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Beach Ball

It bore the colored stripes of rainbowed youth An exhaled breath of onions, hot dog, bun Slipping through the touch of French Fried fingers It rose upon a breeze into the sun A captive to a moment caught in time Its faded colors vivid in its dreams Questioning the thoughts of those who ponder What joyous secrets lie within its seams Thus, they close their eyes in vacant wander Through scents and sounds residing in its call Entertain the presence of its owner Inhale the exhaled moments of this ball Like passing ships our wakes will slowly fade Yet linger ‘neath the waves that friendship made

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Hat Bueckert

Date: 8/14/2023 9:28:00 PM

Beautifully written, congrats on you placement!

Kim Rodrigues

Date: 8/14/2023 4:31:00 PM

A lovely write with great imagery, the ball caught in time! Congratulations, John on your top placement!

Craig Cornish

Date: 8/14/2023 9:04:00 AM

John, had to read this once more---perfect iambic pentameter yet you made the rhyme scheme your own with lines two and four the only rhymes in the quatrains and then the couplet, yet it reads so smoothly that the form melts into the words. Quattordici Magnifique!

Valsa George

Date: 8/13/2023 9:09:00 PM

You have given a different perspective to the whole theme. It brings in a lot of nostalgic remembrances ! The concluding couplet, I really loved. Congratulations on your top first place win, dear John !

Unseeking Seeker

Date: 8/13/2023 7:45:00 PM

Absolutely love the nostalgia conjured out of the thin air, almost, with this delightful sonnet! Warmest congratulations on your top win, John

Di11y Da11y

Date: 8/13/2023 11:49:00 AM

Congratulations John, absolutely deserving of first place - love what you've done with the prompt. Thank you for taking the time to style it into a sonnet :)

Craig Cornish

Date: 8/13/2023 11:33:00 AM

John, you so often write "I wish I had written that" poems. This one - I'm speechless! Love it...it is writes like this that I both dwell within, and after, return to sharpen my pencil!!

Craig Cornish
Date: 8/13/2023 6:54:00 PM

Seeeee, I know a winner when I see one!!

Mike Gentile

Date: 7/29/2023 4:26:00 AM

John, such wonderful memories of my own were conjured by your marvelous seasonal write! Terrific imagery here! I really enjoyed! Happy Saturday !!

Gershon Wolf

Date: 7/28/2023 4:01:00 PM

This is awesome, John. I didn't 'check,' but it sure reads like a sonnet. Tremendous waves of nostalgia wash over me, your reader. Seriously. Publish it!! :) gw

Sam Kauffman

Date: 7/28/2023 11:08:00 AM

Wonderful, metaphoric write, John! Friendship, and summer, so beautifully expressed through a faded beach ball. Love this creatively inspired wonder! Blessings!