25 PM
Lest we forget. A worthywrite, Andrea. Viv x
Onclaud Avatar
November 26, 2015 at 12:28 PM
splendid tribute to all brave firemen, andie... beautifully written as always!..huggs
Cheema Avatar
November 26, 2015 at 12:02 PM
So rightly she cradles him! Well deserved placement, Andrea!
Lamoureux Avatar
November 26, 2015 at 7:57 AM
This grabs the heart and squeezes. One of the best I have read so far!
Tor Avatar
November 26, 2015 at 5:29 AM
You honor all those fireman that risk their lives for us Andrea clever and winning write!
A. Sharma Avatar
November 26, 2015 at 4:07 AM
Congrats on ur wonderful win Andrea.. great pen!
Bickerstaffe Avatar
November 25, 2015 at 9:05 PM
There are many who deserve our love and respect, not the least of whom are firemen. They are brave and bold beyond belief. Well done Andrea! Best wishes, Keith 7
Canerdy Avatar
November 25, 2015 at 8:37 AM
A 7-plus for sure! Congratulations on your well-deserved win, Andrea. Janice
Kayode Avatar
November 24, 2015 at 10:48 PM
So sweet Andrea, worthy of the Placement congrats on the win...hugs
Marcum Wong Avatar
November 24, 2015 at 10:00 PM
This is such a touching and a beautiful tribute to the brave firemen who risk their lives to save ours! #7
Inman Avatar
November 24, 2015 at 8:50 PM
Beautiful touching write Andrea.
Hamilton Avatar
November 24, 2015 at 7:49 PM
Congrats Andrea a beautiful poem, a great win in the contest well deserved. JDH
Laurie Avatar
November 24, 2015 at 7:17 PM
Hello Andrea... your sonnet is a beaut dedication for those who put their lives on the line to keep us safe - thank you Andrea - Lindsay
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