Shani Fassbender Poet Free verse

Beautiful Birds

Hawk-like shrills blue jay foreshadowing majestic fierceness

As robins scurry to protect their young
flying frantically to and from the nest
The jays advancing while battle cries are sung
Our first sign of spring with the red/orange breast
bravely defending against the unwanted guest

Petite chickadee
is joined by male cardinal
sharing a feeder
Round white-cheeked friend with black cap
with red-plumaged pretty boy

Four birds beautiful on their own
flying together where I call home


Contest:  "For (Four) Beautiful Birds
Written By:  Shani Fassbender
April 25, 2011

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Kash Poet June 3, 2011 at 9:01 AM Congrats Shani on your 2nd place win with this wonderful poem..

Barbara Gorelick June 2, 2011 at 2:13 PM Congrats on your win..loved the battle cry of the jays...BG

Joe Maverick June 2, 2011 at 1:50 PM Great result for this vivid piece Shani, congrats!

Sara Kendrick June 2, 2011 at 5:48 AM Very creative win...Congrats..Sara

Andrea Dietrich June 1, 2011 at 9:09 PM Are these birds you have around your bird feeder? You create a lovely picture of them, Shani, Congratulations on your win.

Dr.Ram Mehta June 1, 2011 at 7:35 AM Congratulations on the win in the conetst of constance, Shani

Carol Sunshine Brown June 1, 2011 at 6:11 AM Congratulations on your well deserved win in Constance's "For(Four) Beautful Birds"contest Shani. Love, Carol

Joyce Johnson May 31, 2011 at 11:33 PM A beautiful sight indeed. Well done and congratulations Shani. Love, Joyce

Nette Onclaud May 31, 2011 at 9:17 PM theer you go, shani... congrats on the glory win!! :) huggs

Linda-Marie Sweetheart May 31, 2011 at 8:29 PM congrats Shani on your wonderful win in four birds contest with this beautiful entry my friend.. enjoy your top spot with luv..

Constance La France May 31, 2011 at 7:38 PM Congratulations Shani, on second place in my contest with this beautiful poem~~

Shani Fassbender May 9, 2011 at 2:07 PM I'm so sorry Constance; I have changed it for you now. My Soup Mail is on; I have been chatting back and forth with Nikko. Sorry you could not get access there to contact me. It should be up and running. Thank you. This contest was fun to do with the different forms...challenging and exciting.

Constance La France May 9, 2011 at 1:38 PM You must have your soup mail turned off, anyways, you need to change the form of your poem to Free Verse, as per the contest description~~

Constance La France May 9, 2011 at 1:34 PM Soup mail in a moment~~

Andrea Dietrich April 25, 2011 at 8:50 PM way to go with four different birds and using the forms for this contest, Shani. I bet Constance loves it. CAn't wait to try this myself. Thanks for your lovely model!!

Carolyn Devonshire April 25, 2011 at 4:33 PM Shani, you did an outstanding job combining all these forms and describing the many birds. I love the way the robin wants to protect her nest from the jays. They can be fearsome predators. Best wishes in Constance's contest! Love, Carolyn

Constance La France April 25, 2011 at 12:46 PM Thanks for supporting my contest, Well done!