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Battles

The battles ended long ago with no peace won. Lifeless soldiers buried neatly in the sun. Stars and crosses left to mark the empty space. Where lust consumed the last of love's embrace. Entered in Mark Toney contest "2019 Poetry Marathon Mile 11" 2/12/2019 Taken from "Sewing Machine" 10/23/2018, for the Rithimus Divisa 3 Poetry Contest Sponsored by: Gregory R Barden

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Date: 7/24/2020 7:18:00 AM
For sure; war solves nothing...only gives us reason to go on fighting. But, unfortunately, for men there are often little other options. I pray for an enlightened humanity. Great writing. A lot said with few words.
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Date: 6/19/2020 1:42:00 PM
Congratulations on your win Sam. I've read both this and "Sewing Machine" (several times for the latter) and both pieces of work are very rich in imagery. The beauty of poetry for me is it can mean different things to different people. Across both poems I picked up themes of loss, futility and inevitability.
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Date: 6/18/2020 11:17:00 PM
I love the way you seem to be taking the poem in the first three lines then make a 180 degree turn! Masterfully done, Fran. Powerful images. Congratulations!
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Francis J Grasso
Date: 6/19/2020 10:58:00 AM
Thank you, Sam. ...Fran
Date: 6/18/2020 9:02:00 AM
I love the fact that you chose a portion of the original poem that allowed you to change the perceived meaning to create a completely independent write. Very nice.
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Francis J Grasso
Date: 6/18/2020 9:21:00 AM
Thank you, James. ...Fran
Date: 6/18/2020 8:19:00 AM
A sincere congratulations on your 7th Place win in the Rithimus Divisa 3 Poetry Contest, Francis - this was such a tough one to judge, with so many wonderful writes, that it came down to small things in the end. Many kind thanks for submitting, and especially for your patience - this is a gem to be proud of! Blessings, My Friend! - the bard
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Date: 5/21/2020 10:52:00 AM
Beautiful write. Loved it.
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Francis J Grasso
Date: 5/25/2020 6:16:00 PM
thank you, lure. ...Fran